Birthday Wishes
flash fiction23 total reviews
Comment from dmt1967
This is sad and brings up so many emotions. I often wonder with people living longer if the quality of life suffers. This is a good little story. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
This is sad and brings up so many emotions. I often wonder with people living longer if the quality of life suffers. This is a good little story. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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I truly appreciate your sharing this sad tale and your very encouraging review. Rod
Comment from Julia.
This story meets the max 60 word count and touches on a sad subject--getting older and the loss of mental faculty that goes with that. That said, I think the "weeping" in the last sentence is a bit overdone and feels stilted. Otherwise, though, it is a nice compact narrative.
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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
This story meets the max 60 word count and touches on a sad subject--getting older and the loss of mental faculty that goes with that. That said, I think the "weeping" in the last sentence is a bit overdone and feels stilted. Otherwise, though, it is a nice compact narrative.
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Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Thank you, Julia, for sharing "Birthday Wishes" and for your candid review. I did wonder if perhaps my last line was too melodramatic. Rod
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi...
_ It's amazing how when a person sets their mind to it, now much they can say in so few words.
_ Good story and entry.
_ Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
Hi...
_ It's amazing how when a person sets their mind to it, now much they can say in so few words.
_ Good story and entry.
_ Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
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Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Hi Jax. Yes, telling this story in only 60 words was a challenge. I truly appreciate your sharing "Birthday Wishes" and your kind praise. Rod