A Captive Heart Will Flee
ABC Poem23 total reviews
Comment from seaglass
This is beautiful It flowed so musically that I didn't notice it was ABC until the last few lines. The message is so true. I was in an abusive-possessive relationship (1st time) and it's hell...kills love stone dead. The tone reminds me of the mood my leaving left with my mate.
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This is beautiful It flowed so musically that I didn't notice it was ABC until the last few lines. The message is so true. I was in an abusive-possessive relationship (1st time) and it's hell...kills love stone dead. The tone reminds me of the mood my leaving left with my mate.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2015
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
ABC Poem
A Captive Heart Will Flee
by michaelcahill
Beautiful ABC poem about jealousy and doom. I like your author notes, it shows you love your wife very much and you trust her. Good job with the poem!
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ABC Poem
A Captive Heart Will Flee
by michaelcahill
Beautiful ABC poem about jealousy and doom. I like your author notes, it shows you love your wife very much and you trust her. Good job with the poem!
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Comment Written 23-Aug-2015
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I think you have a strong poem. The word choices are wonderful.
>>This jealousy, my blindness, seals my doom.
I'm not sure about the repetition here. Especially directly after it was written in the stanza before. That, for me, hurt the flow a bit. I did enjoy though that line. I think it really is a powerful line and the poem, and it's overall message, a strong one. Well done.
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I think you have a strong poem. The word choices are wonderful.
>>This jealousy, my blindness, seals my doom.
I'm not sure about the repetition here. Especially directly after it was written in the stanza before. That, for me, hurt the flow a bit. I did enjoy though that line. I think it really is a powerful line and the poem, and it's overall message, a strong one. Well done.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2015