What We See
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Comment from jmdg1954
Typical 12 yr old boys antics, the stronger preying on the weak.
Good set up for what's to come.... A young boy who has a tendency to stutter, a young mom basically his age and a new life start over.
Hopefully Ginnie will see the real Alan/David if she finds out about his past somehow.
Good stuff, Jim!
John
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2024
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Typical 12 yr old boys antics, the stronger preying on the weak.
Good set up for what's to come.... A young boy who has a tendency to stutter, a young mom basically his age and a new life start over.
Hopefully Ginnie will see the real Alan/David if she finds out about his past somehow.
Good stuff, Jim!
John
Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2024
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Thanks so much, John, for your perceptive review. You've just identified an important plot point with your last statement.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
And David was just thinking of hiring an apprentice!
and go running past my house. - There's probably a grammatical term for this, but I thing a high school teacher would say 'run past' instead of 'go running past'.
Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2024
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And David was just thinking of hiring an apprentice!
and go running past my house. - There's probably a grammatical term for this, but I thing a high school teacher would say 'run past' instead of 'go running past'.
Best wishes.
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Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2024
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Yeah, I think you're probably right. I'm going to change it. Thanks!
Comment from Wendy G
Just as well he intervened, and David is a very caring, sensitive, and wise person, but of course he'll have to watch his interactions with this kid as well. Interesting and well developed chapter. Well written too.
Wendy
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Just as well he intervened, and David is a very caring, sensitive, and wise person, but of course he'll have to watch his interactions with this kid as well. Interesting and well developed chapter. Well written too.
Wendy
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Comment Written 30-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2024
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Thanks very much, Wendy. Even though innocent of the previous charge against him, I think he's become hyper-aware of that now and won't do anything to jeopardize his new path.