Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

Both of the poems are great and they fit well together in the "bookend". All rules have been followed. Good luck to you in the contest.
teresa

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014

Teresa, thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from royowen

Excellent

A beautiful poem in this bookend poetry contest! A very good write, this is descriptively articulate with an eloquent narrative woven into it! I enjoyed reading this immensely, it should stand a good chance in this comp! Well done, blessings Roy.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014

Thanks, Roy.

Steve

Comment from dennis0530

Excellent

These five lines are thought-provoking and stimulating. They give us hints about life's actualities.

Written with feelings of reality and hopefulness. These are times in our lives when unresolved questions eat into our brains. The adversely affect other aspects of our lives. So, yes - answered questions leave us freer even if the answers don't favor us.

Time, the Unraveller? It is also a great Healer.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014

Thanks, Dennis.

The second poem when all questions are answered is describing the afterlife - then Time really does become unimportant.

Steve

Comment from visionary1234

Excellent

What a fabulous entry to this contest, Mystery Author! Very clever, beautiful & intelligent use of the ABC form (not the easiest form to write in) - WELL book-ended! This one will be hard to beat.
:)Sharyn

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014

Thank you, Sharyn.

I'm guessing you didn't pick this as one of mine!

I really liked the end result - I felt the two poems together made quite a pleasing whole, but the competition was tough, alas. Back to my forte, perhaps...

Steve

reply by visionary1234 on 15-Jun-2014

no, I didn't pick this as one of yours! (You don't usually enter these, do you?)But it was a damned good entry. I'll have to have a look to see who beat you, because it was a really strong write!

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

You make the end so sound beautifully magnificent. Your wording is elegant, with no awkwardness. Love your rhyming. the two poems are just perfect. Superb! Les

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014

Les, thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

I like that you match your poems so well - not just the same ABC form but the same letters. And you use the same rhyme scheme too so it really does read like one piece.
You complete the theme thoughtfully and continue the same clock imagery well. I haven't read all the entries yet, but surely this has to be a strong contender. Brooke

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2014

Thanks, Brooke.

I was really rather pleased with myself for creating the pairing - I felt the two poems together could easily have been posted as one piece - perhaps Life/Afterlife. No luck in the contest, however - not too many reviewers grasped the full intention...

Steve

reply by adewpearl on 15-Jun-2014

contest voting is always hard to predict

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

It appears something must have happened to cahnge
your attitude between the first half and the second.
I suppose it's just the passage of time, but your attitude about time seems to have changed. Have I got that right?

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014

Thanks for reviewing.

Yes, you're on the right track - it is a before and after piece. Not just the passage of time though, but the passage from one life to another...

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Sorry, Fanstory, reviewing with an eye on both. looks like the writer went out into a hailstorm of philosophies then scuttled back to shelter before he got his eyes flogged out.
People make shocking things out of your writings, don't they? Pall? Good word choices here. Excellent.

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 Comment Written 13-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014

Thanks for the review.

Hailstorm? I was hoping the philosophies were at least closely enough related to be seen as complementary.

Scuttling back? Perhaps, although I see it more as a simple change of perspective generated by a change from this world to the next...

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

I absolutely love the way that this poem flows, I haven't read the 'other' poem yet but certainly will, I think you have an excellent chance, but good luck anyway.

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 Comment Written 13-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014

Thanks for reviewing. The original poem is at the top of the page...

Three stars for a piece that you absolutely love???

Steve

reply by Eric1 on 13-Jun-2014

Apologies Steve, not used to this iste yet, have upgraded (hopefull)

reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014

Thanks and welcome to FanStory - hope you like it here!

Steve