The Temptation
ancient forces at work46 total reviews
Comment from fairy77
That was a great poem and I'm glad I'm a fan.I think its about being seduced.Some words are way to advanced but maybe your trying to teach us.Succubus is a pretty strange idea,I think you like to clallenge our comfort levels.Very good liked the description.though i don't believe in it I liked it as i do most of your work.Another beauty.beth.
reply by the author on 06-May-2011
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That was a great poem and I'm glad I'm a fan.I think its about being seduced.Some words are way to advanced but maybe your trying to teach us.Succubus is a pretty strange idea,I think you like to clallenge our comfort levels.Very good liked the description.though i don't believe in it I liked it as i do most of your work.Another beauty.beth.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 06-May-2011
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Thank you very much Beth.
Comment from RazberryBullet
Interesting topic!
I've heard of the succubus, but in this poem it seems her wiles are muted.
Liked these lines: Prey to their own egg shell ego. Vanity is thy name. :)
Well done!
reply by the author on 06-May-2011
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Interesting topic!
I've heard of the succubus, but in this poem it seems her wiles are muted.
Liked these lines: Prey to their own egg shell ego. Vanity is thy name. :)
Well done!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 06-May-2011
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Thank you Ms. Rasberry.
Comment from Hanna Marie
A bit different then what I usually read. This sigh is to learn and I feel explore other reading and writings...this is a bit much for me, however, it tells your story and isn't that why we write?
Hanna
reply by the author on 06-May-2011
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A bit different then what I usually read. This sigh is to learn and I feel explore other reading and writings...this is a bit much for me, however, it tells your story and isn't that why we write?
Hanna
Comment Written 06-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 06-May-2011
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I think so. Thank you Hanna.
Comment from Soledadpaz
Ancient forces but current events, as they continue to happen day in and day out and will continue for time immemorial. For man will never be satisfied till he conquers all.
reply by the author on 06-May-2011
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Ancient forces but current events, as they continue to happen day in and day out and will continue for time immemorial. For man will never be satisfied till he conquers all.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 06-May-2011
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Perhaps that is true, man certainly doesn't seem to learn from history. Thank you.
Comment from hfriscia
This is an interesting piece to read...The flow is great, deep poem about a women sucking the life out of a man...But thats why they call some woman a succubus, because they suck the life out...
reply by the author on 06-May-2011
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This is an interesting piece to read...The flow is great, deep poem about a women sucking the life out of a man...But thats why they call some woman a succubus, because they suck the life out...
Comment Written 06-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 06-May-2011
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Yep. Thank you.
Comment from despiser
Vic
Your alter ego?
Nice work on this eap-esque tale (Poe in case you're still wondering. I'll take your word that immemorial is a word. What about fingers? Do they not protrude?
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2010
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Vic
Your alter ego?
Nice work on this eap-esque tale (Poe in case you're still wondering. I'll take your word that immemorial is a word. What about fingers? Do they not protrude?
Comment Written 06-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2010
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Ah fingers. Yes they do protrude don't they. But as far? LOL
Comment from NadiaScrieva
Oooh! This is simply thrilling! It reads so poetically and whimsically. How passionate your writing is... I really like the way you speak of men being affected by women. It's so enjoyable to read!
Well done,
Nadia
reply by the author on 06-May-2011
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Oooh! This is simply thrilling! It reads so poetically and whimsically. How passionate your writing is... I really like the way you speak of men being affected by women. It's so enjoyable to read!
Well done,
Nadia
Comment Written 06-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 06-May-2011
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Thank you much Nadia.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi victor,
I really like this poem. Succubus is so maligned but then what sex goddess isn't? You wrote this well using excellent verbiage and phrasing. While it is erotic it isn't smutty like some poems I have read. Instead of telling your readers what to see you are showing them instead...something we all strive for. Well done....chey
reply by the author on 06-May-2011
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Hi victor,
I really like this poem. Succubus is so maligned but then what sex goddess isn't? You wrote this well using excellent verbiage and phrasing. While it is erotic it isn't smutty like some poems I have read. Instead of telling your readers what to see you are showing them instead...something we all strive for. Well done....chey
Comment Written 06-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 06-May-2011
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Thank you Chey. An insightful and pleasing review.
Comment from wierdgrace
I love the structure of this poem, well written, the images are strong, the words flow from line to line, and the last part is great, Your eternal Master, Wierdgrace, hahaha
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2010
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I love the structure of this poem, well written, the images are strong, the words flow from line to line, and the last part is great, Your eternal Master, Wierdgrace, hahaha
Comment Written 06-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2010
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And you are. subserviant, prone and supplicative victor.
Comment from Aletheia
Oh dear Victor, my gooodness! We see another side of you here. LOL This is excellent, creative, sensual, and just darn right entertaining:
Laughing as my protruded port
is put to other use. Ha, ha, ha.
You will never escape succubus,
save through ecstasy.
Where is your laughter now,
evil one? Ha, ha, ha, ha, ha....
Your eternal Master
Victor von Doom
LOL- That's a great one! I think you should write some more stuff like this. :) B
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2010
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Oh dear Victor, my gooodness! We see another side of you here. LOL This is excellent, creative, sensual, and just darn right entertaining:
Laughing as my protruded port
is put to other use. Ha, ha, ha.
You will never escape succubus,
save through ecstasy.
Where is your laughter now,
evil one? Ha, ha, ha, ha, ha....
Your eternal Master
Victor von Doom
LOL- That's a great one! I think you should write some more stuff like this. :) B
Comment Written 06-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2010
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Thank you B. Now I did write you another! See, " Carpe Diem, Young Love & Old Wishes".