Writings From the Heart
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
this is a brilliant poem, what you have written is just as it would have been. Those lads, they were all the same, fighting the war that their governments told them was for the good of their country. Millions died in that first day on the battle field in France, millions! It is hard to imagine. None of those lads wanted the war, their mums certainly didn't want the war, not knowing if their child would every come home again. I only wish I had a 6 for you, a 12 even. Excellent piece of writing, very vivid in imagery, and so very, very sad. :) Sandra.
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this is a brilliant poem, what you have written is just as it would have been. Those lads, they were all the same, fighting the war that their governments told them was for the good of their country. Millions died in that first day on the battle field in France, millions! It is hard to imagine. None of those lads wanted the war, their mums certainly didn't want the war, not knowing if their child would every come home again. I only wish I had a 6 for you, a 12 even. Excellent piece of writing, very vivid in imagery, and so very, very sad. :) Sandra.
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thank you Sandra
Comment from victor 66
Your poem, your message is one that any parent would cringe at reading. I don't know what WWI was truly like. I'm familiar with Vietnam. I remember my mother getting a telegram the first time I was wounded. My grandmother sat up with her for three nights. Your piece flows very well and it is a very good read. Best wishes.
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Your poem, your message is one that any parent would cringe at reading. I don't know what WWI was truly like. I'm familiar with Vietnam. I remember my mother getting a telegram the first time I was wounded. My grandmother sat up with her for three nights. Your piece flows very well and it is a very good read. Best wishes.
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thank you
Comment from Delahay
I really like that this shows that the soldiers, on both sides of this war, were pretty much exactly the same. They really had no stake in the reasons for the war but were both there to fight for their country. They are so much alike they could have been friends, if someone in power had not told them they were enemies.
Perhaps I need new glasses but the font seemed a little small and hard to read to me.
Mary
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I really like that this shows that the soldiers, on both sides of this war, were pretty much exactly the same. They really had no stake in the reasons for the war but were both there to fight for their country. They are so much alike they could have been friends, if someone in power had not told them they were enemies.
Perhaps I need new glasses but the font seemed a little small and hard to read to me.
Mary
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thank you Mary
Comment from Carlylrkn5
I loved this poem, it was raw, deep, and evoked emotion in me, which is what good poetry is meant to do. the topic is an important one, that a lot of people attempt to write about but you brought a unique perspective to it and I really enjoyed this poem. thank you for sharing!
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I loved this poem, it was raw, deep, and evoked emotion in me, which is what good poetry is meant to do. the topic is an important one, that a lot of people attempt to write about but you brought a unique perspective to it and I really enjoyed this poem. thank you for sharing!
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average OK
Comment from ProSongwriter
Hi!
Good to "meet" you. And what a dynamic piece of writing! I am retired from the US Army and a disabled Vietnam Vet. So, I can relate to so much of this. We often talked about the very things you mention ... if the enemy thought and wondered about the same things we did death and dying, going home, loved ones back home, was it worth it, why is it so insane, etc.
You have captured that feeling and put the reader out there in the trenches. Wonderful writing and so well articulated.
Best to you ...
Alan
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Hi!
Good to "meet" you. And what a dynamic piece of writing! I am retired from the US Army and a disabled Vietnam Vet. So, I can relate to so much of this. We often talked about the very things you mention ... if the enemy thought and wondered about the same things we did death and dying, going home, loved ones back home, was it worth it, why is it so insane, etc.
You have captured that feeling and put the reader out there in the trenches. Wonderful writing and so well articulated.
Best to you ...
Alan
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thank you
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You are welcome.
Comment from James Dooney
And a very cool little note this is too I think ! You have done well here with this one again and keep up the good work why dont you !
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And a very cool little note this is too I think ! You have done well here with this one again and keep up the good work why dont you !
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thanks James
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
this brought tears to my eyes - your
words perfectly expressed and ringing
so true - my heart and prayers go out
to all those brave men and women who
fight these wars.
The saddest fact of all - it leaves
even more widows, orphans and homeless.
margaret
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this brought tears to my eyes - your
words perfectly expressed and ringing
so true - my heart and prayers go out
to all those brave men and women who
fight these wars.
The saddest fact of all - it leaves
even more widows, orphans and homeless.
margaret
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
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thank you again Margart
Comment from anthony shacknofsky
This poem cis reminiscent of All quiet on the Western Front, written by EM Remark, a famous German author who wrote about the horror of the first world war from the German perspective. He was severely ostricised by Adolph HItler, who glorified war, and who was the direct cause of millions of deaths of unfortunate peoples, who were drawn unwillingly into a war t)hat was forced upon them by Hitlers Nazis.
This poem is a timely reminder of what can happen when megalomaniacs are allowed to have their way.
Well. done
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This poem cis reminiscent of All quiet on the Western Front, written by EM Remark, a famous German author who wrote about the horror of the first world war from the German perspective. He was severely ostricised by Adolph HItler, who glorified war, and who was the direct cause of millions of deaths of unfortunate peoples, who were drawn unwillingly into a war t)hat was forced upon them by Hitlers Nazis.
This poem is a timely reminder of what can happen when megalomaniacs are allowed to have their way.
Well. done
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thank you
Comment from Genya
Deep and touching. I enjoyed reading from both sides to be followed by no mans land as you pull this sad story together. Beautifully done with a strong message throughout. The first two lines brought the message of war home yet again. Over the top to free this land..... Very sad as we all know so many of these brave young men will never see home again. Really enjoyed reading this. Genya
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Deep and touching. I enjoyed reading from both sides to be followed by no mans land as you pull this sad story together. Beautifully done with a strong message throughout. The first two lines brought the message of war home yet again. Over the top to free this land..... Very sad as we all know so many of these brave young men will never see home again. Really enjoyed reading this. Genya
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thank you Genya
Comment from Kingsland
Wars of long ago had little communication as compared to this present day. So I could see how things could go from bad to worse in a very short time span. But with this being the age of communication were everyone can communicate so very easily, there are no more excuses. This was a well written verse that rails against war. It is written with good emotions in a sad state of misery being the focal point... John
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Wars of long ago had little communication as compared to this present day. So I could see how things could go from bad to worse in a very short time span. But with this being the age of communication were everyone can communicate so very easily, there are no more excuses. This was a well written verse that rails against war. It is written with good emotions in a sad state of misery being the focal point... John
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
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thanks John