Courtesy Call
The Reaper isn't always grim...44 total reviews
Comment from Terrie DeGolier
Sad how some of us need to see the dark side before we see the light. Once we do the dark side are more like shades of gray for the brightness of the light we walk in now just makes it almost impossible to see the darkness of death. God Bless Terrie
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Sad how some of us need to see the dark side before we see the light. Once we do the dark side are more like shades of gray for the brightness of the light we walk in now just makes it almost impossible to see the darkness of death. God Bless Terrie
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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You make a great point, Terrie! It's funny how the dark side makes us see the light more than the light side makes us see the darkness. Hey, I may use that in a poem! ;-) Thanks so much for your great review.
Comment from Domino 2
excellent read, David.
Top ending and internal rhymes, none of which appear forced.
I struggled with 'as' in 1st line and wanted to change to 'at', but maybe I'm wrong.
This is the first time I've seen the Reaper displayed as an angel with a halo, but then again, the Reaper offered 'Scrooge' some good advice too.
We all take advice on board and then forget it five minutes later, but I guess such a dramatic appearance would make one remember.
Terrific poem!
Best wishes, Ted
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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excellent read, David.
Top ending and internal rhymes, none of which appear forced.
I struggled with 'as' in 1st line and wanted to change to 'at', but maybe I'm wrong.
This is the first time I've seen the Reaper displayed as an angel with a halo, but then again, the Reaper offered 'Scrooge' some good advice too.
We all take advice on board and then forget it five minutes later, but I guess such a dramatic appearance would make one remember.
Terrific poem!
Best wishes, Ted
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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I'll take a look at that word! Thanks so much, my friend. Actually, it's not the reaper with the halo, but he had a lot to do with it. I can't believe I didn't make parallels with the Scrooge, but a lot of people brought it up. Anyway, thanks so much, brother! David
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D'OH - sorry about that, David - I missed a few things today. Cheers, Ted
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You and me both, brother! No worries.
Comment from nancyjam
Nice of him to give you a warning.
it is within us all to heed the warning
that death is always near and we are meant
to take the high road during life.
Very strong heptameter with excellent use of internal and end rhyme, enjambment, alliteration and assonance.
A terrific piece of writing. Nancy
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Nice of him to give you a warning.
it is within us all to heed the warning
that death is always near and we are meant
to take the high road during life.
Very strong heptameter with excellent use of internal and end rhyme, enjambment, alliteration and assonance.
A terrific piece of writing. Nancy
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, Nancy! I appreciate that so much. I appreciate the warning, too, much more than the whole beheading with a scythe thing. ;-)
Comment from Alan K Pease
Well he appeared to you. My warning was a heart attack and I hope it too was just a courtesy call to take better care of myself. The question is not whether he appears, it is a statement that something is not right with you. A light in your own person indicates the visit is not of a fall from grace. Poetically you seem to feel that way too. From my brief exposure you would be missed. Heptameter, rhyme, internal rhyme between lines confirmed as I can; I have The Poets handbook for other styles than iambic. I collect examples of poems from Fanstory for different types . Thank you again for your help with the sonnet and I hope you will look at coming examples of my writing.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Well he appeared to you. My warning was a heart attack and I hope it too was just a courtesy call to take better care of myself. The question is not whether he appears, it is a statement that something is not right with you. A light in your own person indicates the visit is not of a fall from grace. Poetically you seem to feel that way too. From my brief exposure you would be missed. Heptameter, rhyme, internal rhyme between lines confirmed as I can; I have The Poets handbook for other styles than iambic. I collect examples of poems from Fanstory for different types . Thank you again for your help with the sonnet and I hope you will look at coming examples of my writing.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Hi Alan! Wow, you had quite the shot across the bow, my friend, and I hope that you heeded the warning. I really appreciate your wonderfully kind thoughts and comments, and I'll be sure to take in your latest offerings, my friend. Sorry if I've missed any lately.
Comment from Katzintx
Wow. Just pecked it out while on a snow day..lol. This is my favorite one that I have read , love that hope lifted his head. Katz
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Wow. Just pecked it out while on a snow day..lol. This is my favorite one that I have read , love that hope lifted his head. Katz
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, Katz! I really appreciate that. There's nothing like a comfortable chair with snow outside to sink into that "place" where you can really concentrate.
Comment from livelylinda
David: you continue to surprise and delight me. I have not had a visit from the 'grim one'; I've been a very good girl and see only angels. But, I'll keep on the lookout. Good write! Linda
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David: you continue to surprise and delight me. I have not had a visit from the 'grim one'; I've been a very good girl and see only angels. But, I'll keep on the lookout. Good write! Linda
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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I'm so glad to hear that, Linda! Thanks so much...and I'm glad you haven't met "him" yet. Glad you're on the right side of the moral tracks. I'm waving from the other! :)
Comment from Ben Colder
Hot off the press. Well done. My fingers are still smoldering with this nice poem. Great wording and a good rhythm. Well done poet. Shalom.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Hot off the press. Well done. My fingers are still smoldering with this nice poem. Great wording and a good rhythm. Well done poet. Shalom.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, Ben! Sorry for the burn, but I appreciate the cool review, my friend.
Comment from Watermark1974
I think you did a phenomenal job capturing the call of action. There's so much downtime between creative endeavors, as time passes we can fall out of alignment with so many things.
Your poem is paralyzing in its message, because no matter who we are, deep down we all have dreams we've put on the back-burner. Sometimes those dream wither away, but are they really ever forgotten?
I will do something today to fulfill my dream, even if it's a small thing, because I read your poem. Thank you!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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I think you did a phenomenal job capturing the call of action. There's so much downtime between creative endeavors, as time passes we can fall out of alignment with so many things.
Your poem is paralyzing in its message, because no matter who we are, deep down we all have dreams we've put on the back-burner. Sometimes those dream wither away, but are they really ever forgotten?
I will do something today to fulfill my dream, even if it's a small thing, because I read your poem. Thank you!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Watermark, that really means a lot that you've gleaned enough from this to do something today. Thank you so much for the great review and the kind words. I do appreciate it.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I like that term. Rainbow in the dark. It is uplifting actually. This is very good hot off the press and I don't see anything wrong with it. But I know I often go back and re-arrange and change words. This is chilling and puts me in mind of old Scrooge. LOL Good job. Nancy *****+
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I like that term. Rainbow in the dark. It is uplifting actually. This is very good hot off the press and I don't see anything wrong with it. But I know I often go back and re-arrange and change words. This is chilling and puts me in mind of old Scrooge. LOL Good job. Nancy *****+
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, Nancy. I hadn't even thought of Scrooge, but I see what you mean. I guess if added two more wights to the mix I'd have had it! :-) I appreciate it, my friend.
Comment from padumachitta
Hey. I just had to give this a 6. it reads well, and I even got a good reaper voice out of it. I also just like the idea of the Cloaked One, giving a warning...and you did it so well.
Hope you are keeeping warm over there:-)
And knew the seeds were sowing for the living, not the dead.
I looked at my reflection, and observed an inner spark
Illuming my direction like a rainbow in the dark.
I stood up tall and proudly, made a vow to never fall,
Then thanked the Reaper loudly for his timely wake-up call.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Hey. I just had to give this a 6. it reads well, and I even got a good reaper voice out of it. I also just like the idea of the Cloaked One, giving a warning...and you did it so well.
Hope you are keeeping warm over there:-)
And knew the seeds were sowing for the living, not the dead.
I looked at my reflection, and observed an inner spark
Illuming my direction like a rainbow in the dark.
I stood up tall and proudly, made a vow to never fall,
Then thanked the Reaper loudly for his timely wake-up call.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much, Pad! I appreciate the great review, my friend, and that elusive sixer! Much appreciated.
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Hey, you deserve it. I am in awe of the meter and rhyme. You rock, and I am waiting for my weekly dose of Rogue...
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The rogue will be there, albeit a little later in the day, as I have to get to my office first, where the poem is stored on my computer, but I appreciate your enthusiasm. This week's rogue poem is in this meter, too. :)