Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Your turn with the Soap"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Shirley McLain
Very good poem. It flows well and is easy to read. You told your story with few words and it read well. I did not find any spag. Good job.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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Very good poem. It flows well and is easy to read. You told your story with few words and it read well. I did not find any spag. Good job.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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thanks Tex for your review
Comment from pugrpoems
This is cool philosophy. It's like a sermonette! It is good to ponder such things as these. I enjoyed reading it, and cannot find any mistakes. Thank you, pugrpoems.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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This is cool philosophy. It's like a sermonette! It is good to ponder such things as these. I enjoyed reading it, and cannot find any mistakes. Thank you, pugrpoems.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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thank you for the review and comments pugrpoems
Comment from knowledge
I wonder if your wrote this to our politicians. I think that they are building a culture of lies. I think that they tell them so many times that the come to believe them.
Well written.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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I wonder if your wrote this to our politicians. I think that they are building a culture of lies. I think that they tell them so many times that the come to believe them.
Well written.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
Comment Written 18-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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thank you Knowledge for this review Gary
Comment from connied
We live our lives so guarded to please our partners wish,
these lines hit home for me!!
trying to be less of a people pleaser these days
thanks--enjoyed this!
Are we completely true, when living with all their whims?
Do we hide the worry and stress not having the perfect day,
Forever saying it's going to be ok, but leaving words unspoken.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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We live our lives so guarded to please our partners wish,
these lines hit home for me!!
trying to be less of a people pleaser these days
thanks--enjoyed this!
Are we completely true, when living with all their whims?
Do we hide the worry and stress not having the perfect day,
Forever saying it's going to be ok, but leaving words unspoken.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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thank you connied for this review and comments
Comment from louparis
The theme is captivating and prophetic, although the meter could be improved. How do we hide true feelings without cover of a small, harmless lie? We all do it - have since childhood, in spite of the soap.
Lou Paris
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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The theme is captivating and prophetic, although the meter could be improved. How do we hide true feelings without cover of a small, harmless lie? We all do it - have since childhood, in spite of the soap.
Lou Paris
Comment Written 18-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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thank you for your review
Comment from Connie P
I like the point you are making and the flow of words you use to make it. Our society is so conditioned to soft pedaling that we can't tolerate the truth many times.
Good write!
Connie
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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I like the point you are making and the flow of words you use to make it. Our society is so conditioned to soft pedaling that we can't tolerate the truth many times.
Good write!
Connie
Comment Written 18-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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thank you Connie for your review
Comment from patmedium
Yes ... this really puts us firmly on the spot... truth or lies. The truth may be painful to face, but not, methinks, as painful as the future discovery of betrayal. Pat.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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Yes ... this really puts us firmly on the spot... truth or lies. The truth may be painful to face, but not, methinks, as painful as the future discovery of betrayal. Pat.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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thanks again for reading Pat
Comment from laren
This is a great poem which moves me to reflect. I say I hate lyies. But I tell them very often and the excuse is that I don't want to hurt anyone.
It's very well written!
Congratulations!
Laren
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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This is a great poem which moves me to reflect. I say I hate lyies. But I tell them very often and the excuse is that I don't want to hurt anyone.
It's very well written!
Congratulations!
Laren
Comment Written 18-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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Thank you for the review Laren
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Thank you for sharing,
Laren
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welcome
Comment from tazzaangel
asking a question in a poem is a classic and i love it it always leaves me wondering and in this case ????? what would i do???? keep up the good work and thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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asking a question in a poem is a classic and i love it it always leaves me wondering and in this case ????? what would i do???? keep up the good work and thanks for sharing
Comment Written 18-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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thank you Tazz for the review
Comment from JeffreyStone
Simple truths. The first line catches the attention of the reader. I believe the poem would be more effective if you use first person, WE, throughout instead of YOU. I Like the feel of the poem and am reminded of the line by a writer whom I can't recall at the moment: We live our lives in quiet desperation.
For your consideration:
We live our lives so guarded to please our partners wish, (partner's)
JeffreyStone
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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Simple truths. The first line catches the attention of the reader. I believe the poem would be more effective if you use first person, WE, throughout instead of YOU. I Like the feel of the poem and am reminded of the line by a writer whom I can't recall at the moment: We live our lives in quiet desperation.
For your consideration:
We live our lives so guarded to please our partners wish, (partner's)
JeffreyStone
Comment Written 18-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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thanks but no