Comment from Jim Wile

Excellent

Yes, it's becoming quite apparent they won't be able to hold out much longer with denying their attraction to each other. I love this slow, steady buildup. Well, done, Barbara. It will also be interesting to know just who is in that Crown Vic. Jim

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reply by the author on 15-May-2023

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Seth and Emma are greatly attracted to one another, and it might be a seemingly just friendship to them, but mutual attraction is hard to deal with if you're not sure about the other's but it's obvious typo others, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : her friend walk(ed) by. 2: Can I push(ed) up your T shirt?

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reply by the author on 14-May-2023

I have made the corrections. I appreciate the help. Thank you for the kind review.

reply by royowen on 14-May-2023

Welcome

Comment from RodG

Excellent

This is the first chapter of your book I have read and I like it because (1) both Seth and Emma come across as real people, (2) each exchange between them is believable, and (3) you make me wonder how their relationship will develop.
I have but one slight criticism. I never see them. I assume you've described them physically long before this, but give me glimpses of facial expressions. This can be done with short tags. Example: He gave her a shy smile as she applied the cream.
Rod

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reply by the author on 14-May-2023

I did describe them earlier and often still do as I feel necessary. I will consider doing it more often. Emma is a redhead with bright green eyes and Seth is muscular with a trimmed stubble for a beard. Just a little. I hope it helps. Thank you for the kind review. I'm glad you stopped by.

Comment from judiverse

Exceptional

I hope you're having a wonderful Mother's Day. I remember those Sunday dinners. It seems like we always had company or went to visit relatives. Mother always had things well in hand before we went off to church. Potatoes peeled and ready to cook, dessert made, etc. Yes, it was usually chicken. Sadie's a delight, and she gets Seth to open up a bit. Folks are noticing how Seth has taken a shine to Emma. Fun bit about the dogs. Mollie sleeps on the bed, so Ace figures he can too. To me, a little too much about the sunburn. Okay to mention, but maybe not so much detail. What's really interesting is the Crown Victoria that seems to be stalking Emma's place. Interesting that Emma's birth parents might be behind it. Several leads to follow up on. Excellent work. judi

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reply by the author on 14-May-2023

The sunburn will play a role in this story, for the next few posts. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Paul McFarland

Excellent

Very good chapter, Barb, especially about the dog sleeping on the bed. You have also hinted at something mysterious in Seth's past. This will come up again, I'm sure.

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reply by the author on 14-May-2023

Yes, it does come up again, when Seth is ready to discuss it. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

First, a happy Mother's Day to you Barbara. I hope you're getting spoiled.

Thank you for the notes explaining Emma's innocence. It gets a little tedious at times in the story, but knowing it helps.

Good chapter continuing with the story...
John

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reply by the author on 14-May-2023

Thank you for the kind review. I know in today's society it's hard to believe someone is still like that, but I do know people who are.

Comment from damommy

Excellent

I don't think whoever is in that car has good intentions. I would be a nervous wreck if I were Emma. As far as her innocence, it is rare to find someone like these days, but they're out there.

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reply by the author on 14-May-2023

Emma doesn't know about the car. Seth has kept it from her. Not sure it's a good idea. We'll see. They sure are out there. Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from GWHARGIS

Exceptional

I like the ending. Now we know a little more about the possibilities of her parents. I do like Emma's innocence. It is believable. I see her as someone who has little to no experience with men. Sheltered at home and keeping herself sheltered when she went away to school. She has nothing to draw on when Seth acts out of his normal range. Great finish to this chapter. Gretchen

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reply by the author on 14-May-2023

Thank you for the understanding. I appreciate it.

Comment from eliz100

Excellent

Maybe there is no, "exactly right" (perfect). This is another excellent chapter. Your explanation helped me understand the relationship between Seth and Emma. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.

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reply by the author on 14-May-2023

Thank you for the encouragement. Even when I go back and read my published books, I want to change something. LOL

Comment from Shirley McLain

Exceptional

Thank you for the Morther's Day wish, and the same to you. You wrote another great chapter to read. You have such a talent for these stories. Enjoy your Sunday. Shirley

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reply by the author on 14-May-2023

Thank you for the encouragement.