Guided by Faith
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Comment from nomi338
Marc Elliot is a real piece of work. I suspect that his father must assume much of the blame. If he had not indulged his son so many times in the past, he may have been forced to grow up and realize that his dad was not going to bail him out each time he made a mess of things.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Marc Elliot is a real piece of work. I suspect that his father must assume much of the blame. If he had not indulged his son so many times in the past, he may have been forced to grow up and realize that his dad was not going to bail him out each time he made a mess of things.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Yes, much of it is his parents' fault. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from damommy
Well, the little punk's father can't deny anything anymore. Thank goodness for surveillance cameras and body cams. I bet i t was a shock to Marcus when his father walked out with getting him free as usual.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Well, the little punk's father can't deny anything anymore. Thank goodness for surveillance cameras and body cams. I bet i t was a shock to Marcus when his father walked out with getting him free as usual.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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I think it was. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I can't be sure, but I'm guessing Mr. Elliott is going to try and pay Emma and her family off to keep this low profile. Anything to keep junior out of the hottest. This was very good. Gretchen
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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I can't be sure, but I'm guessing Mr. Elliott is going to try and pay Emma and her family off to keep this low profile. Anything to keep junior out of the hottest. This was very good. Gretchen
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. We'll see what Elliott's up too.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Well done, Officer Jones!! That'll teach the drunken lout! Lol, I wish this was a film so we could see Marc's face when his father walked out. He won't get away with it this time! This was a very well written chapter, Barbara. I really enjoyed it. One little nit below. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Glancing at the stack, Seth said, "This young man has quit(e) a
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Well done, Officer Jones!! That'll teach the drunken lout! Lol, I wish this was a film so we could see Marc's face when his father walked out. He won't get away with it this time! This was a very well written chapter, Barbara. I really enjoyed it. One little nit below. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Glancing at the stack, Seth said, "This young man has quit(e) a
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the catch. I have made the correction. I always appreciate the help.
Comment from Ben Colder
Looks as if George gets told what he already suspects but as a father refuses to listen. Good one, Barb. I cee nothing wrong with this write. Makes sense to me. Typical modern-day hassle with father and son.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Looks as if George gets told what he already suspects but as a father refuses to listen. Good one, Barb. I cee nothing wrong with this write. Makes sense to me. Typical modern-day hassle with father and son.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. Thank you for giving us the back story of Emma's accident. There is one small edit. "Seth decided not to argue with is (his) mentor." Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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This is another excellent chapter. Thank you for giving us the back story of Emma's accident. There is one small edit. "Seth decided not to argue with is (his) mentor." Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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I changed that sentence twice while posting and still messed it up. Thank you for catching. I appreciate the help.
Comment from BethShelby
It seems George didn't have much to say when confronted with all the evidence. It sound as them they station was fully prepared befoe George got there. Surely he didn't really believe his son didn't drink with all that stack of past violations. The story is going well.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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It seems George didn't have much to say when confronted with all the evidence. It sound as them they station was fully prepared befoe George got there. Surely he didn't really believe his son didn't drink with all that stack of past violations. The story is going well.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review. I am guessing, George knew he just was used to threatening his way through life.
Comment from lancellot
This a well written chapter. I do wonder about Marc's impromptu lecherous speech. I know you like to make it clear Marc (bad guy) is trash, and have the readers hate him. This has been done before, with the bad guy spouting off like the world's dumbest over-the-top bad movie villain. I would just recommend rethinking about it this time.
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but why [are] you here this early? Is something wrong?"
- add. Seth is well spoken.
Carl added, "The lab tested for fingerprints and DNA. They all matched your son."
- Suggest leaving out the DNA. That takes weeks.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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This a well written chapter. I do wonder about Marc's impromptu lecherous speech. I know you like to make it clear Marc (bad guy) is trash, and have the readers hate him. This has been done before, with the bad guy spouting off like the world's dumbest over-the-top bad movie villain. I would just recommend rethinking about it this time.
notes:
but why [are] you here this early? Is something wrong?"
- add. Seth is well spoken.
Carl added, "The lab tested for fingerprints and DNA. They all matched your son."
- Suggest leaving out the DNA. That takes weeks.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Marc is young and inexperienced. He's about 17 years old. Today's teenagers would act like that. I've witnessed it myself. Heck, even some younger kids. Thank you for the kind review.
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Not like that, in that situation. Highly unlikely. 22 years in Juvenile corrections. I've seen it all. But, my main point, is you've done this before with your bad guys, despite age. Remember the court scene in the last story, or that restaurant scene. Over the top confession and gloating.
Comment from judiverse
Isn't a good thing that these incidents were videotaped? George tries every which way to try to throw the blame on the police for planting the evidence, but the cameras clearly show what actually happened. Marc seems to count on his father to get him out of trouble. George is, apparently, on his way to see Emma's parents, probably to threaten them. Maybe Marc's father will finally realize his son needs help because of his drinking. Seth practically has to be dragged away from Emma's to attend Marc's interrogation. He's really being overly protective! Great chapter! The interrogation sounds very realistic. judi
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Isn't a good thing that these incidents were videotaped? George tries every which way to try to throw the blame on the police for planting the evidence, but the cameras clearly show what actually happened. Marc seems to count on his father to get him out of trouble. George is, apparently, on his way to see Emma's parents, probably to threaten them. Maybe Marc's father will finally realize his son needs help because of his drinking. Seth practically has to be dragged away from Emma's to attend Marc's interrogation. He's really being overly protective! Great chapter! The interrogation sounds very realistic. judi
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from JSD
Excellent writing. I like the way George's bluster is quickly demolished by the stack of evidence. Really well written and structured. Excellent dialogue. Looking forward to the next instalment.
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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Excellent writing. I like the way George's bluster is quickly demolished by the stack of evidence. Really well written and structured. Excellent dialogue. Looking forward to the next instalment.
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Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the encouragement.