Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from TammyGail
I do enjoy your chapters Barbara. This was very well written
compelling dialog you had my full att throughout the read ..
Thanks for the note I always love that
Because you never know someone in a bad spot my need to see this in there time of need.. thanks for sharing it was a pleasure
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2011
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I do enjoy your chapters Barbara. This was very well written
compelling dialog you had my full att throughout the read ..
Thanks for the note I always love that
Because you never know someone in a bad spot my need to see this in there time of need.. thanks for sharing it was a pleasure
Comment Written 14-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Porscheslayer
This is the first part of the book that I've read, but I found I "got into" it very quickly.
I enjoyed the banter between Anna and Troy. There was a kind of playfulness about it and a bit of flirtatious teasing as well.
With regard to the theme of the book, I can only praise you for further brightening the spotlight on this previously hidden evil. I feel that the more awareness people have of Domestic Abuse, the easier it wil be for victims to come forward and speak out about the hell they are going, or have been, through.
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This is the first part of the book that I've read, but I found I "got into" it very quickly.
I enjoyed the banter between Anna and Troy. There was a kind of playfulness about it and a bit of flirtatious teasing as well.
With regard to the theme of the book, I can only praise you for further brightening the spotlight on this previously hidden evil. I feel that the more awareness people have of Domestic Abuse, the easier it wil be for victims to come forward and speak out about the hell they are going, or have been, through.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mara del Mar
A chapter lovely, I like the encounter of the lovers and the emotion that trasmite in details. The story continued very interesting. I love. A great job.
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A chapter lovely, I like the encounter of the lovers and the emotion that trasmite in details. The story continued very interesting. I love. A great job.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
You are so very right, my friend. All too often, those
who are in bad relationships are all too quick to jump
into a new one that seems better. While that may be
true, it is always good to have some distance before
getting into something new.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2011
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barbara:
You are so very right, my friend. All too often, those
who are in bad relationships are all too quick to jump
into a new one that seems better. While that may be
true, it is always good to have some distance before
getting into something new.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 13-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from kleck140
This is my first reading of your chapters and I am looking forward to reading them all if that is possible here. You writing brought me right into the story. I enjoyed the complete chapter and wonder what Troy is going to do next.
I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2011
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This is my first reading of your chapters and I am looking forward to reading them all if that is possible here. You writing brought me right into the story. I enjoyed the complete chapter and wonder what Troy is going to do next.
I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
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Thanks for your prompt reply.
Comment from AprilShower
Oh, Barbara! Why did you have to end the chapter right there. Now I have to wait to find out why he stopped at four story brick building. I have no idea why he would do this. The chapter is interesting as usual.
April
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Oh, Barbara! Why did you have to end the chapter right there. Now I have to wait to find out why he stopped at four story brick building. I have no idea why he would do this. The chapter is interesting as usual.
April
Comment Written 13-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara.
Comment from emmaysavage
You are doing a good job of portraying a complex character in Troy. I Like Anna but an still not feeling I know her. This is a good story
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You are doing a good job of portraying a complex character in Troy. I Like Anna but an still not feeling I know her. This is a good story
Comment Written 13-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from PoetlikePoe
this is the second chapter that i have read from this. i really wish that i had more time to just read it. i have really enjoyed both sessions. you write very well.
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this is the second chapter that i have read from this. i really wish that i had more time to just read it. i have really enjoyed both sessions. you write very well.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from allborn66
This is a very interesting chapter. I like the tone that you set. The dialogue seems natural. The characters are compelling.
Barbara
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This is a very interesting chapter. I like the tone that you set. The dialogue seems natural. The characters are compelling.
Barbara
Comment Written 13-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from axelbeariter
"I've seen the serious side on a few occasions."/To create more tension, try: "I've only seen your serious side on a few occasions."----Where we going?"/Nice! This is the way people really talk.----You'll find out soon enough."/You wrote this twice within two paragraphs. Vary the words for the same meaning.----She swallowed loudly. "OK, I'll trust you this once."/Great hook.
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"I've seen the serious side on a few occasions."/To create more tension, try: "I've only seen your serious side on a few occasions."----Where we going?"/Nice! This is the way people really talk.----You'll find out soon enough."/You wrote this twice within two paragraphs. Vary the words for the same meaning.----She swallowed loudly. "OK, I'll trust you this once."/Great hook.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2011
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I have taken about five hits for leaving the 'are' out of that sentence. Thank you for your eagle eye and I will make the corrections.