Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

A happy family is a healthy family. This is very well written with an emotional flow of words, making for a good read. There is good imagery. Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015

Thank you c lucas :)

reply by c_lucas on 10-Sep-2015

You're welcome.

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Hi Mystery poet, this is a really wonderful entry for this particular competition, wonderful words to go with a joyous picture, I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015

Thank you Eric :)

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This senryu, joy and laughter fill, uses the daily idea of family and gives it a face and voice. The dependence, reliance, and eternal connection between kids and parents is evident in your poem. Nice.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015

Thank you Bill :)

Comment from janxavier

Excellent

Wooww .. just dos innocent lil questions .. make a mother s heart jump with glee. thank u fr ur poem . kudos to u . keep writing ..

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015

Thank you janxavier :)

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Love the line What's for dinner Mom? It brings up the feel of childhood. There are emotions and feelings in your words from the viewpoint of a child. Excellent senryu form with a theme all of us can relate to.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015

Thank you mermaids :)

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Five, seven and five syllables, about human emotions, two lines making a sentence and a sardonic conclusion...sounds like the definition of a senryu
I read someplace.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015

Thank you Lij red :)

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

This is a heart warming image of a lovely young mother and her two delightful children. The poem perfectly portrays the idea of a family wrapped in love, it goes hand in hand with the excellent image.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015

Thank you nomi :)

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

That is such a beautiful picture.It gives joy just to see the smiles and read your words. I do not know if this is a personal image of some you know, but a lovely gesture.
Good luck in the competition.
Best wishes,
RGstar

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015

Thank you RGstar :) the picture is from google :)

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

Was the last line to say "Okay, there goes the joy...". I wasn't sure if that was the reason for the joy and laughter or the joke. Either way I enjoyed it. I think my gender is clear from this poem. Well done.

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015

Thank you Michael :) this is a senryu about emotions, in my case the joy of being a mother and the love I have for my children. The satori is an observation of the life of parent and her children, not a joke nor the end of joy :)

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

I love the good-natured satire of this, that joy, laughter, and rejoicing take second place to "what's for dinner, Mom?" True to life. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2015

Thank you Jeanie :)