Dazzling darkness
A free Verse Poem44 total reviews
Comment from jake cosmos aller
A very "Cosmic" poem. I loved the image chosen and I loved the images that you painted with your words i like the last few stanzas the best as it sums up the poem with a few choice words.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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A very "Cosmic" poem. I loved the image chosen and I loved the images that you painted with your words i like the last few stanzas the best as it sums up the poem with a few choice words.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Jake, thank you.
Comment from gramalot8
I enjoyed your free verse. It has a lot of imagery that draws the reader into the vast universe... looking for the light past the dark. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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I enjoyed your free verse. It has a lot of imagery that draws the reader into the vast universe... looking for the light past the dark. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Gramalot, thank you.
Comment from Boogienights
An amazing stream of consciousness, a view of a world dark blue, but still holding many mysteries. I got lost in your words, entranced by the vision. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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An amazing stream of consciousness, a view of a world dark blue, but still holding many mysteries. I got lost in your words, entranced by the vision. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from TPAC
An interesting piece, thinking a state of uncertainty one continuously return. The person facing the unknowns, preparation for whatever may might come. I found it to be a captivating read.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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An interesting piece, thinking a state of uncertainty one continuously return. The person facing the unknowns, preparation for whatever may might come. I found it to be a captivating read.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2023
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Tpac, thanks for your validation.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nicely done in free verse, Jim. You kept my attention throughout, which is hard to do with free verse. Interesting use of ship's time to add a little flavor.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Nicely done in free verse, Jim. You kept my attention throughout, which is hard to do with free verse. Interesting use of ship's time to add a little flavor.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Paul, thanks for the supportive comments. Jim
Comment from estory
Beautiful piece. I like how you handled the ode form, there is great flow to the language, and a sublime feel to it. The long, languid lines seem like slow flowing streams in the darkness. The imagery is classic pastoral romantic, and the tone is reflective, philosophical. This really reminded me of some classic romantic poetry by Wordsworth or Coleridge, stuff like Tintern Abbey and Lime Tree Bower my Prison. Here you seem to lay back and fall into the hand of the almighty, finding peace and tranquility, an escape from the anxieties of day to day life in the faith in the force that guides the universe. And that universe seems to be a reflection of the heaven that awaits us. estory
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Beautiful piece. I like how you handled the ode form, there is great flow to the language, and a sublime feel to it. The long, languid lines seem like slow flowing streams in the darkness. The imagery is classic pastoral romantic, and the tone is reflective, philosophical. This really reminded me of some classic romantic poetry by Wordsworth or Coleridge, stuff like Tintern Abbey and Lime Tree Bower my Prison. Here you seem to lay back and fall into the hand of the almighty, finding peace and tranquility, an escape from the anxieties of day to day life in the faith in the force that guides the universe. And that universe seems to be a reflection of the heaven that awaits us. estory
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Estory, my gracious, what a humbling read I have just enjoyed! My sincere thank you! 🙏🙏. Jim
Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, Dazzling Darkness, brings the reader along as this world falls away and we push forward into the vastness of "infiniteness". Each stanza of your poem peels away one more barrier between us and the ultimate being.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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This free verse, Dazzling Darkness, brings the reader along as this world falls away and we push forward into the vastness of "infiniteness". Each stanza of your poem peels away one more barrier between us and the ultimate being.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Thank you Bill, your reflective response is appreciated. Jim
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
From beginning to end, your words reminded me of being in a meditative state. Many years ago, I would sit in a dark quiet room with my back against the wall until the wall and I were one. It was spiritual, emotional, and I was totally at peace. I'm glad you can also find this place.
Moving and thoughtful words.
Pam
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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From beginning to end, your words reminded me of being in a meditative state. Many years ago, I would sit in a dark quiet room with my back against the wall until the wall and I were one. It was spiritual, emotional, and I was totally at peace. I'm glad you can also find this place.
Moving and thoughtful words.
Pam
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Thank you Pam.
Comment from JSD
Your use of language and metaphor here is admirable and assured. You certainly are a skilled writer. Personally, for free verse, I prefer there to be fewer words, more economy so that every word means and it loses any sense of prose but that is just my personal opinion. The ideas and the tone here are excellent. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Your use of language and metaphor here is admirable and assured. You certainly are a skilled writer. Personally, for free verse, I prefer there to be fewer words, more economy so that every word means and it loses any sense of prose but that is just my personal opinion. The ideas and the tone here are excellent. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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JDS, thank yoh for your honest reflection.
Comment from JT traveller
Absolutely beautiful. I wish I had six stars to give you. I thoroughly enjoyed the imagery. The thought of a person looking up to the night sky, realising that we are just specks of sand in the great infinity of the Universe. We are not even clear on our reason for existence. Thank you for your words, Jacqueline
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Absolutely beautiful. I wish I had six stars to give you. I thoroughly enjoyed the imagery. The thought of a person looking up to the night sky, realising that we are just specks of sand in the great infinity of the Universe. We are not even clear on our reason for existence. Thank you for your words, Jacqueline
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Jacqueline, thank you for your reflection on this free verse,