The Tree
A picture inspired story30 total reviews
Comment from robina1978
I loved the story. It held my attention from start till finish. Good balance between dialogue and narrative. The woman was right with sensing there was something wrong with the tree. Her husband will have to live on knowing his uncle was a murderer. Liked how the tree burned down at the end.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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I loved the story. It held my attention from start till finish. Good balance between dialogue and narrative. The woman was right with sensing there was something wrong with the tree. Her husband will have to live on knowing his uncle was a murderer. Liked how the tree burned down at the end.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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Thank you, Robina. I really appreciate the review and comments. I'm so glad you liked the story.
Beth
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It's really lovely. Welcome, Ine
Comment from Dorothy Joyce
That was a great read, Beth Shelby and there is no need for any editing. Your build-up of atmosphere was well done and the short, jerky sentences in the dialogue added to the effect. I wonder what the others in the writing group did with the photo. Dorothy Joyce
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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That was a great read, Beth Shelby and there is no need for any editing. Your build-up of atmosphere was well done and the short, jerky sentences in the dialogue added to the effect. I wonder what the others in the writing group did with the photo. Dorothy Joyce
Comment Written 15-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for the review and commnents. I really appreciate you taking the time to read this. I won't be going back to the group until the first Thursday in October so I have no idea what others did.
Beth
Comment from notdeadyet
This is a very interesting story. I enjoyed the mystery and the suspense. The feeling of the supernatural stems from the lady in the tree and is exacerbated by the wife. I like the fact that the tree is destroyed, but I wondered if the remains were destroyed, too. Perhaps you could make that a little clearer.Good story , well done!
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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This is a very interesting story. I enjoyed the mystery and the suspense. The feeling of the supernatural stems from the lady in the tree and is exacerbated by the wife. I like the fact that the tree is destroyed, but I wondered if the remains were destroyed, too. Perhaps you could make that a little clearer.Good story , well done!
Comment Written 15-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. I think your suggestion is a good one so I've changed the last sentence a bit.
Beth
Comment from TammyGail
Wow - yes what the hell indeed that looks like mother in the tree - I can so see where the inspiration came for this story - most enjoyed well written and expressed - thanks for sharing it was a pleasure
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Wow - yes what the hell indeed that looks like mother in the tree - I can so see where the inspiration came for this story - most enjoyed well written and expressed - thanks for sharing it was a pleasure
Comment Written 14-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much TammyGail, I'm so glad you liked it. I enjoyed your comments.
Beth
Comment from dmt1967
This is a very well written story it had me hooked from the word go I liked the suspense you portrayed the tree with the woman epic thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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This is a very well written story it had me hooked from the word go I liked the suspense you portrayed the tree with the woman epic thank you for sharing
Comment Written 14-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I so glad it held your attention. I'll try to post the rest of the story soon.
Beth
Comment from Realist101
Oh I need a six for this. SO sorry!! Wow. And Beth, I see, a man here. Look closely. What a creepy creepy photo. This has to be photoshopped??? Geez. Your story is perfect for this. Great idea...I'll try to keep up! :)) Susan
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Oh I need a six for this. SO sorry!! Wow. And Beth, I see, a man here. Look closely. What a creepy creepy photo. This has to be photoshopped??? Geez. Your story is perfect for this. Great idea...I'll try to keep up! :)) Susan
Comment Written 13-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Thank you Susan, I don't know anything about the picture but you may be right about the photoshopping. It is hard to believe it is for real. I'm probably going to make some changes in the story. I'd ended it and people liked it but thought it was too short. I really appreciate your support.
Beth
Comment from Kingsland
There was a movie that was made with this same story line in it. I seen it over the summer. This was well written if not very original. But still very good, as I'll bet there wasn't very many that have seen that movie... John
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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There was a movie that was made with this same story line in it. I seen it over the summer. This was well written if not very original. But still very good, as I'll bet there wasn't very many that have seen that movie... John
Comment Written 13-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the review John, I didn't see the movie. I've heard there is nothing new under the sun and I think it is hard to be original. I'm just trying to weave some kind of mystery around the picture.
Beth
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Beth,
All I know I know I would like to be more of this supernatural story
Well written to me it wasn't long enough.
Great writing.
Gert
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Hello Beth,
All I know I know I would like to be more of this supernatural story
Well written to me it wasn't long enough.
Great writing.
Gert
Comment Written 13-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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The first three reviews all say it should be longer so I'll take that advice an see what I can do. Thank you so much for your input.
Beth
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You are welcome.
Now see how good your story is Beth
Gert
Comment from humpwhistle
Beth, a great picture for inspiration, and a
very eerie story to go with it. I like the tension between the couple, which mirrors the tension in the story.
I do wonder if you shouldn't have sprinkled some of the murder story a bit earlier. As it is, it all comes out in the last five paragraphs. If there is no word limit on this, I think I'd expand it by a couple hundred words.
But, Beth, that's just my opinion.
Nice job.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Beth, a great picture for inspiration, and a
very eerie story to go with it. I like the tension between the couple, which mirrors the tension in the story.
I do wonder if you shouldn't have sprinkled some of the murder story a bit earlier. As it is, it all comes out in the last five paragraphs. If there is no word limit on this, I think I'd expand it by a couple hundred words.
But, Beth, that's just my opinion.
Nice job.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 13-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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OK, I'm willing to listen to those of you who have read this. I'm sure you're right so I've put a continued on it until I can come up with more. Thank you so much for your advice. It is usually right on track.
Beth
Comment from Crystal Carey
It is a good story, although I do not think cutting down the tree is a good idea. I would think they would want to find out, plus a man never gives up that easily. He would have had to fight more for it to be really believable! Like they make a bet, then dig up her body...
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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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It is a good story, although I do not think cutting down the tree is a good idea. I would think they would want to find out, plus a man never gives up that easily. He would have had to fight more for it to be really believable! Like they make a bet, then dig up her body...
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Comment Written 13-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the review. I think your advice is good and I plan to take it. You're one of the first three to read it and you are all telling me to make it longer. I agree. The tree shouldn't be cut down. I will continue the story.
Beth