Metaphorical Seas
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Pause"a series of blank impressions
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Comment from Isaac Kavik
A great description of the soil's transition from frozen to lively as the seasons shange from winter to spring. Vivid language brings these changes to life: "As frost draws ragged razors through raw air".
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A great description of the soil's transition from frozen to lively as the seasons shange from winter to spring. Vivid language brings these changes to life: "As frost draws ragged razors through raw air".
Comment Written 14-May-2012
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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Hello Isaac
Many thanks for finding the time to read and review - I appreciate this
phill
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
As frost draws ragged razors through raw air, << If they gave an award for "Best line of the month" this would win first prize!!!
What a wonderful ode to spring and life... of ALL kinds, because the creepy crawlies are necessary to plant life and thus for our own. :)
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As frost draws ragged razors through raw air, << If they gave an award for "Best line of the month" this would win first prize!!!
What a wonderful ode to spring and life... of ALL kinds, because the creepy crawlies are necessary to plant life and thus for our own. :)
Comment Written 14-May-2012
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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Phew
hello
Thanks for that encouraging word...
'Warm' regards
phill
Comment from Chris Tee
Phill your poem "Pause" is an excellent Blank verse poem and it has a lot of superb alliteration in it as well. An absolutely splendid piece.
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Phill your poem "Pause" is an excellent Blank verse poem and it has a lot of superb alliteration in it as well. An absolutely splendid piece.
Comment Written 14-May-2012
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hello Chris
many thanks
Comment from wilburmillicent
Very powerful imagery. The style is good and easy to digest. Altogether a damn good read. Well done and thanks for sharing. The fact that you chose not to use artwork, strengthens the piece. Well done again.
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Very powerful imagery. The style is good and easy to digest. Altogether a damn good read. Well done and thanks for sharing. The fact that you chose not to use artwork, strengthens the piece. Well done again.
Comment Written 14-May-2012
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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Hello
Phew! Thanks for that. I prefer not to have pictures as I think that limits the reader's imagination - the words should do it really...but that is just a personal choice.
Thanks you for your kindness.
Cheers
phill
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
You have done really very well in this descriptive blank verse describing s winter scene and its affects and looking forward to spring well done regards Fuller Jill
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You have done really very well in this descriptive blank verse describing s winter scene and its affects and looking forward to spring well done regards Fuller Jill
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Comment Written 14-May-2012
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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Hello
Thank you very much for the kind review.
Cheers
phill