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Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "End of the Road For Jane"Two very real women in not so real situation.
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Comment from Wayne Fowler
Aw, can't we at least rough 'em (Janes) up a bit?
I think I'd at least let her out to wait somewhere for her limo.
Nice work. Very well written.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Aw, can't we at least rough 'em (Janes) up a bit?
I think I'd at least let her out to wait somewhere for her limo.
Nice work. Very well written.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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She may make it a few more miles with us, but doubt she gets to Atlantic city in Rachelles car. Just a hunch. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
But even Janes can change, I've met people that that have nearly died because of their downward flighted lifestyles, but now you wouldn't recognise them from any 'normal' citizen, and that's just in our church heh heh, it shocks you when you hear their testimony, beautifully written Gretchen, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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But even Janes can change, I've met people that that have nearly died because of their downward flighted lifestyles, but now you wouldn't recognise them from any 'normal' citizen, and that's just in our church heh heh, it shocks you when you hear their testimony, beautifully written Gretchen, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Roy. I appreciate this fine review. Gretchen
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Welcome Gretchen
Comment from Esther Brown
I don't know how you do it. Poop on the white rug. Entitlement and porn stars. Somehow I must have missed this chapter before so I have already been shopping on the journey. You are excellent at poking fun and entertaining, but the underlying message to me seems clear. The dark side is a scary place, and you have to hang on for dear life sometimes or you WILL lose your soul. Good writing. Esther
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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I don't know how you do it. Poop on the white rug. Entitlement and porn stars. Somehow I must have missed this chapter before so I have already been shopping on the journey. You are excellent at poking fun and entertaining, but the underlying message to me seems clear. The dark side is a scary place, and you have to hang on for dear life sometimes or you WILL lose your soul. Good writing. Esther
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much, Esther. I'm glad you enjoyed this. The dark side is scary. It entices easily enough but getting free of it's tentacles is next to impossible. I really appreciate the nice review and the extra star. Gretchen
Comment from lancellot
A very nice chapter, and you make some point. Not sure about that no one is better than anyone else. It's a pleasant sentiment, but reality and world aren't pleasant. Good addition to the story. I would suggest increasing the font size by one factor.
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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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A very nice chapter, and you make some point. Not sure about that no one is better than anyone else. It's a pleasant sentiment, but reality and world aren't pleasant. Good addition to the story. I would suggest increasing the font size by one factor.
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Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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I will clarify. If you are a good person, no one is more important. It's all about how you treat your fellow man. Thank you for the nice review. Gretchen