Comment from June Sargent

Exceptional

This is such a great escape! Dreamland is where I want to go. Shadow dancers to waltz the night away with. Very enjoyable read . Great colorful presentation as well. A fun piece!

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021

Thanks you for reading and reviewing so much of my work. It's very awesome and generous of you. :) I really appreciate this lovely 6 star review.

Comment from Anne Johnston

Excellent

A lively poem to say goodnight by. Very good rhyming, even though you had to sacrifice a rule of grammar in one spot. Very uplifting and smooth flowing. Sweet dreams

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 Comment Written 09-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021

Thanks for reading. I've never been good at grammar, could you tell me where it is? Thanks so much.

reply by Anne Johnston on 09-Jan-2021

I think you used "saw" instead of "seen", but need it to make the rhyming work. Aren't we all allowed a bit of license to make it work. It didn't change the value of your poem.

reply by Anne Johnston on 09-Jan-2021

If you had said "I saw", it would have been right but that might have changed your meter

reply by Anne Johnston on 09-Jan-2021

Not sure whether I saved my reply. The line I referred to you said "I'd saw". The correct words would be "I'd seen" or "I saw."

reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021

Fixed, thanks to you! Thank you.

reply by the author on 09-Jan-2021

Fixed, thanks to you! Thank you.

reply by Anne Johnston on 10-Jan-2021

I have had lots of help on here. I am glad if I can help someone else.

reply by Anne Johnston on 10-Jan-2021

You are welcome