Comment from Sasha

Excellent

I love the Rondeau, despite the confusion I have over the rules...I get confused over all the rules of all poems. This is such a lovely entry for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best. You have done a marvelous job with this. I enjoyed it immensely.

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015

Thanks, Sasha - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

Well expressed sentiments of love and romance for a loved one. Excellent rhyming and imagery to convey your thoughts. The essence of romance is captured well within your poem. Good luck in the contest. Faye

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015

Thanks, Faye - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

A beautiful love poem. I enjoyed the read and felt the love for this lady coming through your words to her. Blessings and good luck in the contest. Patricia

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015

Thanks, Patricia.

Steve

Comment from Jackarrie

Exceptional

Hi Steve

This is absolutely brilliant, you were able to stick to just two rhymes all the way through the beautiful poem. Really well chosen words for a Valentine poem. A very strong contender, and a deserved six

Well done
Mary

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015

Thanks, Mary

Steve

Comment from flylikeaneagle

Exceptional

Well written with the rhymes, heart felt emotions and repeats. I like the bass and soprano, opposites make a harmony. An angel to embrace, all yours, to live out your days in joy, God's way with a long life. So sweet. Excellent. Have a blessed new year. flylikeaneagle

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015

Thanks so much for the warm review and the six stars - much appreciated.

Steve

Comment from kiwijenny

Exceptional

My job was to man the rudder . Dad built a 1ton yacht with a keel...magnificent image resonated with me.
I love your descriptions of an earthly angel...yours to embrace
God bless

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015

Thanks, jenny - in fact I was running out of rhymes ny the end and struggling to think how I could fit words like ace and keel in to the theme! It was either that or carapace and glockenspiel - now that WOULD have been an interesting poem!

Steve

reply by kiwijenny on 14-Jan-2015

Ha ha ha if it were a poem about a crabby Greman in lederhosen carapace and glockenspiel might work...now there's a prompt:0) ha ha ha

Comment from humpwhistle

Exceptional

Yes, Steve I can see the difficulty in creating a poem of this length, using only too rhymes. You pull it off with amazing grace (pardon). I didn't feel any compromises in your word choices, no speed bumps of twisted or tortured syntax. You chose your rhymes well, and wrote a beautiful poem.

Best of luck with the Committee.

Peace, Lee

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015

Thanks, Lee.

The last few lines were a bit of a scramble to squeeze in the rapidly diminishing list of rhyming words. After this, e were down to carapace and glockenspiel!

Steve

Comment from tw4fun

Excellent

There is much love expressed in your work... This lyrical poem gives itself a musical feeling with every line. It flows with natural rhythm-- One of my favorite pars is (Your presence is loving all hurts you can heal etc. -- great stanza. Thanks for sharing your work

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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015

Thank you for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Steve,

You romantic, you! Not used to seeing his side. I even looked at the name again to be sure I didn't misread it. (*>*)

Lovely sentiment. You are so good at all the different formats. Always a pleasure to read your work.

Good luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)


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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015

Thanks, Jax.

I try to be a jack of all trades (and hopefully master of one or two!) when it comes to poetry. Sometimes my inner soppiness just seeps into the work - I think that's two in a row, now.

Steve

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

Very well done
Nice flow with the description and rhyme
Great feeling and emotion.
A great entry to the contest.
Good luck

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2015

Thanks, Barb!

Steve