The Tripod Of Priapus
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Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
Oh my Lord in Heaven!! I can't even believe what you posted there. I mean that poem can certainly speak on it's own without need for such a visual. I about fainted, LOL Sure I did...I don't know how you can write such naughtiness in such perfect verse. Amazing. Methinks you are a bit too proud of that tripod though. You just wait until you are 75, we'll see how sturdy that peak is then...
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Oh my Lord in Heaven!! I can't even believe what you posted there. I mean that poem can certainly speak on it's own without need for such a visual. I about fainted, LOL Sure I did...I don't know how you can write such naughtiness in such perfect verse. Amazing. Methinks you are a bit too proud of that tripod though. You just wait until you are 75, we'll see how sturdy that peak is then...
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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I'm shameless, aren't I? It's actually a sculpture of Priapus, god of fertility. :) Thanks, my friend. Believe me, I know!
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with tricks/pricks. Good alliteration with girds/god...twerk/tongue...to/try...Priapus/pricks...make/me...big/banana...my/mighty. Good internal rhyming. Good clear message that is filled with humor.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with tricks/pricks. Good alliteration with girds/god...twerk/tongue...to/try...Priapus/pricks...make/me...big/banana...my/mighty. Good internal rhyming. Good clear message that is filled with humor.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Thank you, RR!
Comment from Kingsland
I really found a lot of humor in this piece of poetry. It would make for a long modified limerick in my opinion. But then again, I really am not all to great on strict poetic forms and formats. I do know however like this piece of poetry very much. It was just so very humorous... John
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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I really found a lot of humor in this piece of poetry. It would make for a long modified limerick in my opinion. But then again, I really am not all to great on strict poetic forms and formats. I do know however like this piece of poetry very much. It was just so very humorous... John
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much, John. Humorous is all it was supposed to be, so I'll take it! :)
Comment from 24chas
Good one, Marillion. Just don't ask me to look into the camera's eye on the tripod. The henhouse will be buzzing today.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Good one, Marillion. Just don't ask me to look into the camera's eye on the tripod. The henhouse will be buzzing today.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Thanks, brother. Funny!
Comment from Rondeno
You say it's silly - and, okay, the "debate" is ultimately pointless, you're just having fun - but Lord, what verbal dexterity you can command!
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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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You say it's silly - and, okay, the "debate" is ultimately pointless, you're just having fun - but Lord, what verbal dexterity you can command!
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Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2014
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Mike, thanks so much! In the end, it's just a writing exercise in the back and forth of riposting, so I'll take that as a compliment!