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Comment from Mrs. KT
Good morning, Rachelle!
Need I write that you had far too much fun with this installment!
Good Lord!
Burst my sides when I read the following exchange:
'OMIGAWWWWWD!" I cyber-howl at her. "YOU'VE BECOME A JEWISH MOMMIE!!!!!"
Smiley face emoji from Gretchen.
Real-life middle finger from me.
(The all-caps was a nice touch!) :)
And I must share that just yesterday MY middle finger stuck our her tongue at an infuriated female drive because I had the audacity to allow a driver inch into our line from a side-street! The nerve of Bumma! TC's roads are heaving with construction, and tempers are flaring.)
Thank you for the smiles and for allowing "poor" Jane the ability to hitch a ride if she behaves!
Much enjoyed!
fondly,
diane
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Good morning, Rachelle!
Need I write that you had far too much fun with this installment!
Good Lord!
Burst my sides when I read the following exchange:
'OMIGAWWWWWD!" I cyber-howl at her. "YOU'VE BECOME A JEWISH MOMMIE!!!!!"
Smiley face emoji from Gretchen.
Real-life middle finger from me.
(The all-caps was a nice touch!) :)
And I must share that just yesterday MY middle finger stuck our her tongue at an infuriated female drive because I had the audacity to allow a driver inch into our line from a side-street! The nerve of Bumma! TC's roads are heaving with construction, and tempers are flaring.)
Thank you for the smiles and for allowing "poor" Jane the ability to hitch a ride if she behaves!
Much enjoyed!
fondly,
diane
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Love this review so much. (How dare you show generosity to another driver? Don't you know it's dog eat dog behind that wheel? Grow up, Bumma!!
Xoxoxo
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Hah!
I know.
I should.
But sometimes... it is what it is!
Hah!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You made it Rachelle! Your psyche and your physical appearance in tact! You may have even gained some experience along the way and you have a wealth of information for your muse to write some poetry! I am glad Gretchen allowed Jane to ride with you, despite her hurtful comments, but I expect Gretchen has heard a whole lot worse in the pharmacy where she works, another fine chapter in this length saga, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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You made it Rachelle! Your psyche and your physical appearance in tact! You may have even gained some experience along the way and you have a wealth of information for your muse to write some poetry! I am glad Gretchen allowed Jane to ride with you, despite her hurtful comments, but I expect Gretchen has heard a whole lot worse in the pharmacy where she works, another fine chapter in this length saga, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Let the wild rumpus start, Dolly!!!! Xoxo
Comment from Wayne Fowler
I love the point you make about apologies in the same vein as the insult. An insult on page one should not be remedied on page 9 of the second section. I will always remember a 10th grade English teacher who tried to embarrass me in front of the class, and then asked me to stay after class so he could privately apologize. I've always hated that I didn't call him out on that.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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I love the point you make about apologies in the same vein as the insult. An insult on page one should not be remedied on page 9 of the second section. I will always remember a 10th grade English teacher who tried to embarrass me in front of the class, and then asked me to stay after class so he could privately apologize. I've always hated that I didn't call him out on that.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Yep; I totally hear what you're saying here, Wayne.
Comment from Begin Again
A lesson in Backbone 101 might me needed for Gretchen (and me too probably) for giving in and not leaving the 70-something woman crying on the roadside. I can't imagine what she would have told the authorities or anyone who tried to rescue her. Good job!
Smiles, Carol
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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A lesson in Backbone 101 might me needed for Gretchen (and me too probably) for giving in and not leaving the 70-something woman crying on the roadside. I can't imagine what she would have told the authorities or anyone who tried to rescue her. Good job!
Smiles, Carol
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Gretchen has backbone, but she's just very, very compassionate and puts things into a Big Picture perspective. I'm harsher. I think every relationship has that kind of good cop/bad cop dynamic.
Thank you for your nice review. Xo
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
My sister used to refer to herself as a "bitch on wheels" when she was in full Jewish-Mommie mode (no, she's not Jewish, but I think all shiksas nderstand what you're referring to). You've shown your "bitch on wheels" side here:-)
I'm glad we're moving on and into the convention. It will be interesting to see how you portray all the FanStorians who will be there. Fingers crossed that we don't have Jane in the car on the way home.
I especially liked your last paragraph, where you use phrases like "glass-fronted sky scrapers" "see-through sentinels" and "reflect off the sun-drenched ocean waves" to describe the AC skyline. Very descriptive.
Later, bitch.
xoxo
Pam
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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My sister used to refer to herself as a "bitch on wheels" when she was in full Jewish-Mommie mode (no, she's not Jewish, but I think all shiksas nderstand what you're referring to). You've shown your "bitch on wheels" side here:-)
I'm glad we're moving on and into the convention. It will be interesting to see how you portray all the FanStorians who will be there. Fingers crossed that we don't have Jane in the car on the way home.
I especially liked your last paragraph, where you use phrases like "glass-fronted sky scrapers" "see-through sentinels" and "reflect off the sun-drenched ocean waves" to describe the AC skyline. Very descriptive.
Later, bitch.
xoxo
Pam
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Thank you! I describe myself this way: I'm very, very nice, but if you step into the ring with me, I will make it the most memorable day of your life.
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Aww, that SOUNDS like such a sweet promise. If the "ring" is a wreath of beautiful flowers and colors:-)
Comment from Wendy G
Lol. Yes, Gretchen is just TOO NICE! But at least you forced her to say those words of apology even if she didn't mean them. You sounded just like me as a mother! Now are you going to surprise me in the next chapter by having Jane truly repentant and remorseful, and explaining away her bad behaviour by saying she truly humbly wished she was just like the two of you (but of course because she had a difficult childhood ... blah blah blah ...).
Wendy
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Lol. Yes, Gretchen is just TOO NICE! But at least you forced her to say those words of apology even if she didn't mean them. You sounded just like me as a mother! Now are you going to surprise me in the next chapter by having Jane truly repentant and remorseful, and explaining away her bad behaviour by saying she truly humbly wished she was just like the two of you (but of course because she had a difficult childhood ... blah blah blah ...).
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Look at the vivid imagination on YOU, Wendy!! In my next life, I'm going to be that kind of optimistic, too!!
Thanks for the fun review! Xo
Comment from royowen
What a good idea, a fanstory international convention, it would be a good thing, i don't think I can make it though, we couldn't find the location I don't think, Jane seems to have given you girls a little bit of curry, beautifully written Rachelle, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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What a good idea, a fanstory international convention, it would be a good thing, i don't think I can make it though, we couldn't find the location I don't think, Jane seems to have given you girls a little bit of curry, beautifully written Rachelle, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2024
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Thank you very much, Roy. I appreciate it. Xo
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Most welcome Rachelle