Guided by Faith
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Comment from CrystieCookie999
I think the action in this chapter contributes to the overall flow of the plot. I love reading a post here with clean language.
Congratulations on your publication!
The only suggestion I have is with this sentence:
He exhaled. "I can't go into details but after reading this, tonight makes a little more sense."
I would put a comma after details. That is because there are two independent clauses there. I like the comma after 'reading this' already.
And one more tiny suggestion, which is just something I notice with even the best of Christian fiction, is not to be afraid to use more of the interjections or fillers like "Um," or "Uh," or "Hmm." In real life, no matter how good of a communicator someone is, there have to be times when a character is not ready to speak an entire sentence. I have to work on this, too! And also I have to learn not to over-do it.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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I think the action in this chapter contributes to the overall flow of the plot. I love reading a post here with clean language.
Congratulations on your publication!
The only suggestion I have is with this sentence:
He exhaled. "I can't go into details but after reading this, tonight makes a little more sense."
I would put a comma after details. That is because there are two independent clauses there. I like the comma after 'reading this' already.
And one more tiny suggestion, which is just something I notice with even the best of Christian fiction, is not to be afraid to use more of the interjections or fillers like "Um," or "Uh," or "Hmm." In real life, no matter how good of a communicator someone is, there have to be times when a character is not ready to speak an entire sentence. I have to work on this, too! And also I have to learn not to over-do it.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the suggestions. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Wendy G
Firstly, congratulations re your book about Katherine and Gabriel - that's very exciting news. I enjoyed this chapter and feel that all is going smoothly now - which probably means there'll be a huge twist or turn coming up soon.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Firstly, congratulations re your book about Katherine and Gabriel - that's very exciting news. I enjoyed this chapter and feel that all is going smoothly now - which probably means there'll be a huge twist or turn coming up soon.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the well wishes and the kind review.
Comment from royowen
Congratulations on your new.book. Barbara, of course, I've read it. A great book. I love your stories, the men are galant, gentlemen, and protective of both virtue and safety,,your women are feisty, independent but virtuous and godly, I like that in men and women, that's how God meant us to be. Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Congratulations on your new.book. Barbara, of course, I've read it. A great book. I love your stories, the men are galant, gentlemen, and protective of both virtue and safety,,your women are feisty, independent but virtuous and godly, I like that in men and women, that's how God meant us to be. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the well wishes and the kind review.
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Most welcome
Comment from Paul McFarland
I can smell a crisis coming up. I like the way that Seth and Emma are getting along. We've probably got time for another wrinkle in their relationship, but I'm sure that you will make things work out.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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I can smell a crisis coming up. I like the way that Seth and Emma are getting along. We've probably got time for another wrinkle in their relationship, but I'm sure that you will make things work out.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed this chapter about this loving couple who have become even closer over time and I am enjoying the romance and the honest the two of them share. Congratulations on your forthcoming novel being published Barbar, how exciting is that, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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I enjoyed this chapter about this loving couple who have become even closer over time and I am enjoying the romance and the honest the two of them share. Congratulations on your forthcoming novel being published Barbar, how exciting is that, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the well wishes and your kind review. I appreciate both.
Comment from Sankey
A great read as usual ad not a spag anywhere to be found. I look forward to your next chapter each week. Hoping I can get back to writing. So much has been going on and I am full up with Phoney money!
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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A great read as usual ad not a spag anywhere to be found. I look forward to your next chapter each week. Hoping I can get back to writing. So much has been going on and I am full up with Phoney money!
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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I hope you can get back to writing too. I miss your posts. Thank you for the kind review
Comment from nomi338
Congratulations. I awarded the six for this chapter because this story's characters have become so familiar to me, they seem like real people that I could even know. This is excellent writing.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Congratulations. I awarded the six for this chapter because this story's characters have become so familiar to me, they seem like real people that I could even know. This is excellent writing.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Thank you for sharing in my happiness and this kind review.
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No worries. Your success is shared by all of us who celebrate your continued excellence.
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Thank you so much!!!!
Comment from Jacob1395
That's exciting news to hear about your novel, Barbara. I've tentatively started submitting mine to agents recently, after giving it another edit since I posted on here. I've had a couple of rejections so far, to be expected, but they've been nice rejections. Another well written chapter and it's great to see Seth and Emma's relationship blossoming. It did make me wonder what Seth was called away to. I just noticed one minor error, here you've written "could we watch the fireworks together." Did you mean to add a question mark at the end? An excellent chapter once again. I can't wait for the next post.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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That's exciting news to hear about your novel, Barbara. I've tentatively started submitting mine to agents recently, after giving it another edit since I posted on here. I've had a couple of rejections so far, to be expected, but they've been nice rejections. Another well written chapter and it's great to see Seth and Emma's relationship blossoming. It did make me wonder what Seth was called away to. I just noticed one minor error, here you've written "could we watch the fireworks together." Did you mean to add a question mark at the end? An excellent chapter once again. I can't wait for the next post.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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I was wondering about that sentence. Since the beginning of the sentence says, 'I was wondering...., I wasn't sure if I should use a question mark or not. I changed it, since you said something. I'll let my editor sort it out. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from estory
Seth and Emma are a couple at last here, complimenting each other to help the community at large, working with the youth group, and working to stop the criminals. But they still always work in some time for each other. Good luck with your book. I'm still working on mine. I can never be happy with anything I guess. estory
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Seth and Emma are a couple at last here, complimenting each other to help the community at large, working with the youth group, and working to stop the criminals. But they still always work in some time for each other. Good luck with your book. I'm still working on mine. I can never be happy with anything I guess. estory
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from damommy
Congratulations on getting your book published. I hope the same will be done for this story. Sounds like Seth's got something serious on his hands, and something tells me he should have left Ace with Emma. The good thing is that Emma finally owned up to their relationship in public.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Congratulations on getting your book published. I hope the same will be done for this story. Sounds like Seth's got something serious on his hands, and something tells me he should have left Ace with Emma. The good thing is that Emma finally owned up to their relationship in public.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.