Life, Love, and Other Disasters
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Tapestry"A collection of poems on these themes
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Comment from dmt1967
This is a very good poem I looked at the picture and your poem came to light very well written I pictured the dance and everything thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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This is a very good poem I looked at the picture and your poem came to light very well written I pictured the dance and everything thank you for sharing
Comment Written 12-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Thank you.
Steve
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Steve,
Love it. You certainly nailed this one and with all the complexities involved you still managed to inject a magnificent iambic pattern of blank verse. The subject is also redolent of deep emotion and richness of life. If ever a poem deserved a six, this is it. I wish I had more.
Best regards
Reg
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Dear Steve,
Love it. You certainly nailed this one and with all the complexities involved you still managed to inject a magnificent iambic pattern of blank verse. The subject is also redolent of deep emotion and richness of life. If ever a poem deserved a six, this is it. I wish I had more.
Best regards
Reg
Comment Written 12-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Thank you, Reg, for the kind words and the six stars - I found I had to wrestle with this one, so it is pleasing to get some positive feedback.
Steve
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
Ah, the Sestina. I had a guest at my B & B, a retired professor who taught poetry at Yale. He told me you were not a true poet unless you had conquered the sestina. Congratulations on the new title! This is a beautiful rendering within the form. The words you chose were difficult and you handled them in interesting phrases that disguised the similarities or played them up with the contrast. A great idea. O the words, only thread can have more than one meaning and that also made it more difficult.. Well done. Now aren't you glad you tried it? The effort is worth the sixth.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Ah, the Sestina. I had a guest at my B & B, a retired professor who taught poetry at Yale. He told me you were not a true poet unless you had conquered the sestina. Congratulations on the new title! This is a beautiful rendering within the form. The words you chose were difficult and you handled them in interesting phrases that disguised the similarities or played them up with the contrast. A great idea. O the words, only thread can have more than one meaning and that also made it more difficult.. Well done. Now aren't you glad you tried it? The effort is worth the sixth.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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So, does that mean I can finally hang out my 'poet for Hire' shingle?!
Next time I'm going to start with the final envoi stanza and make sure I choose more flexible words. Actually you missed 'strand' which was the only other one I could use in a different sense.
Won't be rushing into another one, although I wouldn't mind having a go at a humorous one and possibly experimenting with rhyme...
Steve
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Not so sure how you could do the rhyme thing unless you could find a mono rhyme of words that wouldn't drive everyone crazy. Have you ever heard of one? Maybe it would be comedy in and of itself? The first one I wrote was without rhythm but I did try it for my second and that was a bit of a bear. Comedy. Hmmmm.
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Yes, I believe it has been done - if you start with abab hyme you end up in stanza 6 with rhyming couplets. And there is one rather weird sestina involving all the Popeye characters - ain't Google wonderful!
Comment from visionary1234
Well bother! FS won't let me give you a '6' and this surely deserved one! This is GORGEOUS ... my mother used to do tapestry work, so I see it vividly. Love your stories of life and death within the threads. Damn I wish I had a six for you! :) Sharyn
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Well bother! FS won't let me give you a '6' and this surely deserved one! This is GORGEOUS ... my mother used to do tapestry work, so I see it vividly. Love your stories of life and death within the threads. Damn I wish I had a six for you! :) Sharyn
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Comment Written 12-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Thanks, Sharyn - may be because you already gave me a six recently....
Steve
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well know that it was worth it Steve - this was a wonderful write! :)
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Superb piece on the need for both light and dark to weave a discernible pattern into either a tapestry or a life! The next-to-last stanza is perfect!
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Superb piece on the need for both light and dark to weave a discernible pattern into either a tapestry or a life! The next-to-last stanza is perfect!
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Comment Written 12-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Thanks, Phyllis - not a new message I know, but a very true one.
Steve