Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Fleeting Memories"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from fictionwriter
An interesting look at what most of us realize is a fleeting thing, but we can remember those times for years. Great job.
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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An interesting look at what most of us realize is a fleeting thing, but we can remember those times for years. Great job.
Comment Written 07-May-2010
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thank you for reading fiction
Comment from prophetess
Very well written poem. I love the way it flows, the presentation is beautiful, the message is meaningful, and the sentiment is romantic. Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Prophetess
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Very well written poem. I love the way it flows, the presentation is beautiful, the message is meaningful, and the sentiment is romantic. Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Prophetess
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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thank you again prophetess
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You're welcome.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
Really beautiful poetry you have written here, my friend. Yes i think it is important to hold unto the memories of those precious moments that bless our earthly sojourn. Nice diction. kudos
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Really beautiful poetry you have written here, my friend. Yes i think it is important to hold unto the memories of those precious moments that bless our earthly sojourn. Nice diction. kudos
Comment Written 07-May-2010
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thank you for reading perp
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
An interesting presentation, Gary. To give tribute to those you love is always good.
Her kiss's of perfection, reflected of red wine,
All boundaries removed, as our bodies intertwined,
Father Time was forgiving as we floated out to space,
Memories from that moment, lay so perfect in this place,>>these words left me in deep thought.
Good job.
Isaiah Ramesses
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An interesting presentation, Gary. To give tribute to those you love is always good.
Her kiss's of perfection, reflected of red wine,
All boundaries removed, as our bodies intertwined,
Father Time was forgiving as we floated out to space,
Memories from that moment, lay so perfect in this place,>>these words left me in deep thought.
Good job.
Isaiah Ramesses
Comment Written 07-May-2010
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thank you for reading remessesxii hope you have a happy weekend
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
What a beautiful poem that quietly and joyrully celebrates the union of real love. This is a particularly striking line: "Father Time was forgiving as we floated out to space." If I may suggest a couple of grammatical corrections:
Line 3: "she lays there" [LIES there]
Line 5: "Her kiss's of perfection" [her KISSES...no apostrophe]
Line 11: "reflect on the moment's" [reflect on the MOMENTS, no apostrophe]
I enjoyed reading this. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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What a beautiful poem that quietly and joyrully celebrates the union of real love. This is a particularly striking line: "Father Time was forgiving as we floated out to space." If I may suggest a couple of grammatical corrections:
Line 3: "she lays there" [LIES there]
Line 5: "Her kiss's of perfection" [her KISSES...no apostrophe]
Line 11: "reflect on the moment's" [reflect on the MOMENTS, no apostrophe]
I enjoyed reading this. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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thank s for the comments Jeanie and for reading
Comment from dportwood
deepwater,
It is important to remember the precious moments and good times. They tend to displace the unpleasant over time. I like your thoughts.
Duane
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deepwater,
It is important to remember the precious moments and good times. They tend to displace the unpleasant over time. I like your thoughts.
Duane
Comment Written 07-May-2010
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thank you for reading Duane have a grate weekend
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
Well.. my 'last night' wasn't as great as 'yours'- lol.. But I will reflect on the snoring and getting punched in the ribs! LOL- Great piece you have written here. I enjoyed reading it. Just beautiful- brings back memories. Betty
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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Well.. my 'last night' wasn't as great as 'yours'- lol.. But I will reflect on the snoring and getting punched in the ribs! LOL- Great piece you have written here. I enjoyed reading it. Just beautiful- brings back memories. Betty
Comment Written 07-May-2010
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thank you for reading this Betty
Comment from wierdgrace
so beautiful, and so well written, flow with emotional feelings, and I could feel the love there as the words flowed, so glad I stopped to read, well done, well said, and the picture, wow.
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so beautiful, and so well written, flow with emotional feelings, and I could feel the love there as the words flowed, so glad I stopped to read, well done, well said, and the picture, wow.
Comment Written 07-May-2010
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thank you for reading and the nice comment wierdgrace
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, wonderful picture, a wonderful tribute of the love you share with your wife. good luck with the reviewers
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this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, wonderful picture, a wonderful tribute of the love you share with your wife. good luck with the reviewers
Comment Written 07-May-2010
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thank you for reading and the comment sweet
Comment from Black Butterfly
I think this is very cleaver. because i think that everyone can recall a time when they wake up the morning after a perfect night and just lay in bed thinking about it. Excellent job thumbs up
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I think this is very cleaver. because i think that everyone can recall a time when they wake up the morning after a perfect night and just lay in bed thinking about it. Excellent job thumbs up
Comment Written 07-May-2010
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thank you for your comment and reading black butterfly