Guided by Faith
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Comment from Jay Squires
Why am I left with the feeling that all will not go well with Emma, now alone in her home? This was another good chapter, with both Emma and Seth jockeying for position. I think you mentioned it before, but how much older than Emma is Seth? He acts as though he's 20 years her senior. A couple of things ...
Emma watched him jog to his place. [This is no biggy, but just a few sentences before you had her jogging for her guitar. It creates a bit of an echo in my mind.]
"Then why you worried? [Is it his speech pattern to leave off the "are"?]
I'll be looking forward to the next chapter and more on the enigmatic driver of the phantom car.
Jay
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Why am I left with the feeling that all will not go well with Emma, now alone in her home? This was another good chapter, with both Emma and Seth jockeying for position. I think you mentioned it before, but how much older than Emma is Seth? He acts as though he's 20 years her senior. A couple of things ...
Emma watched him jog to his place. [This is no biggy, but just a few sentences before you had her jogging for her guitar. It creates a bit of an echo in my mind.]
"Then why you worried? [Is it his speech pattern to leave off the "are"?]
I'll be looking forward to the next chapter and more on the enigmatic driver of the phantom car.
Jay
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Seth is almost 8 years older than Emma. He has a younger sister same age as Emma. More about that will come out later. He feels the need to take care of Emma. Hmm. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Barbara, this is a very enjoyable chapter. I like Seth and Emma. Eventhough I have grown in a time of independent feminist women, I must admit I would like being taken care of. Seth is fatherly and pushy but there's something about him I find very attractive.
Well done, my friend.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Hello, Barbara, this is a very enjoyable chapter. I like Seth and Emma. Eventhough I have grown in a time of independent feminist women, I must admit I would like being taken care of. Seth is fatherly and pushy but there's something about him I find very attractive.
Well done, my friend.
Gypsy
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. I like being taken care of myself. I raised four boys. Between them and my husband I completely enjoyed being the Princess.
Comment from nomi338
It is so nice to read about two uncomplicated people, who enjoy the company of each other. That they care for each other is obvious to others. They probably know it as well, but refuse to acknowledge it for fear of the complications of having to deal with it.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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It is so nice to read about two uncomplicated people, who enjoy the company of each other. That they care for each other is obvious to others. They probably know it as well, but refuse to acknowledge it for fear of the complications of having to deal with it.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and insight.
Comment from royowen
I love this, with Seth not quite fitting the image that Emma thinks she's attracted to, but somehow I think she may eventually know that she will be. This is a great chapter and effort, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : He set (a) folding chair 2: Have (a) seat.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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I love this, with Seth not quite fitting the image that Emma thinks she's attracted to, but somehow I think she may eventually know that she will be. This is a great chapter and effort, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : He set (a) folding chair 2: Have (a) seat.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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I just fixed those two areas. Thank you for the kind review.
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Most welcome
Comment from Sankey
Another lovely read. I guess the Crown driver will re-appear, soon. I like the way you build relationships.
Just a couple of suggestions. branches. "Have (a)seat."
"Then why (are)you worried?
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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Another lovely read. I guess the Crown driver will re-appear, soon. I like the way you build relationships.
Just a couple of suggestions. branches. "Have (a)seat."
"Then why (are)you worried?
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023
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I have fixed those to areas. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from w.j.debi
They seem like a good couple and compliment each other. Of course, taking their time is a good thing and building the relationship on daily tasks helps them figure out if they want to go further.
Excellent writing.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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They seem like a good couple and compliment each other. Of course, taking their time is a good thing and building the relationship on daily tasks helps them figure out if they want to go further.
Excellent writing.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Thank you for sharing this kind review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Emma has strong belief in her church. Your video is a wonderful example why church is important in their lives. (Allen Jackson is a great singer, too.) Reading about the character's details is a must; besides that's how you get to know the character's characteristics and behaviors.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Emma has strong belief in her church. Your video is a wonderful example why church is important in their lives. (Allen Jackson is a great singer, too.) Reading about the character's details is a must; besides that's how you get to know the character's characteristics and behaviors.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. I am a fan of Alan Jackson. LOL
Comment from Paul McFarland
Very good, Barb. The story is flowing nicely. Just the right amount of the Crown Vic guy in this chapter. Nice Alan Jackson song. I have that gospel album.
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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Very good, Barb. The story is flowing nicely. Just the right amount of the Crown Vic guy in this chapter. Nice Alan Jackson song. I have that gospel album.
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Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Alan Jackson is one of my favorite country singers.
Comment from judiverse
I like the idea of the relationship slowly developing. Nice atmosphere with some calm after the storm. I love the wieners roasted over an open fire. Haven't done that since I was a kid. Yes, Emma can take care of herself. Seth is being overly protective. I hope he doesn't overdo it. I'm hoping Emma will find a job right in her hometown. That's where she's happiest. Pastor Pat asks, not askes. Great chapter. judi
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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I like the idea of the relationship slowly developing. Nice atmosphere with some calm after the storm. I love the wieners roasted over an open fire. Haven't done that since I was a kid. Yes, Emma can take care of herself. Seth is being overly protective. I hope he doesn't overdo it. I'm hoping Emma will find a job right in her hometown. That's where she's happiest. Pastor Pat asks, not askes. Great chapter. judi
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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I changed that area this morning and still messed it up. Thank you for the catch. I appreciate the kind review. Sending comforting prayers your direction.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, I think it reads perfectly okay. I really enjoyed this chapter. Seth is a very likable guy. Let's see where all this is going. I'm certainly looking forward to it. It's a great story. Ulla,:)))
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Hi Barbara, I think it reads perfectly okay. I really enjoyed this chapter. Seth is a very likable guy. Let's see where all this is going. I'm certainly looking forward to it. It's a great story. Ulla,:)))
Comment Written 23-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. I am hoping you're posting today.
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I will. It's coming out in a few minutes.