Promise of the Mirage
a Nature Whitney26 total reviews
Comment from michaelcahill
Wow. I don't think I have ever seen one of these say much of anything really. This is so dramatic. It is right on the edge and leaves the reader a bit in limbo. The title promises a mirage but, who says nature keeps promises. Damn, this is good. I don't know once again if this will win. But, I do know that no one will top this. Awesome. mikey
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Wow. I don't think I have ever seen one of these say much of anything really. This is so dramatic. It is right on the edge and leaves the reader a bit in limbo. The title promises a mirage but, who says nature keeps promises. Damn, this is good. I don't know once again if this will win. But, I do know that no one will top this. Awesome. mikey
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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You're the best Mikey. This is probably one of the nicest things you have said about one of my pieces. Truly thank you. I thought it was a blind entry honestly haha. Thank you so much for reading! I thought I'd try a Whitney, never had before. Thank you my man, poet.
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
GregoryCody,
Your Whitney poem speaks volumes as you have used your words wisely. I particularly liked "a promised mirage lingers", as your great choice of artwork shows the apparent approach of an impending storm which will quench the thirst and change the entire landscape.
Best wishes for the contest!
Connie :)
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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GregoryCody,
Your Whitney poem speaks volumes as you have used your words wisely. I particularly liked "a promised mirage lingers", as your great choice of artwork shows the apparent approach of an impending storm which will quench the thirst and change the entire landscape.
Best wishes for the contest!
Connie :)
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Thank you Connie! I'm really grateful that you got that line! You're great, thank you. I'm SO sorry I didn't put a certificate on it, I thought it was blind! I'm sorry!
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No apologies needed! Nothing to be sorry about. Have a good evening GregoryCody!
Connie :)
Comment from ravenblack
Now this is an arid landscape. Really like it's almost surreal power to break rain and drink sand. And I know this is at times a place you visit and probe with splintered fingers. And that promised mirage is really breaking-as in rain- truth. The desert is a mirage that you are forced to live with. Too many Whitney's say nothing. This one is well-crafted and speaks volumes.
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Now this is an arid landscape. Really like it's almost surreal power to break rain and drink sand. And I know this is at times a place you visit and probe with splintered fingers. And that promised mirage is really breaking-as in rain- truth. The desert is a mirage that you are forced to live with. Too many Whitney's say nothing. This one is well-crafted and speaks volumes.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Wow man I am so incredibly grateful. Thank you. You GOT this EXACTLY. What a poet. Thank you, so grateful that you read this. Truly, thank you so much for such a GREAT review. The best. I'm SO sorry I didn't put a certificate on it, I thought it was blind! I'm sorry!
Comment from Ben Colder
You did good with this Whitney. The wording is right on, the scene is there. No doubt the mirage is coming. Well done. Have experienced the happening. Blessings to you
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You did good with this Whitney. The wording is right on, the scene is there. No doubt the mirage is coming. Well done. Have experienced the happening. Blessings to you
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Blessings to you too Ben. Thank you for reading this. Truly. I'm SO sorry I didn't put a certificate on it, I thought it was blind! I'm sorry!
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The write was worth it for me. No apology needed. Blessings to you Bubba
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Thank you ;)
Comment from Jackarrie
a very nicely written Whitney with all the syllables correct, I like the subject you have chosen, and the image really is so suitable for you poem
I wish you luck in the contest.
Mary
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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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a very nicely written Whitney with all the syllables correct, I like the subject you have chosen, and the image really is so suitable for you poem
I wish you luck in the contest.
Mary
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Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Thank you Mary! I'm so glad you liked it! I'm SO sorry I didn't put a certificate on it, I thought it was blind! I'm sorry!
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No problem, Mary
Comment from tfawcus
Great word images, picture and presentation, all working together to create a strong impression of the drought before the storm. I particularly liked the last line which leaves us wondering whether there really is going to be a storm or whether those dark clouds on the horizon are going to pass by yet again.
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Great word images, picture and presentation, all working together to create a strong impression of the drought before the storm. I particularly liked the last line which leaves us wondering whether there really is going to be a storm or whether those dark clouds on the horizon are going to pass by yet again.
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Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Wow, well done. Well well done. Your interpretation is exactly what I wanted to convey! Great compliment. Thank you. Made my day. I'm SO sorry I didn't put a certificate on it, I thought it was blind! I'm sorry!