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Lust

a tasteful erotic poem

24 total reviews 
Comment from Terror2s
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This was an interesting poem- I'm not sure the her/his next to each other worked for me although I know what you meant. Very enjoyable to read. Terror

 Comment Written 14-May-2009

reply by the author on 15-May-2009
    Yes, one of the problems of writing heterosexual poems in the English language. Thanks for a good review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Good evening Alvin, your muse must be really wide awake and willing to help you compose this sizzling poem written in -
iambic pentameter ( 10 syllables per line).
Love the rhyme scheme and the word ( fop) which I haven't seen in ages

I wish you the best in this contest.

Gert

 Comment Written 14-May-2009

reply by the author on 14-May-2009
    For clarification, we must have crossed signals. I said she feared he might be a "fop"--a meticulous man, not a "fob." Thanks for a great review. I don't know what you mean by "he's a cheat." Thanks for a great review.
reply by Gert sherwood on 14-May-2009
    I will send you the definition I found in my dictionary
    Also I believe I misspelled the word (fop)
    will be right back
    Gert
reply by Gert sherwood on 14-May-2009
    Okay correction Alvin on what I said about your lover boy being a cheat
    Here is what I found in my dictionary-

    fop

    1 [Obs.] a foolish person
    2 a vain, affected man who pays too much attention to his clothes, appearance, etc.; dandy

    Gert

    ps I will change that mistake in my review

reply by Gert sherwood on 14-May-2009
    Alvin,
    All fixed

    Gert
Comment from joan marie
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My goodness, I think I am gettine vapors. Isn't that what southern ladies say in compromising situations? Very sexy write. Was surprised. Not that you can't write anything you put your mind to just didn't expect this. But is was good and tasteful and lusty. Good title. Great writing joan marie

 Comment Written 14-May-2009

reply by the author on 14-May-2009
    Yes, exactly. Thanks for a great review.
Comment from Jenia
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I sure you met all qualification for the contest so I best wish youluck and get on with it.

I want to ask if you meant this:


her his own pole (?)

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 Comment Written 14-May-2009

reply by the author on 14-May-2009
    in her (vagina) his own pole (penis); does that clarify things? Thank you for a great review.