A Fear of the Pitch
Batting is not always easy28 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I understand. Why? I cannot remember. The only line I wondered of included pools of sweat??? Kids hands? Pools of sweat? Still, the fear of stepping into the box is daunting, especially since I was a pitcher and seen it happen.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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I understand. Why? I cannot remember. The only line I wondered of included pools of sweat??? Kids hands? Pools of sweat? Still, the fear of stepping into the box is daunting, especially since I was a pitcher and seen it happen.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Thank you, Tom, for reading and sharif your thoughts.
John
Comment from Sally Law
I think this sport either suits you or it doesn't. I've seen these poor kids. They're absolutely terrified. I remember hitting a home run, a perfect swing and connection. The sound of the ball hitting the bat told me everything. Everyone was surprised, and no one more than me. The outfielders raced to the fence. I ran madly not sure where the ball was going in the Florida sun. I just ran. After that, I wasn't scared anymore.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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I think this sport either suits you or it doesn't. I've seen these poor kids. They're absolutely terrified. I remember hitting a home run, a perfect swing and connection. The sound of the ball hitting the bat told me everything. Everyone was surprised, and no one more than me. The outfielders raced to the fence. I ran madly not sure where the ball was going in the Florida sun. I just ran. After that, I wasn't scared anymore.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2023
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Yup, the sound at the crack of the bat as a young ball player is exciting.
Thank you as always for reading and sharing.
Cheers. John
Comment from Ida T. Johnson
I'm still laughing at when the batter ducked as the ball approached (is that ok? LOL). I like your story. You did a GREAT job with your paltry 150 words! It reads smoothly with no halting or incomplete sentences or breaks of thought. A good, solid, coherent, and entertaining story. Good luck!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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I'm still laughing at when the batter ducked as the ball approached (is that ok? LOL). I like your story. You did a GREAT job with your paltry 150 words! It reads smoothly with no halting or incomplete sentences or breaks of thought. A good, solid, coherent, and entertaining story. Good luck!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Ida, what you get from the story is all you. Thank you so much for reading and the generous stars. John
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still smiling!
Comment from Rebecca Roberts1
You did a great job stressing the nervousness of the batter.
I loved playing ball growing up and had no fear of being hit like so many, but I understand the nervousness because so many eyes are watching.
Nice job.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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You did a great job stressing the nervousness of the batter.
I loved playing ball growing up and had no fear of being hit like so many, but I understand the nervousness because so many eyes are watching.
Nice job.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Rebecca, for your time reading this flash story.
I?m working on a baseball story, multiple chapters featuring a young girl. If I have any questions , can I run them by you?
If not, that?s perfectly alright. Cheers. John
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I laughed to myself! But yes, I would be glad to answer any questions. I never played for the school. We just played as a community and our children and grandchildren do the same. Many of the game rules weren't learned until my husband made us all learn them!
Comment from JT traveller
Wonderfully composed piece of prose. Your descriptive abilities provide the reader a vivid insight to a batter's fears.
I thoroughly enjoyed the read and wish you the best of luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Wonderfully composed piece of prose. Your descriptive abilities provide the reader a vivid insight to a batter's fears.
I thoroughly enjoyed the read and wish you the best of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Thank you very much for reading and the well wishes. John
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My pleasure. Jacqueline 😊
Comment from lancellot
Well, that happens. The body sometimes does what it's designed to do. Keep us safe. This is a nice entry. I would recheck to make sure everything is in the present tense, and what is or isn't thoughts.
can do {this.With} this pitch I won't be scared anymore!
- add space between sentences.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Well, that happens. The body sometimes does what it's designed to do. Keep us safe. This is a nice entry. I would recheck to make sure everything is in the present tense, and what is or isn't thoughts.
can do {this.With} this pitch I won't be scared anymore!
- add space between sentences.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Thank you. I appreciate your thoughts to recheck and of course simply reading my work. John
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry read well, Jim. You told the story with
great details that allowed readers to visualize it. It seems
nowadays in pro baseball there are and have been instances
where the pitcher intentionally throws at the batter's head.
I believe you didn't swing because humans are programmed
to protect themselves like fight or flight. Great twist at the
end.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Your contest entry read well, Jim. You told the story with
great details that allowed readers to visualize it. It seems
nowadays in pro baseball there are and have been instances
where the pitcher intentionally throws at the batter's head.
I believe you didn't swing because humans are programmed
to protect themselves like fight or flight. Great twist at the
end.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Thank you, Jan for reading and commenting. I appreciate your stopping by. John. (not Jim, haha)
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My apology--please accept
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😊
Comment from prettybluebirds
I can understand the fear those batters felt. One of my nieces was hit in the face with a baseball, and it broke her jaw. I never did like to play baseball after that. Best of luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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I can understand the fear those batters felt. One of my nieces was hit in the face with a baseball, and it broke her jaw. I never did like to play baseball after that. Best of luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Yikes. I hope your niece is alright!
Thank you for reading and sharing. John