Writings From the Heart
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Comment from Joan E.
I admired your soldiers soul speaking out about the sacrifices made in name of war. I also especially liked your "cross of stone" metaphor. You might consider the following edits: "that" instead of "for" and a period after "give" in line 1; a period after "mankind" in line 3; "resolution" and a period after "liberty" in line 4; a period after "history" in line 6; a semi-colon after "learned" and a question mark at the end of line 7 and at the very end.
11/12/10--I appreciated your edits. Well done- Joan
I would be pleased to re-read your work if you make revisions--just let me know and I will also revise my rating.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2010
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I admired your soldiers soul speaking out about the sacrifices made in name of war. I also especially liked your "cross of stone" metaphor. You might consider the following edits: "that" instead of "for" and a period after "give" in line 1; a period after "mankind" in line 3; "resolution" and a period after "liberty" in line 4; a period after "history" in line 6; a semi-colon after "learned" and a question mark at the end of line 7 and at the very end.
11/12/10--I appreciated your edits. Well done- Joan
I would be pleased to re-read your work if you make revisions--just let me know and I will also revise my rating.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you for the comments
Comment from tony bronk
I am a 58 year old Viet Nam veteran and I only wish that by some act of enlightenment by all of us who fought there, would have resisted the call to arms and let the war makers do the fighting, killing and tortuous deeds. If there are no solgiers to do the dirty work, there is no war. I respect your spirit and found your prose very well written, but i disagree with your premise other than hoping to learn from our past mistakes.I feel no honor in being a killer. Tony
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I am a 58 year old Viet Nam veteran and I only wish that by some act of enlightenment by all of us who fought there, would have resisted the call to arms and let the war makers do the fighting, killing and tortuous deeds. If there are no solgiers to do the dirty work, there is no war. I respect your spirit and found your prose very well written, but i disagree with your premise other than hoping to learn from our past mistakes.I feel no honor in being a killer. Tony
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
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Thanks for your comments Tony
Comment from ophremmar
This piece is rich in conviction,( even if biased) and this runs throughout the poem and inspires the reader to keep faith with the authors passion and position on war.
However the poem does not call out to the man who cares not about war nor does it employ any vivid appeals to people who have a different opinion about the human sacrifice it costs to make a hero.
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This piece is rich in conviction,( even if biased) and this runs throughout the poem and inspires the reader to keep faith with the authors passion and position on war.
However the poem does not call out to the man who cares not about war nor does it employ any vivid appeals to people who have a different opinion about the human sacrifice it costs to make a hero.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
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Thanks for your comments
Comment from artinprogress
I found your poem haunting, reminding me of all those soldiers still out there. I had to read it several times to clear up the confusion that I at first felt. I like the question you raised in the end...one we surely cannot answer.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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I found your poem haunting, reminding me of all those soldiers still out there. I had to read it several times to clear up the confusion that I at first felt. I like the question you raised in the end...one we surely cannot answer.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you
Comment from cscalia99
i thought this poem was amazing. my best friend just returned rom a tour in afganistan and i immediately called him and told him about this poem. extremely well written. the last part, "Can we rest from the toils of battle..." really struck a cord in me and my friend felt the same. great job. keep it up.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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i thought this poem was amazing. my best friend just returned rom a tour in afganistan and i immediately called him and told him about this poem. extremely well written. the last part, "Can we rest from the toils of battle..." really struck a cord in me and my friend felt the same. great job. keep it up.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you
Comment from jwlee211
Great message. Very important considering the feelings many have about our soldiers now. Although they say they oppose the war not our guys fighting it becomes hard to distinguish the difference. Great imagery.
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Great message. Very important considering the feelings many have about our soldiers now. Although they say they oppose the war not our guys fighting it becomes hard to distinguish the difference. Great imagery.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you this was one of my first
Comment from dotti_1965
The picture you paint in my mind as I read this poem is one of a soldier hoping tha his sacrifice will not go unnoticed by those who are still around. It pulls at my heart as it dose a lot of people who know people who are fighting for us. BRAVO!!
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The picture you paint in my mind as I read this poem is one of a soldier hoping tha his sacrifice will not go unnoticed by those who are still around. It pulls at my heart as it dose a lot of people who know people who are fighting for us. BRAVO!!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you this was one of my first
Comment from Sharkey
This poem is beautiful and moving, with a great deal of thought intertwined in it's verses. I read it more than once trying to make sure I really understood it. Very well done.
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This poem is beautiful and moving, with a great deal of thought intertwined in it's verses. I read it more than once trying to make sure I really understood it. Very well done.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you
Comment from yellowrosebud
This is a wonderful,Awesome poem about fallen warriors.It tell a sad true of war and the price paid that seem so senseless.War is the way that been since begin of time and the way it will be until the end of time.We honor them and pray for peace.Than you for this very well expressed poem."Rosebud"
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2010
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This is a wonderful,Awesome poem about fallen warriors.It tell a sad true of war and the price paid that seem so senseless.War is the way that been since begin of time and the way it will be until the end of time.We honor them and pray for peace.Than you for this very well expressed poem."Rosebud"
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you this was one of my first with more to come
Comment from RebelRose
Beautifully written and poignant. We need to be reminded of these facts very often as while we are enjoying our safety we tend to forget the sacrifices that are being made for that privilege.
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Beautifully written and poignant. We need to be reminded of these facts very often as while we are enjoying our safety we tend to forget the sacrifices that are being made for that privilege.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2010
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Thank you this was one of my first