Blaze of Glory
A short baseball story36 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
Protect the Family Jewels at all cost. When I was in little league and pony league, there was no protection. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Protect the Family Jewels at all cost. When I was in little league and pony league, there was no protection. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Yes, yes, protect at all costs... Thanks charlie.
I don't remember having a cup either when I played as a kid.
Thanks again for reading. John
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You're welcome, John. Charlie
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi John.
Ouch. LOL A well told funny story of a lesson learned. Forget about nagging, action speaks louder. Great way you used Blaze of Glory. A sure sign of spring, baseball season.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Hi John.
Ouch. LOL A well told funny story of a lesson learned. Forget about nagging, action speaks louder. Great way you used Blaze of Glory. A sure sign of spring, baseball season.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Yes, I'm excited baseball in now here again. Thank you for reading.
John
Comment from Nosha17
I don't know much about baseball, my son used to play in Little League when we lived there. But I do know how exciting it is for players who shine when they are at the plate. Concisely written, showing the drama of the moment. Good dialogue and touch of humour. Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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I don't know much about baseball, my son used to play in Little League when we lived there. But I do know how exciting it is for players who shine when they are at the plate. Concisely written, showing the drama of the moment. Good dialogue and touch of humour. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Faye, thank you for an exceptional review. I always appreciate when you read my work.
John
Comment from adewpearl
August barked... love that description of setting
you set the stage well in your opening
I like the use of terse lines
great sound effects that bring the game to life
great use of nonverbal communication in the knees buckled passage
excellent character development
Brooke
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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August barked... love that description of setting
you set the stage well in your opening
I like the use of terse lines
great sound effects that bring the game to life
great use of nonverbal communication in the knees buckled passage
excellent character development
Brooke
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Brooke, thank you for a great review. It's one of the best you've written for me.
John
Comment from sibhus
Ha, ha, yeah, that's quite a different take on Blaze of Gory. Good crisp descriptions that really set the scene, and generate an interest right away. The dialogue is realistic, and the ending was totally unexpected, but it was definitely humorous. Good entry for the contest and good luck.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Ha, ha, yeah, that's quite a different take on Blaze of Gory. Good crisp descriptions that really set the scene, and generate an interest right away. The dialogue is realistic, and the ending was totally unexpected, but it was definitely humorous. Good entry for the contest and good luck.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Thank you. I'm glad you stopped by to read. John
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Now this was an entertaining and funny slice of flash fiction. Almost by-passed it due to the baseball billing but glad I didn't.
Well written and eye-wateringly pleasant to read.
Nice job.
GMG
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Hi there,
Now this was an entertaining and funny slice of flash fiction. Almost by-passed it due to the baseball billing but glad I didn't.
Well written and eye-wateringly pleasant to read.
Nice job.
GMG
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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GMG, thank you for the excellent review. Always appreciated. John
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Cup sizes for women definitely hold a different meaning. Good old dad, had to do it though. Teach the kid a lesson, but he went down in a 'Blaze of glory.'
Well done John, :-) Good luck in the contest....
:-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Cup sizes for women definitely hold a different meaning. Good old dad, had to do it though. Teach the kid a lesson, but he went down in a 'Blaze of glory.'
Well done John, :-) Good luck in the contest....
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 17-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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That's the funniest review I've had in forever! I'm still laughing at your "cup sizes" reference. That's great!
Carolyn, you're the best. John
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HEEE HEEE HEEEE, have to make a funny now and then just to show you how honery I am. Good night buddy. Carolyn
Comment from alf collier
Hi jmdg1954. What does one with except 'ouch'? loved the story, though. It seems to me there is no other suitable title for this, alf
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Hi jmdg1954. What does one with except 'ouch'? loved the story, though. It seems to me there is no other suitable title for this, alf
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Alf, thank you much. I appreciate your review and commentary. John
Comment from kriver
Good joke he pulled on his Dad,
and on the rest of the team.
Because he was wearing a cup.
Hence the reason for his laughter.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Good joke he pulled on his Dad,
and on the rest of the team.
Because he was wearing a cup.
Hence the reason for his laughter.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Thank you for reading and sharing. John
Comment from Sasha
You nailed this one...so to speak. Great work with this contest and a dynamite entry too. I got a real kick out of this one and wish you all the best.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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You nailed this one...so to speak. Great work with this contest and a dynamite entry too. I got a real kick out of this one and wish you all the best.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Thank you for an encouraging review, valarie. Always appreciated. John