One Christmas Night
A simple story in iambic pentameter.40 total reviews
Comment from Sonjalee
You have taken a most personal event and shared it beautifully, The rhyming couplet are wonderful. My favorite is a poem with rhyming couplets.
"that moved me strangely, filling me with song
until I couldn't help but sing along.
"Oh Lord," I said, "All nature sings your praise.
I too would honor you in all my ways."
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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You have taken a most personal event and shared it beautifully, The rhyming couplet are wonderful. My favorite is a poem with rhyming couplets.
"that moved me strangely, filling me with song
until I couldn't help but sing along.
"Oh Lord," I said, "All nature sings your praise.
I too would honor you in all my ways."
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thank you Sonjalee. I'm delighted to know you like this kind of poetry. If you enjoyed the poem, I'm richly rewarded for my efforts. MM
Comment from amada
Such a beautiful and inspiring work. I walked with you on your lines. I love the image of that little bird whose song was heard like a bell. Peace and love to you.
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Such a beautiful and inspiring work. I walked with you on your lines. I love the image of that little bird whose song was heard like a bell. Peace and love to you.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Peace and love to you as well, Amada. I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem. Hugs, MM
Comment from SteveY
Great great job with this one my friend. Let's not underestimate our dreams and that God can use those too to lead and direct and comfort us.
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Great great job with this one my friend. Let's not underestimate our dreams and that God can use those too to lead and direct and comfort us.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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I do believe God can use any means to speak to his children. I'm so glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Deniz22
Awesome song of praise and so well crafted. May many be touched by this sweet retelling of the old, old story this Christmas.
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Awesome song of praise and so well crafted. May many be touched by this sweet retelling of the old, old story this Christmas.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much Dennis. I'm very glad you approved. Your review was, as usual, incredibly encouraging to me. Thanks again.
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Comment from 3boysrule
I really enjoyed this poem. The flow was perfect; rhyming spot on. I especially enjoyed the meaning of this Christmas poem. Great job!
Dee
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I really enjoyed this poem. The flow was perfect; rhyming spot on. I especially enjoyed the meaning of this Christmas poem. Great job!
Dee
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review, Dee. I'm so happy to know you enjoyed the poem.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, miss merri, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful verse about the birth of the Savior that came to save the world. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
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this is very well written, miss merri, you did an excellent job writing this beautiful verse about the birth of the Savior that came to save the world. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thank you for your kind words and also the good luck wishes. I'm always delighted to hear from you. Did I say thank you for the extra star as well? Well, I meant to. That is SO nice to see, and so deeply appreciated, so thank you very, very much. MM
Comment from Smoothiecool
great picture choice
good luck in the contest
you have put a note to say this is rhyming couplets
you have this in nine Quatrains with the rhymes
except for "warm" and "alarm"
the poem takes the reader through the Christmas of the Lords birth as one reads they can see and feel this
flows well easy read
cheers SC
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2013
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great picture choice
good luck in the contest
you have put a note to say this is rhyming couplets
you have this in nine Quatrains with the rhymes
except for "warm" and "alarm"
the poem takes the reader through the Christmas of the Lords birth as one reads they can see and feel this
flows well easy read
cheers SC
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2013
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Thanks for the tip! I did change that after I changed (edited) the poem a bit. Your kind review and comments were so much apppreciated. Many thanks from me to you. MM
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your most welcome glad to be of help SC
Comment from Deejharrington
I truly inspired Christmas poem. Best of luck in the wcontest. I believe that our path is shown to us if we will only listen. Perhaps your dream or muse for the writing was really from "above". Terrific.
deb
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I truly inspired Christmas poem. Best of luck in the wcontest. I believe that our path is shown to us if we will only listen. Perhaps your dream or muse for the writing was really from "above". Terrific.
deb
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2013
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Dear Deb... what a nice thought! Thanks so much for sharing your comments and for this six-star rating too. That is just a lovely thing, and I'm truly grateful. Hugs, MM
Comment from KG Writes
MissMerri, No more sixes left to share, but this certainly does deserve one. This is a beautiful piece. Obviously written from the heart, the place where a poets best write comes from. A very lovely verse and a most enjoyable read. I wish you the very best of luck in the contest. KG Writes
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MissMerri, No more sixes left to share, but this certainly does deserve one. This is a beautiful piece. Obviously written from the heart, the place where a poets best write comes from. A very lovely verse and a most enjoyable read. I wish you the very best of luck in the contest. KG Writes
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
Comment from Domino 2
Hi, Adonna.
7th verse, maybe 'chirp a cheerful melody' This adds 'c' alliteration to the line and also avoids the near repetition with 'song' and 'sing' in next 2 line.
Top meter and rhymes as always.
Lovely combination of your walk in the seasonal snow and thoughts of your strong faith and the real meaning of Christmas for Christians.
Excellent.
Cheers, Ted
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Hi, Adonna.
7th verse, maybe 'chirp a cheerful melody' This adds 'c' alliteration to the line and also avoids the near repetition with 'song' and 'sing' in next 2 line.
Top meter and rhymes as always.
Lovely combination of your walk in the seasonal snow and thoughts of your strong faith and the real meaning of Christmas for Christians.
Excellent.
Cheers, Ted
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
