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Comment from DreamtwithClarity
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Interesting point of view and original choice of writing. I've never seen a video attachment to a poem, but you've done it and it is something to see and experience for myself. Nice work

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 Comment Written 11-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
    interesting...hm...Well hard to please starves sometimes....its a picky personal form of self abuse. Usually associated with animal mutilations. According to the FBI files anyway...nice work is a perception. love michael
Comment from Janet Foor
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Food for thought is a great concept. I liked the imagery in this piece. Excellent line "choreographed wings my soul". Not sure of the whole meaning but it is definitely thought provoking.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
    ah well...who is Mona Lisa...why do we die ,,.and...and how is it possible...?ah Janet ...hi...-smile- the whole meaning...hmm...who's....each has his or her own truth of being. measured against Jesus. ...smile- alright thanks....love Michael
Comment from amahra
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This one flew over my head. Get it! Flew over my head. Okay, I know that was corny. But I liked the poem mostly for your choice of words and phrasing. Loved the art work of the birds flying overhead. I just had to say that one more time. LOL!

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
    hahaha...-kneeslap-...lol...-headshake-...yes maam I shore do.....McMurphy and me are relations...-headnod-....ahh thank you...its its okay...I do all the time....if they cant hear you...scream. ..-wink-....love Michael
Comment from amada
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Food for thought, very well said. This poem is open to individual interpretations, I think. Nice poem, my fave line "choreographed wings my soul..." For sure, I have seen birds dance in the sky, the most beautiful, freeing thing. Thank you for the memory!

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
    yes maam....it is isn't it. hi Beautiful...-smile-.....yes insync acrobats ....many heartbeats symphonied ....-smile- ah your most welcome...just great to hear from you. love Michael
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
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Hello poet friend and I hope you are doing well these days.
I enjoyed your poem and when you write your work is refreshingly different from most.
Keep up the good work.
Loyd

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
    Hello Sr.....-smile-....ah well thank you....yea I'm still swinging a pretty mean right hand....thanks for asking and noticing....love Michael
reply by Loyd C. Taylor, Sr on 11-Jun-2015
    It was my pleasure, keep up the good work. Loyd C. Taylor, Sr.
Comment from MizKat
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Hi Michael,

As usual you have written a very nice poem. As my memory is swiftly going away I don't always understand what people are writing. Then If I try to figure it out I get a headache. Oh, the joys of old age. I'm 78 now.

Love you bunches, son, Mom

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
    Hi mom....-smile- ah hell dont worry about it...me too...some of the of stuff I read on here...I'm pretty sure is Martian influenced...-wink-...ah from what I here...those "lost" moments of time...are when "they" took you to there spaceship....so as we can see life is not over....as Karen Carpentor said before anorexic skin was shed...its only just begon....-smile- just playing ......love you bunches too...Michael
reply by MizKat on 10-Jun-2015
    You're such a sweet heart. I'll try to read more of your poetry.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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Excellent poem, flowing phrases, I can imagine the birds gathering in the sky in a swarm, to leave the colder areas for warmer areas, and also thoughts are like birds gathering together to process your thoughts to match your soul

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
    Hi Sandra ...smile....well thank you very much.im not sure where they're going, or even if they do; but they sure do travel well.....smile love michael
Comment from dmt1967
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I like this poem and the picture that goes with it. The title is a bit misleading however as I didn't see any reference to food in it. That could be me though. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
    for thought...food for thought...my Dad used to say that...well yell it, you know just before came upstairs and slapped us ...my brothers and I...around lil' bit....we didn't really like....or agree with bed time...so we'd find other things to do....one night...we just couldn't quit laughing...you know ...the harder you try...the worse you gotta let loose....lol...ahhh well,he'd been yelling for quite a while...food for thought...-wink-...when suddenly I saw stars....Sammy Davis and a bunch of the rat pack all dressed in white.....also out of sensory perception I saw ...or heard...felt...yes ...that's it....felt my brothers face change shape as my Dads hand slapped the grin off of him......and then he left...the ahh laughing changed shape also...to huffing and all kind of undignified sounds...and we looking at each other....and man he sure looked funny...so I started laughing again....and I'll be damned if he didn't too. My Dad knew we were different at that point. Anyway....appreciate ya man.....love Michael
Comment from Eric1
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Hi Micheal, I hope this poem is open to interpretation because the more I read it the more I associate it with death,
The patron saint of lost causes,
Eye witness departure,
Catch and release perfect life,
Forehead kissed heartbeat freed,

Just my own interpretation on your wonderful poem my friend.

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
    Hi Eric....-smile- of course it is....it would be anyway. yea I see what you mean ...now....ah I was watching the video....I like that lady....her sound...her...stance...but it was the swarm of birds in the beginning and end....that grabbed my attention.....and just wrote this...-smile- alright have great night....love michael
reply by Eric1 on 10-Jun-2015
    Cheers Micheal, It's morning here my friend 8am to be precise lol!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is an interesting write, Michael, you always have a wonderful way of writing things in your tercet form. I like the beginning line of the third stanza. I enjoyed reading it

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
    Hi Pam...-smile- ah well....i've an unnatural attraction for the three line form....summer dressed perfection...anyway you were saying....ah yes choreographed wings my soul...-wink-....swould you like some more wine....-smile-...ah haha thank you dear....love Michael...