Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
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Comment from Ulla
Hi there, the form is totally unknown to me, but that doesn't mean I didn't like to reading it. Your faith in shines through very strongly. All best, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Hi there, the form is totally unknown to me, but that doesn't mean I didn't like to reading it. Your faith in shines through very strongly. All best, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Ulls, thank you! I too have never been exposed to this poetic style prior to this club challenge. I delight in new discoveries in which practice different poetic voices.
Comment from Erika Seshadri
This is lovely. It's well-written and uplifting. The message is clear. I might have given it six except the rhyme scheme word repetition with flock was a little much for me.
Overall, though, a very nice piece to be proud of.
Have a beautiful day,
Erika
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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This is lovely. It's well-written and uplifting. The message is clear. I might have given it six except the rhyme scheme word repetition with flock was a little much for me.
Overall, though, a very nice piece to be proud of.
Have a beautiful day,
Erika
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Eriks, I too thought the repetition might seem tedious, but that was the format I choose to practice. Thanks for your validation.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good religious poem. The rhyme scheme seems consistent. I like that each verse ends with some reference to the flock. However, verse 3 ends with~To which the worshippers expected to feel a foreshock! I would change this verse to also have a reference to flock for consistency in the poem. The font also could be a tad larger because most of the writers on this site are older. It would make it be easier for old folks like me to read. The visual is perfect.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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This is a good religious poem. The rhyme scheme seems consistent. I like that each verse ends with some reference to the flock. However, verse 3 ends with~To which the worshippers expected to feel a foreshock! I would change this verse to also have a reference to flock for consistency in the poem. The font also could be a tad larger because most of the writers on this site are older. It would make it be easier for old folks like me to read. The visual is perfect.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Sandra, I appreciate your learned insight and comments.
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You are welcome. I enjoy your writings.
Comment from leather
Always, it seems, new poetic forms make their appearance and stump me. This one is intimidating in its requirements, but you have made it look easy. It seems as smooth as silk. I am out of sixes or I would give you one.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Always, it seems, new poetic forms make their appearance and stump me. This one is intimidating in its requirements, but you have made it look easy. It seems as smooth as silk. I am out of sixes or I would give you one.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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leather, I smile back with great appreciation and will accept a virtual six :) Have a splendid weekend. JLR
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
What an enigmatic Canzonetta you have written. Is the unknown Elder really God himself? I like to think so. Thanks so much for sharing this with Potlatch. Blessings, Kate xx
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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What an enigmatic Canzonetta you have written. Is the unknown Elder really God himself? I like to think so. Thanks so much for sharing this with Potlatch. Blessings, Kate xx
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Katherine, I delight in the curious question, as it was intended to ponder the question, "what if an event as this came to fore, would I accept or reject the invitation out of baseless fear?"
Comment from Janet Foor
A beautiful message contained in this interesting Conzonetta poetic form. It's a new one to me but enjoyed it. Excellent repeating line.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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A beautiful message contained in this interesting Conzonetta poetic form. It's a new one to me but enjoyed it. Excellent repeating line.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
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Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Janet, Thank you! I found this style quite tricky to pull of the repeating refrain without it feeling bogged down. So thank you again!
Comment from Sugarray77
Great job on this difficult poetic form, Jim. I loved it and really liked the theme of the flock following the Lord. This form is new to me and I hope to study your verse and get a better feel for it. Well done, friend. See you at 1:00. :)
Melissa
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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Great job on this difficult poetic form, Jim. I loved it and really liked the theme of the flock following the Lord. This form is new to me and I hope to study your verse and get a better feel for it. Well done, friend. See you at 1:00. :)
Melissa
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Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thanks Mellissa, a new form for certain, see you shortly. Jim