Santa's Little Secret, Part One
The Authorized Hidden History of Santa Claus28 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
I think that's what I like best about your writing, you don't leave anything out. I can follow along and never get lost, and for me that's a miracle. Thanks for sharing and have a Wonderful Holiday!
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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I think that's what I like best about your writing, you don't leave anything out. I can follow along and never get lost, and for me that's a miracle. Thanks for sharing and have a Wonderful Holiday!
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much, Ric! It's so good to have you back reviewing. I hope you have a marvelous Holiday season and much health and success in '23!
Jay
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I sure wish I had a six for this. It is engaging and well-told. I was confused by "the boys" ages at first, imagining them as very young, but clearly, age is only a number and irrelevant in this story. It is timeless, as is Santa.
But Santa is finally succumbing to the effects of aging, like the rest of us, and it sounds as though he has many demons he needs to come to grips with.
I look forward to hearing Ajdin's story.
This is truly a Christmas story and I think it will do well in the contest.
The sentence that begins "Nummm" - and BEGAN jumping about
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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I sure wish I had a six for this. It is engaging and well-told. I was confused by "the boys" ages at first, imagining them as very young, but clearly, age is only a number and irrelevant in this story. It is timeless, as is Santa.
But Santa is finally succumbing to the effects of aging, like the rest of us, and it sounds as though he has many demons he needs to come to grips with.
I look forward to hearing Ajdin's story.
This is truly a Christmas story and I think it will do well in the contest.
The sentence that begins "Nummm" - and BEGAN jumping about
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Oh, your words are far more important to me than a six, dear Pam! I think you'll enjoy Ajdin's story, but don't look for it until probably the first week of January (after the fantasy of Santa has worn off). It will take me that long to garner enough funny-money to get it up onto first page.
Again, thank you! Oh ... OH! And for the grammar error. I changed the sentence structure which would have retained the present tense "begins", but got too much in a hurry and didn't catch the verb change. I'm so happy you did!
Jay
Comment from amahra
Ha! I knew Santa was the male equivalent of a ho ho ho, LOL! I always knew he couldn't be trusted coming down those chimneys after midnight. And I bet half the kiddies he's bringing toys to are really his.
Ok, enough joking around. Again, Mr. Jay, you dazzle me with your imagination. This was very creative and a great read. I have Fanstory money to earn, and a lot of reading ahead of me. So, I'm not checking for grammar unless it jumps out at me. And this is really long. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings and Merry Christmas.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Ha! I knew Santa was the male equivalent of a ho ho ho, LOL! I always knew he couldn't be trusted coming down those chimneys after midnight. And I bet half the kiddies he's bringing toys to are really his.
Ok, enough joking around. Again, Mr. Jay, you dazzle me with your imagination. This was very creative and a great read. I have Fanstory money to earn, and a lot of reading ahead of me. So, I'm not checking for grammar unless it jumps out at me. And this is really long. Best wishes in the contest. Blessings and Merry Christmas.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Thank you so much, Amahra. Your six was out of this world. I wasn't expecting any this late in the week. I don't think there were grammar problems. I just have to figure out why he's becoming disoriented.
Jay
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is interesting. Santa apparently has a son and grandsons and he may not remember his son's mother, Jazmin. His wife knew he strayed but fully accepts his son as her son. That's a woman with a big heart, perfect as Santa's mate. But what is going on about him getting confused? Looking forward to the next episode and, I hope, finding out what is going on.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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This is interesting. Santa apparently has a son and grandsons and he may not remember his son's mother, Jazmin. His wife knew he strayed but fully accepts his son as her son. That's a woman with a big heart, perfect as Santa's mate. But what is going on about him getting confused? Looking forward to the next episode and, I hope, finding out what is going on.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Carol. I hope to find out what's confusing Santa as well. I hope that Ajdin can help us both out. It is only going to be one more Part and probably won't post until long after Christmas is a memory.
Jay
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Have a great a Christmas and a lovely new year.
Comment from GWHARGIS
It was very long but I liked all the details in this. Your descriptions made it seem like I was watching a movie. The relationship between the father and sons. Waiting for part two. Great job. Gretchen
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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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It was very long but I liked all the details in this. Your descriptions made it seem like I was watching a movie. The relationship between the father and sons. Waiting for part two. Great job. Gretchen
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Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Yes, it was long. My nemesis, I'm afraid. Thanks for reading it.
Jay
Comment from prettybluebirds
You have quite the imagination. This is the strangest Christmas story I have ever had the pleasure of reading. It is written skillfully and deserves six stars. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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You have quite the imagination. This is the strangest Christmas story I have ever had the pleasure of reading. It is written skillfully and deserves six stars. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Thank you "Pretty". I'll take that as a compliment and I'm thrilled to receive your six lovely stars and your good wishes.
Comment from Spitfire
So Santa was a player. And if that's not bad enough, he married the church and then 'divorced' it. Now, he had to sort out his children. Maybe his final job- that of teaching elves how to make toys so he can distribute them easily among children who may or may not know who their daddy is. Smile...
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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So Santa was a player. And if that's not bad enough, he married the church and then 'divorced' it. Now, he had to sort out his children. Maybe his final job- that of teaching elves how to make toys so he can distribute them easily among children who may or may not know who their daddy is. Smile...
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Haha, you're hitting Santa below the belt. Thank you for the six stars. I don't know how you manage to keep them after the weekend. I rarely do.
Comment from Ricky1024
This is a Christmas Story Contest Entry rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with your contest Entry and have a blessed Christmas.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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This is a Christmas Story Contest Entry rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures Aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with your contest Entry and have a blessed Christmas.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Thank you, Doctor Ricky. It's always a joy to have you read my posts. I hope you have a wonderful Holiday season.
Jay