Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "I May Never Tell You"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
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Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I read the piece then had to read it again. YOur author's notes pulled it together for me.
I could feel the every word that you wrote because I am there.
It was fantastic after I read the author's notes.
Very nicely stated
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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I read the piece then had to read it again. YOur author's notes pulled it together for me.
I could feel the every word that you wrote because I am there.
It was fantastic after I read the author's notes.
Very nicely stated
Comment Written 24-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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Comment from June Mae
Oh my goodness, I feel for the speaker in this work about fragmented love. I find the color and image completely unsettling, as the images are so sweet and calming. Subsequently, I WANT things to work out for the speaker. The image and tone contrast also offer some ambiguity about who "you" is thinking about--and definitely about who the speaker is.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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Oh my goodness, I feel for the speaker in this work about fragmented love. I find the color and image completely unsettling, as the images are so sweet and calming. Subsequently, I WANT things to work out for the speaker. The image and tone contrast also offer some ambiguity about who "you" is thinking about--and definitely about who the speaker is.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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Comment from boxergirl
I can so relate to this one, Brett. One sided love affairs are tough to handle. Such an emotional drain on the person living with someone who is still stuck in a past relationship. Better to just get a dog! They are loyal to a fault. 8-) Great picture by the way.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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I can so relate to this one, Brett. One sided love affairs are tough to handle. Such an emotional drain on the person living with someone who is still stuck in a past relationship. Better to just get a dog! They are loyal to a fault. 8-) Great picture by the way.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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I always say better to get a dog. They are loyal to a fault indeed. Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from RodG
We quickly relate to and empathize with the Speaker of this poem whose lover can't forget another woman from his past. We can understand why she is bitter yet isn't quite ready to walk out that door because she loves him. My favorite image is: "Tangle[d] sheets tell the story of the love you'll never find."
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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We quickly relate to and empathize with the Speaker of this poem whose lover can't forget another woman from his past. We can understand why she is bitter yet isn't quite ready to walk out that door because she loves him. My favorite image is: "Tangle[d] sheets tell the story of the love you'll never find."
Comment Written 24-Jun-2015
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Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
So you put up the picture of a dog so we'd think you were writing a poem about her eh? I thought you were writing it about the dog anyway, but your notes about it make me wrong, I guess. I loved the picture and your poem anyway.
Kat
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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Hi Brett,
So you put up the picture of a dog so we'd think you were writing a poem about her eh? I thought you were writing it about the dog anyway, but your notes about it make me wrong, I guess. I loved the picture and your poem anyway.
Kat
Comment Written 24-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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I liked the picture too and thought about telling this from the dog's perspective. Perhaps I should have. Appreciate your comments and support as always.
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I liked it regardless if it was written from the dogs perspective or the way you wrote it.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
An interesting poem about the inability of one person to get rid of the memories of another in order to open up and love the new one. I've been through this before and it hurts, especially when that person denies what's going on.
Good poem, good message,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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An interesting poem about the inability of one person to get rid of the memories of another in order to open up and love the new one. I've been through this before and it hurts, especially when that person denies what's going on.
Good poem, good message,
Rhonda
Comment Written 24-Jun-2015
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Comment from patcelaw
This is a sad story poem. To have someone loving another while pretending it to be another is a hard thing to deal with in a relationship. Patricia
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This is a sad story poem. To have someone loving another while pretending it to be another is a hard thing to deal with in a relationship. Patricia
Comment Written 24-Jun-2015
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Comment from CeciliaLynne
Your expression through your writing is excellent and uniquely
expressed. It clearly shares the pain and sadness of a one sided relationship where one has chosen to reject. The story of a love affair gone south and how it impacts the story teller unravels with each verse. Keeps your reader interested and empathizing until the end. The rhyming and rhythm is good. Could not verify that you were following any one style of writing. Making your poem for me a great free style poem as shared. Based on your chosen style of sharing my only comment would be that your choice bio use 'bout if intentional no need to consider about but both fits well in that second to last verse. Keep writing and share. I find it a pleasure to review your talented gift.
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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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Your expression through your writing is excellent and uniquely
expressed. It clearly shares the pain and sadness of a one sided relationship where one has chosen to reject. The story of a love affair gone south and how it impacts the story teller unravels with each verse. Keeps your reader interested and empathizing until the end. The rhyming and rhythm is good. Could not verify that you were following any one style of writing. Making your poem for me a great free style poem as shared. Based on your chosen style of sharing my only comment would be that your choice bio use 'bout if intentional no need to consider about but both fits well in that second to last verse. Keep writing and share. I find it a pleasure to review your talented gift.
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Comment Written 24-Jun-2015
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