Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Excellent entry for the city-haiku contest...Powerfully voiced with superb brevity and effect single-word satori lines. It meets all the requirements, as far as I can tell. fine alliteration in each haiku. The closing note is pitch perfect: gratitude...which they certainly deserve. Congrats...this is a strong contender for my vote.

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for your review, very kind comments and hopefully your vote. Blessings...........................

reply by rama devi on 30-Aug-2015

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Comment from l.raven

Excellent

no truer words were spoken...I donate to the vets and animal shelters...our vets put their loves on the line for us...died when we didn't want to,..they deserve to be respected and honored when they come home...and should be taken care of...as they were taking care of us...so very well written...Luff Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 29-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for your review and comments, greatly appreciated. Blessings

reply by l.raven on 29-Aug-2015

you are so very welcome...luff xxoo

Comment from sbedian

Good

The message this haiku sent is very strong. I like a haiku that is visual and has vivid imagery; this one does not seem to capture that as well. The last line "gratitude" didn't seem to fit with the other two before it, otherwise I thought this poem was pretty good. Keep writing!

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for your review and encouraging comments. Blessings

Comment from LeslieP5

Excellent

Excellent haiku suite on a topic that should be dear to us all - our veterans who have served the country and too many find themselves destitute and homeless. Yes, the government needs to do more to help those we owe a debt of gratitude to. Well done. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for your review and kind comments. Blessings

Comment from bard owl

Excellent

This suite of haikus really makes the reader stop and think about the injustices suffered by those who risked their lives for their country. You did a tremendous job of expressing their plight with very few words. This contest has a gazillion rules which you followed with ease. Best of luck in the contest with this excellent entry. Blessings, Linda

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for a stunning review and best wishes. Blessings.....................................

Comment from seaglass

Exceptional

The haikus are worthy of a six, but the message even more so. One would think when going into war, congress would knowingly plan ahead for the Vet's inevitable needs. It's not like we haven't been in war before after all. Each of these stand well alone, together they serve as a strong reminder of bloody war, the aftermath, and an inactive congress who would rather move into another war than to clean up after the last one..

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for this stunning review and six star rating, greatly appreciated. Blessings..............................

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

An effective haiku suite that focuses on the forgotten homeless vets on city streets. The urgent tone and voice of your poem resonated with me. Your poem evokes strength and compassion. Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for a stunning review and best wishes. Blessings.............................

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

We do owe our veterans a lot more than they are getting. To me though, this strays a bit from the city theme. I think your second one might be stronger if you just used "homeless" instead of "homelessness"; your third "gratitude" rather than " show gratitude". Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for your very kind and helpful review, I have made the changes. Your kindness is greatly appreciated.
Blessings..............................

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Amen amen amen amen
These men and women deserve our respect and honor
My daughter works in a VA hospital treating PTSD victims
She is helping
God bless

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for your very kind review; my husband is a total disabled vet and suffers from PTSD and other illnesses due to the war. Blessings..............................

reply by kiwijenny on 29-Aug-2015

Try wholetones. It's music and has helped people with PTSD

Comment from BLACKDYKE

Excellent

This haiku? is easy to understand and reward with a fiver, though it deserves more. A great veteran haiku (I ain't seen one before) and well worthy of entrance into this contest. They speak for themselves though some need a little more consideration than others. Great write. Eric

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Eric,
Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments. Blessings................................