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Guided by Faith

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Can faith guide our path?

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Comment from Jay Squires
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This was an interesting encounter with Peggy and Emma's discussion with Seth about what she overheard in the restroom.

She tilted her head. "Why? You want to be seduced by her? Peggy's really pretty." [To me, this seems an odd thing to follow what Seth had said]

A good chapter, Barbara.

Jay


 Comment Written 16-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2023
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from w.j.debi
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You do a great job showing Emma's angst--she's young and still worried about what others think about her, even someone like Peggy or the women in the ladies' room. In a small town this is important because everyone gossips. It can effect social life, business, etc.
Seth comes off as caring, almost fatherly this chapter. He cares for Emma, but you can tell the age difference is still holding him back a bit. He gives some great advice.
That the couple is growing closer is shown by Emma confiding in Seth and feeling better afterward.
The story is moving along nicely. Peggy is coming off as a great foil to Emma and I find myself disliking her and her manipulative ways. I think a showdown with Seth and Peggy may be coming.

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2023
    Thank you for the kind review. You are right on target.
Comment from judiverse
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Interesting chapter. I'm glad Emma enjoyed her motorcycle ride. I'd still like to see Emma with a younger guy. As it's been brought out, she's been sheltered and still pretty innocent. Great description of her background and how her older adoptive parents sheltered her. I guess she can't help who's she's attracted to. That was a hefty meal they ordered. I hate to think of the calories. I'd go with the onion rings instead of the French fries. Peggy has her campaign going. I don't know why she thinks she's entitled to Seth, as he hasn't paid much attention to her. It sounds like there may be trouble brewing, as Peggy likes to get her own way. Its cute how Ace looks after Molly. It's kind of the canine version of Seth and Emma. judi

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2023
    Thank you for the kind review and understanding.
reply by judiverse on 16-Jul-2023
    You're very welcome. I wonder what Peggy will try, as Seth hasn't shown any interest in her. She may find a way to attack Emma, damage her reputation. judi
Comment from DeboraDyess
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This really is such a good story, Barbara. I'm sorry I've missed some of it. I try to catch up and not always leave a comment, just so I can keep up. lol

A couple of thoughts:
~ gave Emma a small hug. >> gave Emma a small hug.
~ I'll use the ladies's room >> I'll use the ladies' room >> I think it's appropriate to leave off the 's here. I wouldn't have caught it except that the way the computer pronounced it was a red flag. Then, posting it in here, Grammarly also tagged it. It suggested doing this: ladies; so you may want to consider that.
~ Did they skip dinner? It was never served. I'd think that, when Seth asked if she was ready, she'd at least mention the food. Cancel the order or get it to go or something.
! distance mesas - distant mesas

Man! That Peggy is something ELSE! I never liked the gals like her and they seem to still be around. Sad but true. lol
Great read! Thanks and many blessings,
Deb

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2023
    Thank you for the kind review. I made the corrections. I'll mention dinner.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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A very full and detailed chapter here giving us a lot more background to Emma's childhood and general background and explaining the extent of her innocence and naivety. The intimacy of the motor bike ride, I think, helped to release a lot of her pent-up emotion as increasingly she feels able to divulge more and more about her feelings to Seth whilst he appreciates the need to slow down any too hasty advances. Thanks for sharing, Barbara. Debbie

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2023
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
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I think Ace should take Molly out; Ace taking out Molly sounds like he killed her!

I've known women like Peggy and I so hope she's taken out, lol! Well, out of the picture, at least.

I enjoy the easy dialogue between these two, even when the moment is a little tense. And I got a little more background information on Emma here - I think I had missed one or two chapters and probably didn't get that.

Enjoyed the read, Barbara:-)

Pam

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2023
    Thank you for the kind review. Ace is very fond of Molly.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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These two are getting to know each other and what better way than going out to eat together and Emma is teasing Seth about Peggy and making him uncomfortable. Not sure the food sounded that appetising though, he he he, a fine post Barbara, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2023
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
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I enjoyed this chapter and the dialog particularly seemed authentic. Emma's actions, pauses etc also fit her personality and background.

Once I rode on the back of someone's Harley and I screamed the entire ride. Pulling into a small town the bike slowed down but I was still in my SCREAM. Embarrassing.

I will never do that again. It is too dangerous and much worse as a passenger.

You have an extremely good story here! Looking forward to more! Have a good day!

Alex :))

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2023
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
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It seems like Ms. Barton could be construed as being a bit of a 'B' and although she handled the confrontation well, backing down strategically, somehow I dint think that will always happen. Seth was nice to her, and feels protective, as a lot of men would be. Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2023
    Thank you for the kind review. I needed to hear the part 'Seth was nice to her, and feels protective, as a lot of men would be.' A reviewer just basically said this isn't typical.
reply by royowen on 16-Jul-2023
    I think it is, at least for me.
Comment from Douglas Goff
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Another splendid edition of Seth and Emma. You have built some not only believable characters, but some likable ones.

I think the book is moving along swimmingly!

Most enjoyable.

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2023


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2023
    Thank you for the kind review. I needed this right now. I appreciated it.