The Trollop
Illegal but lucrative.41 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
You have a good western story here, told in smooth flowing, easy to read rhymes. You top it off with a humorous, unexpected ending. "You're in luck if you have a sensitive behind." Thanks for an afternoon chuckle.
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You have a good western story here, told in smooth flowing, easy to read rhymes. You top it off with a humorous, unexpected ending. "You're in luck if you have a sensitive behind." Thanks for an afternoon chuckle.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a fun write about this girl of ill-repute adding stealing to her sins and caught in the act here and once she earned her money this way it is hard to changer her ways, you made me smile with this amusing story in rhyme Willie, love Dolly x
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This is a fun write about this girl of ill-repute adding stealing to her sins and caught in the act here and once she earned her money this way it is hard to changer her ways, you made me smile with this amusing story in rhyme Willie, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Willie,
This is a well written funny Western story in rhyme. Maybe the cowboy should start keeping his voice down and his wallet in his front pocket or on a chain. Though I don't think those chains were around then.
Keep writing and stay happy.
I am glad it had a happy ending and a moral.
Kee writing and stay healthy.
Joan
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Hi Willie,
This is a well written funny Western story in rhyme. Maybe the cowboy should start keeping his voice down and his wallet in his front pocket or on a chain. Though I don't think those chains were around then.
Keep writing and stay happy.
I am glad it had a happy ending and a moral.
Kee writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
Comment from susand3022
Hi Willie, it's fun to read you again. I really liked the story it was a lot of fun to read.
I was confused, though, when I got to the fourth stanza and the rhyme fell out. It seemed as though you added an extra rhymed line to the previous stanza to benefit the story, which I can totally see, but perhaps you should have made the third a 5-line stanza, then your rhyme scheme would have been kept fairly intact for the rest of the poem.
Again, it is a really fun read. :) Susan
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Hi Willie, it's fun to read you again. I really liked the story it was a lot of fun to read.
I was confused, though, when I got to the fourth stanza and the rhyme fell out. It seemed as though you added an extra rhymed line to the previous stanza to benefit the story, which I can totally see, but perhaps you should have made the third a 5-line stanza, then your rhyme scheme would have been kept fairly intact for the rest of the poem.
Again, it is a really fun read. :) Susan
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I love the picture and the story Willie. It is so true. Men can be so eager to brag and shar their good fortune but there is nearly always some predictor close by who is very skilled at stealing your good fortune away from you. LOL Well done. Nancy:)
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I love the picture and the story Willie. It is so true. Men can be so eager to brag and shar their good fortune but there is nearly always some predictor close by who is very skilled at stealing your good fortune away from you. LOL Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
Comment from Michaela Moore
HA! I love rhyming ballads. Especially great ones, and this one, as you probably already know, is great! First, the scene and characters are as crystal clear as watching the silver screen. Second, the plot is cleaver and has several twists of surprise for the reader. And then, third, your rhymes and rhythm are seamless. What a romp!
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HA! I love rhyming ballads. Especially great ones, and this one, as you probably already know, is great! First, the scene and characters are as crystal clear as watching the silver screen. Second, the plot is cleaver and has several twists of surprise for the reader. And then, third, your rhymes and rhythm are seamless. What a romp!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Willie, a good day to you, I hope this finds you well. Thanks for sharing your humorous poetic story with us. It was a humorous cautionary tale. Sure glad my butt is sensitive. Have a good day!
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Hello Willie, a good day to you, I hope this finds you well. Thanks for sharing your humorous poetic story with us. It was a humorous cautionary tale. Sure glad my butt is sensitive. Have a good day!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
Comment from Ric Myworld
As I've often said, when it comes to poetry, I wouldn't know a sonnet from sorbet. But I always enjoy reading what others have to say, and hope that I can decipher their poems as they've intended them to be understood. Thanks for sharing.
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As I've often said, when it comes to poetry, I wouldn't know a sonnet from sorbet. But I always enjoy reading what others have to say, and hope that I can decipher their poems as they've intended them to be understood. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
Comment from BethShelby
This is a cute poem. I wonder where you found the perfect picture or are you the illustrator? I see it is signed Wille, so if you are the one who drew this you are a darn good illustrator. I enjoy your western poetry.
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This is a cute poem. I wonder where you found the perfect picture or are you the illustrator? I see it is signed Wille, so if you are the one who drew this you are a darn good illustrator. I enjoy your western poetry.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2022
Comment from nomi338
Yeah, but if you are a man who has been in the mountains all by yourself and you then come into town with lots of money, the most sensitive part of your body is not behind you, it is definitely in your front. All the more if there is a female anywhere in the nearby vicinity. I have had my pocket picked a time or two.
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Yeah, but if you are a man who has been in the mountains all by yourself and you then come into town with lots of money, the most sensitive part of your body is not behind you, it is definitely in your front. All the more if there is a female anywhere in the nearby vicinity. I have had my pocket picked a time or two.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2022