Free Verse Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "The Road to Salamanca"A collection of free verse poems
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Comment from emrpoems
I love your command of the English language. Each word speaks something vital into the composition and created great visuals. Thank you for sharing and I totally enjoyed your free verse as usual
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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I love your command of the English language. Each word speaks something vital into the composition and created great visuals. Thank you for sharing and I totally enjoyed your free verse as usual
Comment Written 04-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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What a very nice review, emr. Thank you!
Comment from kiwijenny
Great imagery....so glad it was not autobiographal . Who needs a salt cod spinach chick pea relationship? Though licking at the edges of our relationship....great image...love Van Gogh
God bless
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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Great imagery....so glad it was not autobiographal . Who needs a salt cod spinach chick pea relationship? Though licking at the edges of our relationship....great image...love Van Gogh
God bless
Comment Written 04-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Jenny. I knew the soup was a mistake as soon as I had ordered it! LOL
Comment from strandregs
when I finished reading it . i said bleak . but that is because my reality is. so each reader will have his own take on it.
a little metaphor in each stanza lifts the essense.
though I wanted more.
all in all it sounded like a classic.Z.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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when I finished reading it . i said bleak . but that is because my reality is. so each reader will have his own take on it.
a little metaphor in each stanza lifts the essense.
though I wanted more.
all in all it sounded like a classic.Z.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Z. It was a truly bleak winter's landscape.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Very well written free verse Tony. Some good use of metaphor and alliteration in 'grey-green ghosts and pining' also 'fog..licking at the edges of our relationship' - very good. This is a really good poem. Warm regards Dorothy x
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Very well written free verse Tony. Some good use of metaphor and alliteration in 'grey-green ghosts and pining' also 'fog..licking at the edges of our relationship' - very good. This is a really good poem. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 04-Jan-2015
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So glad you enjoyed it, Dorothy.
Comment from Eric1
Hi Tony, this is certainly a very bleak poem my friend, the resemblances of the break up of a couple and the harshness of the landscape have certainly corresponded well together! The Van Gogh artwork suits your wonderful free verse poem very well.
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Hi Tony, this is certainly a very bleak poem my friend, the resemblances of the break up of a couple and the harshness of the landscape have certainly corresponded well together! The Van Gogh artwork suits your wonderful free verse poem very well.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Eric. It was a pretty bleak landscape!
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You're welcome Tony.
Comment from Domino 2
Your artwork choice sure reflects the 'bleak greyness', Tony.
Excellent imagery of the bull and surroundings.
Top metaphors.
Thought-provoking couple of ambiguous comments on the 'relationship'.
Top free verse.
Cheers, Ray
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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Your artwork choice sure reflects the 'bleak greyness', Tony.
Excellent imagery of the bull and surroundings.
Top metaphors.
Thought-provoking couple of ambiguous comments on the 'relationship'.
Top free verse.
Cheers, Ray
Comment Written 04-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Ray. Glad you enjoyed it. Tony.
Comment from c_lucas
Some landscapes gives one the feeling they have found God's landfill. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. This has good imagery.
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Some landscapes gives one the feeling they have found God's landfill. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. This has good imagery.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Charlie. This landscape was pretty bleak.
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My pleasure, Tony. Charlie
Comment from kiwisteveh
What a gloomy piece! You don't say who this couple is - presumably lovers or husband and wife on the verge of breaking up. The stark landscape matches the chill in the car and even the weather and the smells of the old town combine to add to the greyness of the mood.
The van Gogh drawing is the perfect accompaniment.
Steve
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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What a gloomy piece! You don't say who this couple is - presumably lovers or husband and wife on the verge of breaking up. The stark landscape matches the chill in the car and even the weather and the smells of the old town combine to add to the greyness of the mood.
The van Gogh drawing is the perfect accompaniment.
Steve
Comment Written 04-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Steve. I'm not sure who the couple were either. Just a faint echo of 'Last Year in Marienbad' in my mind.
Comment from P.J. Riley
It flows very badly and does not rhyme some of the structure makes sense and it is emotionless but it did present strong images but unfortunately I would not recommend it.
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It flows very badly and does not rhyme some of the structure makes sense and it is emotionless but it did present strong images but unfortunately I would not recommend it.
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Comment Written 04-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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Thank you for your review and opinions, PJR. Sorry to hear the emotional impact passed you by. The poem didn't rhyme because it is free verse. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from royowen
This is so well written Tony, the narrative was stark and unyielding, the work had a sort of ghostly, spectred grip to it, capable of sending a cold shiver up ons'e spine, the mind imagery was a dread, abandoned feel, brilliantly written, with a foreboding atmosphere, well scribed and articulate, well done. Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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This is so well written Tony, the narrative was stark and unyielding, the work had a sort of ghostly, spectred grip to it, capable of sending a cold shiver up ons'e spine, the mind imagery was a dread, abandoned feel, brilliantly written, with a foreboding atmosphere, well scribed and articulate, well done. Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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Many thanks, Roy. Delighted that my poem was able to engage you at that level. Best wishes, Tony