Sories Poetically Speaking
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Night at the Cemetery"A complete story in written as a poem.
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this Halloween Poetry contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. It was a fun poem. Good luck with the contest.
The gate keeper asked "What is the trouble? (I'm guessing poems have the same punctuation, comma after 'asked')
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Thank you for sharing this Halloween Poetry contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading. It was a fun poem. Good luck with the contest.
The gate keeper asked "What is the trouble? (I'm guessing poems have the same punctuation, comma after 'asked')
Comment Written 30-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Thank you Barbara. I had fun writing it and I'm glad you like it.
Beth
Comment from Mrs. KT
Much enjoyed, Beth, and definitely "fun!"
I lived my entire childhood across the road from a 200-year-old cemetery!
I loved walking and wandering there, but... come Halloween, it always called me a bit of trepidation - especially with the specters of Captain Swarthout and his black stallion that were said to haunt that cemetery especially on Halloween!
Thank you for the Halloween treat!
diane
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Much enjoyed, Beth, and definitely "fun!"
I lived my entire childhood across the road from a 200-year-old cemetery!
I loved walking and wandering there, but... come Halloween, it always called me a bit of trepidation - especially with the specters of Captain Swarthout and his black stallion that were said to haunt that cemetery especially on Halloween!
Thank you for the Halloween treat!
diane
Comment Written 30-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you Diane. I love roaming through old cemeteries too. I would avoid them at night, I've heard too many ghost tales. I enjoyed reading about your cemetery.
Comment from Ben Colder
Cute. You did well with this funny poem. You made rhyme each stanza. Now that takes talent which you have. Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest.
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Cute. You did well with this funny poem. You made rhyme each stanza. Now that takes talent which you have. Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the nice review and six stars. It was fun to write although it is all fantasy.
Beth
Comment from Navada
I enjoyed this festive romp in the graveyard! Funnily enough, I was thinking about the Monster Mash in the early stanzas only to see you reference it towards the end. This was a fun read - good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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I enjoyed this festive romp in the graveyard! Funnily enough, I was thinking about the Monster Mash in the early stanzas only to see you reference it towards the end. This was a fun read - good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Thank you for this nice review. I think the picture I used was from movie version of the Monster Mash. I thought about putting a video version of the song on there but I know exactly how to put into Fanstory. I'm glad you liked my poem.
Beth
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I really did - it was fun!
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Interesting premise for Halloween.
"gate keeper" should be gatekeeper.
Wonder how many readers will actually remember The Monster Mash?
Sounds like this festival was enjoyed by all.
Where else could the party have happened but a graveyard?
Strong rhymes used throughout the poem.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Interesting premise for Halloween.
"gate keeper" should be gatekeeper.
Wonder how many readers will actually remember The Monster Mash?
Sounds like this festival was enjoyed by all.
Where else could the party have happened but a graveyard?
Strong rhymes used throughout the poem.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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There are plenty of videos of the Monster Mash song if you google it. I appreciate the review and comment. I think there are enough older people on here that do remember it.
Comment from JSD
Fun indeed. Well done. A suitably spooky poem in the right entertaining tone for Halloween. Really enjoyed your jaunty rhythm and rhyme. And the story is so entertaining.
John x
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Fun indeed. Well done. A suitably spooky poem in the right entertaining tone for Halloween. Really enjoyed your jaunty rhythm and rhyme. And the story is so entertaining.
John x
Comment Written 30-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Thank you, John. I wanted it more entertaining than spooky. I'm glad you liked it.
Beth
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent entry in this poetry competition, the rhyming, the smoothness of the flowing narrative was brilliant Beth, you've done a very good job with this dear girl, you really are a skilful and talented poet, well done, blessings Roy
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This is an excellent entry in this poetry competition, the rhyming, the smoothness of the flowing narrative was brilliant Beth, you've done a very good job with this dear girl, you really are a skilful and talented poet, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Thank you Roy. Those are high compliments from a excellent poet like you. I appreciate them.
Beth
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You are indeed
Comment from dragonpoet
Hey Beth,
This ad a cute poem/about picking the right time to fight. They put their disagreement aside so the holiday could be what it should be. I like the use of Monster Mash in the poem. Though it does show our age if we know it.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest
Have a great day.
Joan
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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Hey Beth,
This ad a cute poem/about picking the right time to fight. They put their disagreement aside so the holiday could be what it should be. I like the use of Monster Mash in the poem. Though it does show our age if we know it.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest
Have a great day.
Joan
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Comment Written 30-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Thank you Joan, I appreciate you reviewing and commenting on my poem. The Monster Mash does show our age but there is a lot of videos of in in Google. I should have included one for the younger generations benefit.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What a night! I don't think you could have got more energy and Halloween entertainment into your lovely verse, Beth. It rocked along with great rhyming pattern and rhythm (only the last line of the 4th stanza broke the flow, seeming to need another syllable beat which shouldn't be difficult to insert). Well done and good luck! Debbie
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What a night! I don't think you could have got more energy and Halloween entertainment into your lovely verse, Beth. It rocked along with great rhyming pattern and rhythm (only the last line of the 4th stanza broke the flow, seeming to need another syllable beat which shouldn't be difficult to insert). Well done and good luck! Debbie
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Comment Written 30-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Thank you Debbie. I'm glad you liked my little fun poem. I see I left out the letter a in that line. Thank you for pointing that out. I have fixed it.
Beth
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I'm happy now:))