Writings From the Heart
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Comment from joemass
G'day deepwater
This is a thoughtful poem though i think it is spoiled a bit by the unusual usae of 'quest' as a noun; it's not wrong, just unusual and i think that may put some readers off a bit.
Cheers!
Joemass
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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G'day deepwater
This is a thoughtful poem though i think it is spoiled a bit by the unusual usae of 'quest' as a noun; it's not wrong, just unusual and i think that may put some readers off a bit.
Cheers!
Joemass
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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thanks Joe
Comment from Mastery
Wow! First of all, welcome aboard Fanstory, deepwater (name would be nice for the future if you don't mind) I am amazed at your work...fantastic. I would give this a six if i had one left. "Only to survive to see another moonlit night alone, Then will you be at peace with yourself" Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Wow! First of all, welcome aboard Fanstory, deepwater (name would be nice for the future if you don't mind) I am amazed at your work...fantastic. I would give this a six if i had one left. "Only to survive to see another moonlit night alone, Then will you be at peace with yourself" Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thanks Bob
Comment from Fish
Or, you could try and rob a bank, get
caught, go to prison, smoke crack,
become a homosexual or a transvestite;
then, on top of that, get out of prison,
start a cult, bilk your followers, build
a thousand mansions (but never live in
one for more than a day) and have 5 million
slaves.
Even then you might be at peace with your
self... who knows?
Nice! fish
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Or, you could try and rob a bank, get
caught, go to prison, smoke crack,
become a homosexual or a transvestite;
then, on top of that, get out of prison,
start a cult, bilk your followers, build
a thousand mansions (but never live in
one for more than a day) and have 5 million
slaves.
Even then you might be at peace with your
self... who knows?
Nice! fish
Comment Written 29-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2010
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Thanks Fish
Comment from Helen Tan
I hope at the end of this twisted road of life, I will one day be able to say the last 3 lines of your poem with ease and peace. thanks for this.
Go as a pilgrim and seek out your quest,
Far from the comforts and well-lit avenues of life,
Only to bet your soul against the human unknown,
I like the choice of words in "pilgrim" and "quest' ... there's a sense of faith in pilgrima and search for something of meaning and imporatnce in quest. To find ourselves, to understand ourselves better, we need to step into the unknown, away from comfort zones to test our limits.
Only to survive to see another moonlit night alone,
Then will you be at peace with yourself
And to be able to say, I am my best friend,
I guess it's human nature to look outwards to find contentment, happiness. There's a tendancy to wait for others to provide us happiness so we search for this person or people. Truth is, happiness is within ourselves, we cannot totally rely on others. We need to be comfortable with our own skin.
As I look down the farthest side of my life with age,
Fulfilled and understanding in all, and truly content
to have lived a life that was of my own choice
This is the reward of living life to the fullest with no regrets because you have lived on your own terms.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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I hope at the end of this twisted road of life, I will one day be able to say the last 3 lines of your poem with ease and peace. thanks for this.
Go as a pilgrim and seek out your quest,
Far from the comforts and well-lit avenues of life,
Only to bet your soul against the human unknown,
I like the choice of words in "pilgrim" and "quest' ... there's a sense of faith in pilgrima and search for something of meaning and imporatnce in quest. To find ourselves, to understand ourselves better, we need to step into the unknown, away from comfort zones to test our limits.
Only to survive to see another moonlit night alone,
Then will you be at peace with yourself
And to be able to say, I am my best friend,
I guess it's human nature to look outwards to find contentment, happiness. There's a tendancy to wait for others to provide us happiness so we search for this person or people. Truth is, happiness is within ourselves, we cannot totally rely on others. We need to be comfortable with our own skin.
As I look down the farthest side of my life with age,
Fulfilled and understanding in all, and truly content
to have lived a life that was of my own choice
This is the reward of living life to the fullest with no regrets because you have lived on your own terms.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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thank you for your comments Helen
Comment from Lady & Louis
And fully lived, too, deepwater. Fine poem; I read it twice, just to enjoy the feel of it more, and get more from its meaning. I think "intimate wealth in the company of friends" is the line that struck me most, or rather, struck the strongest chord, for that is wealth indeed. (Not that I'd object to the financial sort either, lol.)
Thank you for posting!
Louise
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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And fully lived, too, deepwater. Fine poem; I read it twice, just to enjoy the feel of it more, and get more from its meaning. I think "intimate wealth in the company of friends" is the line that struck me most, or rather, struck the strongest chord, for that is wealth indeed. (Not that I'd object to the financial sort either, lol.)
Thank you for posting!
Louise
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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thank you Louis
Comment from jwlee211
Excellent work. I love the message about exploring your own life and dont be afraid to take a chance. Venture out see what awaits. Great work
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Excellent work. I love the message about exploring your own life and dont be afraid to take a chance. Venture out see what awaits. Great work
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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thank you jw
Comment from Alpha Female
Very good piece, it flows well, and the meaning is great, keep writing, I would like to see more of your work, you obviously have a gift for poetry
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Very good piece, it flows well, and the meaning is great, keep writing, I would like to see more of your work, you obviously have a gift for poetry
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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thank you Alpha this is some of my first never did have time to write before
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I understand, I have a full time day job and only write in the evenings.
Comment from rudywalsh
A bit deep and meaningful, a true quest indeed.
You have written a good piece of free verse and I don't understand with 93 views why you have not hitt the recognized spot yet, maybe folk who can't read properly or something, I don't know, it's a fine piece by me.
The quest is all about the journey of ones life, I have noticed tho sometimes on Fanstory that people sometimes, sometimes don't appriciate proper poetry.
Take care friend, keep fighting and writing Rudy.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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A bit deep and meaningful, a true quest indeed.
You have written a good piece of free verse and I don't understand with 93 views why you have not hitt the recognized spot yet, maybe folk who can't read properly or something, I don't know, it's a fine piece by me.
The quest is all about the journey of ones life, I have noticed tho sometimes on Fanstory that people sometimes, sometimes don't appriciate proper poetry.
Take care friend, keep fighting and writing Rudy.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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Thank you rudy
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a worthy goal, to live a life making your own choices instead of having them dominated by just anyone. And I hope and trust that you will not see too many moonlit nights alone. Best wishes, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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This is a worthy goal, to live a life making your own choices instead of having them dominated by just anyone. And I hope and trust that you will not see too many moonlit nights alone. Best wishes, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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thank you Jeanie
Comment from Frances Jean
You have captured the journey well my friend. Your words are so true; from the journey of trying to find one's way in the world, experiencing all life has to offer, the ups and downs, the questioning of choices to the final acceptance that we made the best decision we could at the time - as wrong as it might have been! It seems we all go the same path as we grow older questioning and hopefully reaching contentment. Well done! Frances
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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You have captured the journey well my friend. Your words are so true; from the journey of trying to find one's way in the world, experiencing all life has to offer, the ups and downs, the questioning of choices to the final acceptance that we made the best decision we could at the time - as wrong as it might have been! It seems we all go the same path as we grow older questioning and hopefully reaching contentment. Well done! Frances
Comment Written 28-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010
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thank you for you comments Frances