The Animal Doctor
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Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I didn't think she'd throw him out so fast. ANd how did Grace know what he had done, anyway? Just because he didn't come home all night? She seems a bit too quick to think the worst without KNOWING for sure. BUt she was right... still... seems rather drastic. Poor Nate. I wonder how Elizabeth can get Margaret to stay away... blackmail? Guess I'll have to wait. Good story, but not often enough . :)
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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I didn't think she'd throw him out so fast. ANd how did Grace know what he had done, anyway? Just because he didn't come home all night? She seems a bit too quick to think the worst without KNOWING for sure. BUt she was right... still... seems rather drastic. Poor Nate. I wonder how Elizabeth can get Margaret to stay away... blackmail? Guess I'll have to wait. Good story, but not often enough . :)
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Margaret's shadow has been between her and Nathan from day one. Margaret is back in town staying with her parents, the Wainwrights and Nathan has been going over there a lot treating Wainwright's animals. Plus Nathan's been acting strange...then forgetting her medical bag and shoes when he left supposing to go to the Wainwrights. Which was stupid, Grace could have called Mr. Wainwright and found out he was suppose to be there. Plus he stays out all night and Grace has been suspicious anyway. whew? But I didn't want to say that. I wanted my readers to see the holes and gaps in Nathan's actions and my women readers knows a woman can feel when her man is cheating. LOL or am I assuming too much in my readers. LOL
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I think it may be the time between posts that causes us not to see these things. We forget details like that. If you posted every day, it would be easier to follow the story. Better yet, if we had the book IN OUR HANDS and could read it all at once. It's a problem for everyone here...it's not a normal way to read a book.
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You're right, it's my fault. I dropped this book after my son wanted me to drop everything and write "The Covenant". I'm writing the last chapters of Animal Doctor, so you won't have to wait but a day in between postings. I plan to do that with every book now. Also, if I start posting The Covenant, the entire book will be finished. The day or so wait will be to have enough fanstory cash to post. My chapters are rather long so I won't be read if I post it any less than a buck or more.
Comment from lindalcreel
The question is how did Grace find out about what he did, or was she just guessing? Maybe Margaret called her, but then, she wouldn't want her husband to find out about the affair because that would make her look bad. Better for her to try to keep it hidden. I wonder if Nate will fall prey to her advances again or if he will finally get the message and leave Margaret alone. I feel bad for Grace and the baby. He doesn't deserve them and maybe if Margaret breaks his heart again, he'll get what's coming to him.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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The question is how did Grace find out about what he did, or was she just guessing? Maybe Margaret called her, but then, she wouldn't want her husband to find out about the affair because that would make her look bad. Better for her to try to keep it hidden. I wonder if Nate will fall prey to her advances again or if he will finally get the message and leave Margaret alone. I feel bad for Grace and the baby. He doesn't deserve them and maybe if Margaret breaks his heart again, he'll get what's coming to him.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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A smart woman would call the Wainwrights to see if her husband is there and when he's not and he stays out all night, plus she is suspicious of him anyway. Well...what can I tell you. LOL Thank you so much for keeping up with my book. I really appreciate it more than you know.
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It's a man thing. LOL
Comment from fafa
Really friendly you write very well, with very much detail I believe that nececitaré to readmore of tús chapters to penetrate into the plot of the novel, in the same way I could discoveryour high quality like writer, greetings
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Really friendly you write very well, with very much detail I believe that nececitaré to readmore of tús chapters to penetrate into the plot of the novel, in the same way I could discoveryour high quality like writer, greetings
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much, fafa.
Comment from jaeladarling
Normally I dock a star for the number of "spag" I found, but the read is so enjoyable, I just couldn't do it. LOL I particularly like the end of this chapter. This might be one of those books I'll have to go back and catch up on so I can keep up with it. :)
Anyway, nice work! Here are some nits for your consideration:
"what time is it," (The comma should be a question mark)
"Now, you tell me?" (No comma)
"God if you never answer" (Comma after "God")
"prayer of mine, Please, Please" (Both instances of "please" do not need to be capitalized)
"seven in the morning and Joseph was" (Comma after "morning")
"Joseph what's happened?" (Comma after "Joseph")
"What do you mean--wherever I want to go." (The period should be a question mark)
"She said something to Pearl and Pearl" (Comma after the first "Pearl")
"Just how many times had she warned him about staying away from Margaret." (The period should be a question mark)
"There were no lectures or I told you so from" (Just put "I told you so" in quotes. No need for bold or anything)
"I wasn't thinking Mrs. K." (Comma after "thinking")
"Now, Elizabeth no need to take that route." (Comma also after Elizabeth, or only a comma after Elizabeth)
"and the baby and I told her so." (Comma after "baby")
"on the lawn and Joseph was" (Comma after "lawn")
"Oh you men make me sick" (Comma after "Oh")
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Normally I dock a star for the number of "spag" I found, but the read is so enjoyable, I just couldn't do it. LOL I particularly like the end of this chapter. This might be one of those books I'll have to go back and catch up on so I can keep up with it. :)
Anyway, nice work! Here are some nits for your consideration:
"what time is it," (The comma should be a question mark)
"Now, you tell me?" (No comma)
"God if you never answer" (Comma after "God")
"prayer of mine, Please, Please" (Both instances of "please" do not need to be capitalized)
"seven in the morning and Joseph was" (Comma after "morning")
"Joseph what's happened?" (Comma after "Joseph")
"What do you mean--wherever I want to go." (The period should be a question mark)
"She said something to Pearl and Pearl" (Comma after the first "Pearl")
"Just how many times had she warned him about staying away from Margaret." (The period should be a question mark)
"There were no lectures or I told you so from" (Just put "I told you so" in quotes. No need for bold or anything)
"I wasn't thinking Mrs. K." (Comma after "thinking")
"Now, Elizabeth no need to take that route." (Comma also after Elizabeth, or only a comma after Elizabeth)
"and the baby and I told her so." (Comma after "baby")
"on the lawn and Joseph was" (Comma after "lawn")
"Oh you men make me sick" (Comma after "Oh")
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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I made all the corrections, thank you jaeladarling. I deserved whatever less than five stars you wanted to give me. Bless you for enjoying my chapter that much, my dear.
Comment from c_lucas
I cannot understand why a man would throw his life away over carnal luxt. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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I cannot understand why a man would throw his life away over carnal luxt. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Charlie.
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You're welcome, Amahra. Charlie
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is wonderfully written. It is both technically sound and thoroughly engaging. The dialog flows beautifully and you maintain an intensity throughout which is not easy to achieve without tons of descriptive narrative. The section where she stares and closes the drapes on him was as powerful as the scene in The Godfather where Michael shuts the door on Kay. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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This is wonderfully written. It is both technically sound and thoroughly engaging. The dialog flows beautifully and you maintain an intensity throughout which is not easy to achieve without tons of descriptive narrative. The section where she stares and closes the drapes on him was as powerful as the scene in The Godfather where Michael shuts the door on Kay. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
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Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Wow, thank you so much Mystic Angel. You are an angel. I never thought of that scene in the God Father. And to be compared...OMG! Bless you.
Comment from James Dooney
heheh ah yes the woman that is scorned can be quite a little bitch indeed hey ! You have illustrated this well quite well here I must say !
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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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heheh ah yes the woman that is scorned can be quite a little bitch indeed hey ! You have illustrated this well quite well here I must say !
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Comment Written 05-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thank you James.