Comment from bowls

Good

Interseting philosophy of life! In line two do you mean WELL LIGHTED or WELL LIT? In line three, I'm wondering if you are referring to all the unknown things, in which case you should omit the apostrophe, or if you mean the human unknown's soul, in which case the apostrophe stays. Strong visual imagery!

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2010

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Comment from Bridge

Excellent

I liked the poem. I will not be able to tell you much about the technical aspects but I can only say I liked it, I could identify with it to some extent and I found it to be inspiring
Shetu

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2010

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Thank you

Comment from janicedincic

Excellent

I like the attitude of the poem - I am my own person - like the song "I did it my way". The second line maybe you want to say "away from the comforts and well LIT avenues of life" in any case, I like the the poem and the message it sends out.

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 Comment Written 28-Apr-2010

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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2010

Thank you