Comment from Jay Squires

Exceptional

First of all, I like your remarks to your fans. It's very personal and makes us feel like we're contributing something. So thanks.

This chapter didn't disappoint. I do have a few comments:

They're large enough it's a two person ]ob. [Though it may be intentional, in keeping with the tenor of his dialogue, I feel a connecting word like "that" after "enough"]

Grinning Seth pointed. [Unless you want him referred to as Grinning Seth, you need a comma after grinning. But while I'm on that subject, by having Seth grin, I was expecting something "funny" to happen when she looked to her left on the porch ... I guess I just don't see the significance of "Grinning Seth's" grin, LOL.]

You have good control, Barbara. I like where this is going.

Jay

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2023

Thank you for the help. When I went back to correct these errors, I found two more missing commas. I added them.

Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

I'm still frustrated with Emma. Now she's avoiding looking at him? Why? With the wall she's built between them, she and Seth will never get together. No one is perfect, but I feel Emma expects Seth to be. I'll take him if she doesn't want him, lol!

I read your author's notes about changing chapters and narrative. It's your story - write YOUR story. Not everyone will like the path it's taking, but that's okay. If you change things, others will not like it. That old addage, "You can't please all the people all the time," is evident here.

There were a few spags, but nothing you won't pick up with another read.

Keep moving it along, Barbara. You're doing great and, as I've said before, I can't imagine staying focused enough to write chapter after chapter as you're doing.

See you next week!

Pam

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2023

Thank you for the kind review. In Sunday's post, Pastor Pat helps Emma realize what's she doing. It will come together.

Comment from Goodadvicechan

Excellent

Yiuvv BRrcs good story teller. Good breakfast scene tales about forgiveness and apology. It is very easy to follow.

The story of what happened in the Hardware store is well written and easy to follow.

Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2023

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from Sankey

Exceptional

This was very dramatic. I kind of knew, if she went in there un-assisted something would happen. You do well keeping us all wanting more. Keep up the good work. No spags.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2023

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Whoever this guy is he cannot be too bright. He should know that Emma is well known and loved in this community. He is asking for trouble and if he keeps on messing with her, I am sure he is going to get much more than he bargained for.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023

Thank you for the kind review. It will out later that he's truly evil.

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

The romance is a little rocky at the moment. Such bad timing for the guy from college to show up. Thankfully, Ace was at hand. I think I'd like to have Ace around.
You capture Emma's feelings well and Seth's frustration. He wants to make things right but isn't quite sure how. Yep, he's invested whether he realizes it or not.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023

Yep, Seth is invested. LOL Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Good chapter, Barbara detailing small town camaraderie coming together to work on a project.

Emma's immaturity still drives me crazy, as does their relationship. But that's on me as I've never really read s romance novel.

Looking forward to the next chapter and the pursuit of this stalker.

Have a great Sunday,
John

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023

Thank you for the kind review. There's all sorts of romances. I do the old fashioned traditional. There's still market for them.

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Okay, I'm a little confused. I even went back to look at the last chapter... why is Emma avoiding looking at Seth? She or Seth haven't done anything wrong.

I like that Seth is so protective of emma.... it's romantic.

Thank God ace was with her. How scary for Emma.

I can't wait for the next chapter. :)

Well done!

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023

Seth made a comment at the beginning of Chapter 14 about Emma pretending to be all innocent and only wanting to treat his sunburn so she could touch his body. "Seth yanked his T-shirt over his head, stood with his feet apart, and hands on his belt buckle. "If you want to see me naked and feel my body, just say so. Don't act coy."

reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 23-Jul-2023

What? How did I miss that? I'll have to go back. It's so mean. It doesn't sound like Seth. :/

reply by Gypsy Blue Rose on 23-Jul-2023

Okay. I did read it. I have a horrible memory. Now it makes sense.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

It takes time to really trust someone in a relationship and Emma is taking her time with Seth but I expect she will see the good in him eventually. Being the victim of attacks is very unpleasant. A fine chapter Barbara, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023

Thank you for the kind review.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Poor Emma, accosted by a man she seems familiar with, but rescued by Ace from the nasty, after picking up some material things for her dog porch, is very upset by the attempted abduction, and so is Seth as a result, beautifully written, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023

Thank you for the kind review.