Guided by Faith
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Comment from Jay Squires
One of your usual, entertaining chapters, with each one, it seems, bringing Emma and Seth ever closer to their inevitable relationship.
After Emma locked the front door, [You should probably space for a scene break before this sentence ... or explain that the couple left.]
I think we'll hear more about Emma's reading class with the kiddies. I was thinking, as I read it, that all it would take is having a car run down one of the children for the township to suffer a horrendous lawsuit, with Peggy being the biggest witness for the prosecution.
Great job!
Jay
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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One of your usual, entertaining chapters, with each one, it seems, bringing Emma and Seth ever closer to their inevitable relationship.
After Emma locked the front door, [You should probably space for a scene break before this sentence ... or explain that the couple left.]
I think we'll hear more about Emma's reading class with the kiddies. I was thinking, as I read it, that all it would take is having a car run down one of the children for the township to suffer a horrendous lawsuit, with Peggy being the biggest witness for the prosecution.
Great job!
Jay
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and I will doctor up that area.
Comment from Jim Wile
Good chapter, Barbara. Poor Seth just can't bring himself to admit that Emma is for all intents and purposes his girlfriend, and he can't seem to tell her that his visits will continue because he really likes to be with her. He really is bottled up. I wonder what made him that way? Was he hurt by another relationship perhaps? Will we be learning more about his background? I hope so.
Seth doesn't seem to be trying very hard to see what that Crown Vic is all about. I wonder if he will send one of his guys on a stakeout to find out? Seems like something like that should be done. - Jim
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Only if you'll you eat with me? (eliminate the second you)
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Good chapter, Barbara. Poor Seth just can't bring himself to admit that Emma is for all intents and purposes his girlfriend, and he can't seem to tell her that his visits will continue because he really likes to be with her. He really is bottled up. I wonder what made him that way? Was he hurt by another relationship perhaps? Will we be learning more about his background? I hope so.
Seth doesn't seem to be trying very hard to see what that Crown Vic is all about. I wonder if he will send one of his guys on a stakeout to find out? Seems like something like that should be done. - Jim
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Only if you'll you eat with me? (eliminate the second you)
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Yes, Seth was hurt. It will come out in pieces. We'll discover more about that Crown Vic. I have corrected the extra 'you'. I changed that sentence as I posted and still got it wrong.
Comment from Wendy G
The car is a sign of things to come. It's just as well she knows Seth well enough now to be able to call on him day or night. Yes, it's interesting they've only known each other a couple of weeks. Seems longer. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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The car is a sign of things to come. It's just as well she knows Seth well enough now to be able to call on him day or night. Yes, it's interesting they've only known each other a couple of weeks. Seems longer. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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That's why I post the lenght of time. It takes so long to post on FanStory that it seems longer. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jmdg1954
Oh these two drive me crazy! They speak at times so proper to each other that it seems unnatural.
There's still a bit of denial between them as we wait for the budding emotions to kick in.
One line confused me a bit, that Seth wasn't sure he trusted Ray -
"Plus, I wanted to make sure you got home safely."
"You didn't trust Ray?"
"I did, but..." Seth hesitated and then pointed to her guitar. "Practicing?"
Cheers,
John
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Oh these two drive me crazy! They speak at times so proper to each other that it seems unnatural.
There's still a bit of denial between them as we wait for the budding emotions to kick in.
One line confused me a bit, that Seth wasn't sure he trusted Ray -
"Plus, I wanted to make sure you got home safely."
"You didn't trust Ray?"
"I did, but..." Seth hesitated and then pointed to her guitar. "Practicing?"
Cheers,
John
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. I don't think they speak proper. Can you point an example out. I attempt to make it very natural dialogue.
Comment from GWHARGIS
Good strong chapter here. I like that you have Emna in a place where she shows she is stronger than everyone suspects. Still very curious about the crown vic. Hope to learn about the occupant soon. I like that they banter but it isn't their only type of communication. Great chapter. Gretchen
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Good strong chapter here. I like that you have Emna in a place where she shows she is stronger than everyone suspects. Still very curious about the crown vic. Hope to learn about the occupant soon. I like that they banter but it isn't their only type of communication. Great chapter. Gretchen
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review and yes, we will soon learn more about the Crown Vic.
Comment from Sankey
Another great read, again. So the Crown driver has nothing to do with the drunk at the bakery? I look forward to more, real soon.
No spags. I am still needing to get my act together and resume writing.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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Another great read, again. So the Crown driver has nothing to do with the drunk at the bakery? I look forward to more, real soon.
No spags. I am still needing to get my act together and resume writing.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
I knew of an old boy one time who made this mistake when we had car hops at A&WROOT BERE stands. She dumped the tray in his lap telling him how the drinks would cool him off.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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I knew of an old boy one time who made this mistake when we had car hops at A&WROOT BERE stands. She dumped the tray in his lap telling him how the drinks would cool him off.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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I like that solution too. I doubt Emma could do that with hot coffee. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Paul McFarland
You are dragging this Seth/Emma relationship out. I think you will be okay if they can get together in the chapter or two. It seems like the crown vic situation should be resolved fairly soon.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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You are dragging this Seth/Emma relationship out. I think you will be okay if they can get together in the chapter or two. It seems like the crown vic situation should be resolved fairly soon.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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The crown vic issue will be settled soon. Seth and Emma will take a while longer.
Comment from BethShelby
This is good. I know waitress get harrassed and it isn't just waitresses. A few ago, women have very little they could do about it. I did a waitress job and my girls did as well and we all got harrassed. I've seen get them get harrassed but I've also seen some flirt and encourage it. Anne stood up for herself but she had some help from Seth. He is definitely looking out for her.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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This is good. I know waitress get harrassed and it isn't just waitresses. A few ago, women have very little they could do about it. I did a waitress job and my girls did as well and we all got harrassed. I've seen get them get harrassed but I've also seen some flirt and encourage it. Anne stood up for herself but she had some help from Seth. He is definitely looking out for her.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, waitresses get harrassed.
Comment from nomi338
In my time I have as I am sure most men have, flirted with attractive females. However, there are levels of flirtation that should never, ever progress to the stage of touching. If the person express genuine annoyance, it is a clear indication that you should cease and direct your attention elsewhere. There is no substitute for good and common sense.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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In my time I have as I am sure most men have, flirted with attractive females. However, there are levels of flirtation that should never, ever progress to the stage of touching. If the person express genuine annoyance, it is a clear indication that you should cease and direct your attention elsewhere. There is no substitute for good and common sense.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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It doesn't always happen the way it should. Thank you for the undestanding.