Expressing Myself
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Warmth"Writing my way out of depression / mental illness
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Comment from ronnie k
AMEN, our Fathers provision are serving of our needs, He promises not wealth but the supplying of our daily needs, the women in ragged quilt needed and had warmth,
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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AMEN, our Fathers provision are serving of our needs, He promises not wealth but the supplying of our daily needs, the women in ragged quilt needed and had warmth,
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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ronnie, you have made my night. You got the gist and really get my poem. Thank you for your insightful review!
Comment from Caroline Yego
WoW! I like the flow of words, the rhythm it created:This tender eve the boat did sway. I closed my eyes and felt the boat sway...
'Twas but a dream yet on this night
no silent screams or torrid fright
Just waves of such pure delight
Safe from anything that might
It reminded me of a well done rap song. I acted it in my mind.
A great piece of art.
Caroline
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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WoW! I like the flow of words, the rhythm it created:This tender eve the boat did sway. I closed my eyes and felt the boat sway...
'Twas but a dream yet on this night
no silent screams or torrid fright
Just waves of such pure delight
Safe from anything that might
It reminded me of a well done rap song. I acted it in my mind.
A great piece of art.
Caroline
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Thank you Caroline, for your kind and encouraging review!!
Comment from Eternal Muse
That was an interesting poem. Dreams hold a lot of power. They are product of subconscious, they say.
It us so surreal that a quilt from your dream ended up in a homeless woman keeping her warm.
Thoought provoking.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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That was an interesting poem. Dreams hold a lot of power. They are product of subconscious, they say.
It us so surreal that a quilt from your dream ended up in a homeless woman keeping her warm.
Thoought provoking.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Thank you yeltel, for really understanding my poem. Your review is spot on. and your generous rating is much appreciated!
Comment from tfawcus
How lucky we are. The contrast between that feeling of warm fuzziness you build in the first half of this makes the final lines shattering in their intensity. 'Dream on' is a master stroke at the end.
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How lucky we are. The contrast between that feeling of warm fuzziness you build in the first half of this makes the final lines shattering in their intensity. 'Dream on' is a master stroke at the end.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your kind and insightful review!! J
Comment from nancy_e_davis
What a lovely faith poem my friend. A wonderful dream that I see as the quilt symbolizing faith and the warmth of his love.
Wrapped in the safety of His Arms while enveloped in the quilt of faith. Nice metaphor. :<) Nancy
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What a lovely faith poem my friend. A wonderful dream that I see as the quilt symbolizing faith and the warmth of his love.
Wrapped in the safety of His Arms while enveloped in the quilt of faith. Nice metaphor. :<) Nancy
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Thank you for your kind and insightful review!! J
Comment from Drew Delaney
Oh, I really like this. I love the rhyme even though it's free verse. It lends such poetic measure in my world. Too many sleeping on the streets these days. Who would have thought, our countries would come to this.
Well written and by a wonderful heart.
Drew Delaney
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Oh, I really like this. I love the rhyme even though it's free verse. It lends such poetic measure in my world. Too many sleeping on the streets these days. Who would have thought, our countries would come to this.
Well written and by a wonderful heart.
Drew Delaney
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much Drew, for this kind and encouraging review!
Comment from amahra
Loved the art work. It went well with this writing: very simple; looks like an etching. Loved the poem; it was so beautifully written. Was that the same quilt? I wasn't sure.
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Loved the art work. It went well with this writing: very simple; looks like an etching. Loved the poem; it was so beautifully written. Was that the same quilt? I wasn't sure.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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I left the question open about whether it was the same quilt. So glad you liked my poem and thank you for this kind and encouraging review!
Comment from brentman99
I like your poem. I think that the soft purple background and black text were a nice accent. I love the silent scream imagery. Good luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing, Brent.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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I like your poem. I think that the soft purple background and black text were a nice accent. I love the silent scream imagery. Good luck in the contest. Thanks for sharing, Brent.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thank you Brent, for this kind and encouraging review!
Comment from Chrisfiore
Greetings playinaround,
This is an interesting poem, very visual. How many times have we passed by these lonesome figures, huddled from the cold trying just to catch a few restful hours of sleep? I think we as a society have become too passive when dealing with the homeless. It says a lot about how we view the value of life. Best to you with this contest entry. ;) Chrisfiore
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Greetings playinaround,
This is an interesting poem, very visual. How many times have we passed by these lonesome figures, huddled from the cold trying just to catch a few restful hours of sleep? I think we as a society have become too passive when dealing with the homeless. It says a lot about how we view the value of life. Best to you with this contest entry. ;) Chrisfiore
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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I concur Chrisfiore. Great insight, and thank you for your well wishes and this kind review!
Comment from mikemagine
The Higher Power takes care of everyone: rich, poor, popular, lonely, famous, unknown, fed, starving....
This life is truly not easy for anyone, regardless of station...but the Creator, Who is strong, knows that each of us is futile and weak. So He always provides. Too often we don't sense Him helping, but He is!
Peace,
Mike
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The Higher Power takes care of everyone: rich, poor, popular, lonely, famous, unknown, fed, starving....
This life is truly not easy for anyone, regardless of station...but the Creator, Who is strong, knows that each of us is futile and weak. So He always provides. Too often we don't sense Him helping, but He is!
Peace,
Mike
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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I absolutely agree. Thank you for your insights and encouragement Mike!!
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You bet:-)
Mike