The Pond Awakens
3-6-9 syllables in 3 stanzas.29 total reviews
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I'll bet you took the picture yourself, my friend. In the area where I live, we have a bountiful display of ducks and geese; they fly and swim so beautifully all seasons long.
I am fortunate to live there yet it sounds like you live in a beautiful area too.
The poetry you write is so descriptive that it tells the story with panache and grace all of which show us the beauty of New Zealand's
finest.
Jesse
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I'll bet you took the picture yourself, my friend. In the area where I live, we have a bountiful display of ducks and geese; they fly and swim so beautifully all seasons long.
I am fortunate to live there yet it sounds like you live in a beautiful area too.
The poetry you write is so descriptive that it tells the story with panache and grace all of which show us the beauty of New Zealand's
finest.
Jesse
Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I like your use of rhyming and personification, two important poetic tools. I also see alliteration.
I see mallard ducks, geese and even swans in lakes near me.
Well done.
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I like your use of rhyming and personification, two important poetic tools. I also see alliteration.
I see mallard ducks, geese and even swans in lakes near me.
Well done.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2023
Comment from lyenochka
Great setting description in your 3-6-9. Each stanza smoothly flows with good use of enjambment. I feel the growing sense of noises of life from the pond, to the wind in the rushes, and finally the noisy ducks. Best wishes in the contest!
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Great setting description in your 3-6-9. Each stanza smoothly flows with good use of enjambment. I feel the growing sense of noises of life from the pond, to the wind in the rushes, and finally the noisy ducks. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2023
Comment from Debbie Pope
I like this one, too. You tell us exactly what you are about to do in your first line. You are painting a picture of the pond as it comes to life in the morning. Thanks to your words, I can see it and hear it. You make me want to be there when the quacking begins.
It truly is lovely. There's no strong message here. You are just describing the special nature of the pond--and that is enough.
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I like this one, too. You tell us exactly what you are about to do in your first line. You are painting a picture of the pond as it comes to life in the morning. Thanks to your words, I can see it and hear it. You make me want to be there when the quacking begins.
It truly is lovely. There's no strong message here. You are just describing the special nature of the pond--and that is enough.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2023
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written 3-6-9 poem penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the artwork you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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This is a very well written 3-6-9 poem penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the artwork you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
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Comment Written 15-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Thanks for your review Teri.
Comment from Faith Williams
Such lovely imagery in your poem. I particularly like the second stanza and the line, 'rises from water the sun has kissed.' Adding the rhymes in the second and third lines of each stanza was an added bonus. Thank you for sharing your beautiful poem, and best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Such lovely imagery in your poem. I particularly like the second stanza and the line, 'rises from water the sun has kissed.' Adding the rhymes in the second and third lines of each stanza was an added bonus. Thank you for sharing your beautiful poem, and best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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You have made my day with your wonderful review. I am pleased my imagery resonated with you while I shared this favourite pond of mine with you.
Thank you so much.
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I am glad though you made my day first. It is a beautiful poem, one that made me smile as I imagined the scene.
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Lovely! Appreciating nature is important.
Comment from Lady MJ
The picture truly matches the words of this poem. The imagery is great as well. As I read this, it brought back to mind a moment in time when I was in the woods near a lake early in the morning. Well written.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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The picture truly matches the words of this poem. The imagery is great as well. As I read this, it brought back to mind a moment in time when I was in the woods near a lake early in the morning. Well written.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Thanks for your complimentary review. I find the beauty of nature very inspiring... it sounds like you do too.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello, Lisa!
You are definitely speaking my language!
You have encapsulated where I live and what I call "Miller's Pond" = my haven...
Your images truly resonate with me...and I appreciate the care you took to make each of the three stanzas rhyme.
Best Wishes!
Much enjoyed!
diane
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Hello, Lisa!
You are definitely speaking my language!
You have encapsulated where I live and what I call "Miller's Pond" = my haven...
Your images truly resonate with me...and I appreciate the care you took to make each of the three stanzas rhyme.
Best Wishes!
Much enjoyed!
diane
Comment Written 15-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Greetings, Diane. I have discovered a new pond to visit and I love it! The light catches it so nicely in the morning. With the poem, I hadn't intended to have it rhyming but it wrote itself in 10 minutes and I didn't want to intervene too much. It was definitely a case of relaxing into images and sounds and letting my creative imagination take over.
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Understand completely!
Much enjoyed!
diane
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I hope you are having a lovely day. xx
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Just about to turn in for the evening!
So cold and rainy here in northern Michigan = I love it! Perfect for gardening! (I garden to stay out of trouble...:) )
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hahaha... a gardening passion certainly does keep you busy.
Sleep well... it is lunchtime here on a crisp early winter day, sunshine and blue sky.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very good poem for the contest. I wish you the very best in the contest. I very seldom enter a contest anymore basically because I don't ever win.. Patricia.
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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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This is a very good poem for the contest. I wish you the very best in the contest. I very seldom enter a contest anymore basically because I don't ever win.. Patricia.
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Comment Written 15-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Thanks for your kind words and good wishes Patricia.
I think it is still worth entering contests because it does seem to be a matter of luck as to what gets voted as winners. Also it is a good exercise for our creativity to write to a topic and see how other writers have responded to the same theme.