Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 59 "part two, Chapter 18"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Oatmeal
barbara,
The theme was well chosen. The story line was excellent. The conversations flowed well. The characters seemed alive.
There were no errors.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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barbara,
The theme was well chosen. The story line was excellent. The conversations flowed well. The characters seemed alive.
There were no errors.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 27-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from FrankieW
This was really good. For not knowing the whole story, I interested the entire time. It was not a chore to read. The sentences in your story flow well. I was never confused. I wonder, of course, what Troy's dilemma really is. I should read more...I like that the cops showed up a perfect time or the situation could have gone sour.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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This was really good. For not knowing the whole story, I interested the entire time. It was not a chore to read. The sentences in your story flow well. I was never confused. I wonder, of course, what Troy's dilemma really is. I should read more...I like that the cops showed up a perfect time or the situation could have gone sour.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gideon Roth
Hello, Barbara. Wow, this is one of your best submission thus far. The action and internal dialogue both were excellent in this latest addition to the book. You are going to have one fabulous novel when this is completed. No spag or flaws that I could spot. Keep up the great writing and I look forward to your next submission...Tim
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Hello, Barbara. Wow, this is one of your best submission thus far. The action and internal dialogue both were excellent in this latest addition to the book. You are going to have one fabulous novel when this is completed. No spag or flaws that I could spot. Keep up the great writing and I look forward to your next submission...Tim
Comment Written 27-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from tango494
It has been awhile since I have review one of your chapters but I am impressed how easy it was to pick right back up. I think you do such an amazing job with your narration, I would love to be able to write half as good as you.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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It has been awhile since I have review one of your chapters but I am impressed how easy it was to pick right back up. I think you do such an amazing job with your narration, I would love to be able to write half as good as you.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from HPicasso
Excellent dialogue throught... Another great chapter.
You build tension and suspense most effectively.
There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. A very tense and dramatic ending to your story that leaves the reader hanging. The dialogue flows well and Troy really expresses his worry about Anna and his own family. Thank you so much for sharing your creativity.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Excellent dialogue throught... Another great chapter.
You build tension and suspense most effectively.
There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. A very tense and dramatic ending to your story that leaves the reader hanging. The dialogue flows well and Troy really expresses his worry about Anna and his own family. Thank you so much for sharing your creativity.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from vigournet
It is an excellent storyline. I am sorry that I have jumped into your book at quite a late stage, i will have to back-read when I can. Keep up the good work for the abused!
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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It is an excellent storyline. I am sorry that I have jumped into your book at quite a late stage, i will have to back-read when I can. Keep up the good work for the abused!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from simonbagh
That is called a kind of love where you may never find any thing to hurt each others' emotion, I love it very much, and I can say it is a unique love, behind which is just sincerity and honesty, well written, well done, Simon.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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That is called a kind of love where you may never find any thing to hurt each others' emotion, I love it very much, and I can say it is a unique love, behind which is just sincerity and honesty, well written, well done, Simon.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from TSPoet
Well must say that gangsters and unworthy family members and suspense with danger this story would draw attention.
Well done Barb
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Thank you for sharing
tom
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Well must say that gangsters and unworthy family members and suspense with danger this story would draw attention.
Well done Barb
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Thank you for sharing
tom
Comment Written 27-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Thank you for my kind review.
Comment from fairy77
That was exciting great action.I liked the relationship building between Anna and Troy and how they look out for each other.I don't think people use language like scumbag try a swear word.Great write!beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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That was exciting great action.I liked the relationship building between Anna and Troy and how they look out for each other.I don't think people use language like scumbag try a swear word.Great write!beth fairy77.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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In my previous post I got in trouble for using the word dam, so I tried to use something that would be considered a swear word. I can't win. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from purrfect tale
I liked the scene with Troy's thoughts while the guy in the truck had the gun on him. One this bothered me. Troy didn't seem to be frustrated or upset that he had to take the time to give a statement instead of hurrying on to Anna.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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I liked the scene with Troy's thoughts while the guy in the truck had the gun on him. One this bothered me. Troy didn't seem to be frustrated or upset that he had to take the time to give a statement instead of hurrying on to Anna.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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I will recheck that area. Thank you for the kind review.