Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'm sure Cord is sleeping in the right place, near the door, and I have a feeling that Alan will be back! The sooner Ali gets back to Cord's and starts her business in his town, the better. Let's hope Alan gets the message soon. What a ignorant man, (for want of a better name) I enjoyed this chapter, my friend, well done! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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I'm sure Cord is sleeping in the right place, near the door, and I have a feeling that Alan will be back! The sooner Ali gets back to Cord's and starts her business in his town, the better. Let's hope Alan gets the message soon. What a ignorant man, (for want of a better name) I enjoyed this chapter, my friend, well done! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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We will see Alan again quite a few more times.
Comment from BethShelby
I enjoyed this chapter. It was interesting Ali wanted to have this conversation. Times have changed a lot since I grew up and a lot of people were still virgins when they got married. We also got married a lot younger than most people do today. Cord did confirm that he saw a difference between making love and having sex, but Ali didn't have a problem with his admission he'd had sex.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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I enjoyed this chapter. It was interesting Ali wanted to have this conversation. Times have changed a lot since I grew up and a lot of people were still virgins when they got married. We also got married a lot younger than most people do today. Cord did confirm that he saw a difference between making love and having sex, but Ali didn't have a problem with his admission he'd had sex.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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He has already admitted it to her earlier. So it wasn't a shock. She was concerned, at this time, if he'd made love. LOL She was seeing if he'd been in love. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I enjoy reading your book because it's a romance novel. I will keep reading from now and will pick up the content. This is an intense discussion of making love and having sex. The dialogues are well written and the characters are interesting.
Execellent.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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I enjoy reading your book because it's a romance novel. I will keep reading from now and will pick up the content. This is an intense discussion of making love and having sex. The dialogues are well written and the characters are interesting.
Execellent.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and welcome. Please come back.
Comment from LovnPeace
Untucking his shirt, Cordero retrieved his gun from the spare bedroom and slipped (it) into his waist band
the front door. "Why (are) you here?"Alan stared at her.
"Why (are) you dressed like that?"
I (didn't)- don't want to have this conversation, but I (knew it was) -know it's coming." Cordero exhaled. "Go ahead."
A nice moral story. Just a few tiny errors. I know, sometimes we are writing we misssome connecting words. Me. I'm always hitting the comma instead og the period. Blessings, Barbara. Xo
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reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Untucking his shirt, Cordero retrieved his gun from the spare bedroom and slipped (it) into his waist band
the front door. "Why (are) you here?"Alan stared at her.
"Why (are) you dressed like that?"
I (didn't)- don't want to have this conversation, but I (knew it was) -know it's coming." Cordero exhaled. "Go ahead."
A nice moral story. Just a few tiny errors. I know, sometimes we are writing we misssome connecting words. Me. I'm always hitting the comma instead og the period. Blessings, Barbara. Xo
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Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. Those errors are dialogue and Americans don't speak grammatically correct. I want the dialogue to sound natural. In narrative it needs to be correct. I appreciate the help.
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So true. We don't. Sorry. Xo. B
Comment from nomi338
Alan Griffin Alexandra's ex-fiancé, is twisted and has a convoluted idea of sex and love. He should know and recognize that sex is the physical expression of the love you feel for your partner. Not something you do to relieve pressure. A cold shower, vigorous exercise, but better yet, controlling your greedy need for self satisfaction, works just fine. This is a really well told story. I am eagerly waiting for the next chapter.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Alan Griffin Alexandra's ex-fiancé, is twisted and has a convoluted idea of sex and love. He should know and recognize that sex is the physical expression of the love you feel for your partner. Not something you do to relieve pressure. A cold shower, vigorous exercise, but better yet, controlling your greedy need for self satisfaction, works just fine. This is a really well told story. I am eagerly waiting for the next chapter.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Unfortunately, too many people agree with him. I can name a few on FanStory. I know because they comment on my romance. LOL Thank you for the wonderful support.
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Yes unfortunately, it takes all kinds of people to make a population. They do not all have to agree or be right., They should however, be respectful.
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Sometimes they are not. LOL I try to kindly present my point but I'm sure they may not feel it the same way. One of the reasons I wrote the post on what a romance is was to answer one of them. I noticed this person reviews all of my work but not that one. HMMMM
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Please do not concern yourself over that one. There are more with you than there are against you. Never forget that.
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Thank you.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this was another dramatic chapter with quite a confrontation. I found my a few thing:
And slipped (it) into his husband
hard enough ( so) he fell,
There's nothing wrong (with) you
Now to what's next. A hug. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Hi Barbara, this was another dramatic chapter with quite a confrontation. I found my a few thing:
And slipped (it) into his husband
hard enough ( so) he fell,
There's nothing wrong (with) you
Now to what's next. A hug. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Thank you for the catches. Those are the exact areas that I did rewrites and still messed them up. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is another tense chapter, Barbara, and it looks like Alan isn't going away easily. I like that Cordero and Alexandra had that talk. It answers a lot of questions.
A couple of little things: "Why you here?" Grammatically this should be why are you here, but maybe you did this intentionally because of Cordero's accent.
"I hope too(to) someday."
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This is another tense chapter, Barbara, and it looks like Alan isn't going away easily. I like that Cordero and Alexandra had that talk. It answers a lot of questions.
A couple of little things: "Why you here?" Grammatically this should be why are you here, but maybe you did this intentionally because of Cordero's accent.
"I hope too(to) someday."
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Comment Written 11-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2022
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Yes, Cord's first language was not English. Also I had 'I hope too(to) someday.' and the grammar changer changed it. I questioned it at the time. I will put it back.) Thank you for the kind reivew.
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You're welcome, Barbara. I thought that might be the case, but I don't think I've noticed you showing it in his dialogue before. :)
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I have. And because it's dialogue it doesn't have to be grammatically correct. Often dialogue is not. We don't speak grammatically correct. Or at least Americans don't.
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Yes, I agree, grammar correctness isn't needed in dialogue if it's meant to be the natural way of the character's speaking.