Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "If Drinking Will Kill Me"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
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Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
The rose is beautiful. It's my favorite flower, although I like the ones that have a deeper color. Your lyrics are nice too. I enjoyed them very much. You are so great at writing all kinds of things and I always look forward to reading them.
Kat
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2015
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Hi Brett,
The rose is beautiful. It's my favorite flower, although I like the ones that have a deeper color. Your lyrics are nice too. I enjoyed them very much. You are so great at writing all kinds of things and I always look forward to reading them.
Kat
Comment Written 09-Dec-2015
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Comment from TOMORAL
This would make a great country music song! As a recovering alcoholic I can relate to the pain the MC has. I thought it had its own rhythm thing going on. I like it!
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This would make a great country music song! As a recovering alcoholic I can relate to the pain the MC has. I thought it had its own rhythm thing going on. I like it!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2015
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Comment from CEO2020
Great Poem. In the first paragraph - I feel the hurt from his drink in the hands of another like the sight of a girlfriend with another man. In the second paragraph - I see him trying to win her back. In the third paragraph - I feel his rejection. In the fourth paragraph - He is ready to fight for her. In the fifth paragraph - he takes a lot at himself, who he is, where he's been, what he's doing, where he's going. In the sixth paragraph - he is concluding he has no future without her. In the end - he sees he near the end.
Great Poem...if I had a 6 star left I would give it
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Great Poem. In the first paragraph - I feel the hurt from his drink in the hands of another like the sight of a girlfriend with another man. In the second paragraph - I see him trying to win her back. In the third paragraph - I feel his rejection. In the fourth paragraph - He is ready to fight for her. In the fifth paragraph - he takes a lot at himself, who he is, where he's been, what he's doing, where he's going. In the sixth paragraph - he is concluding he has no future without her. In the end - he sees he near the end.
Great Poem...if I had a 6 star left I would give it
Comment Written 09-Dec-2015
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Comment from Eric1
Hi Brett, this is a wonderful set of lyrics that I really enjoyed reading, but they also read good as a poem, the rhythm allows for that, the rhyming - though you say in your notes not to bother looking for it - is excellent!
Good all round work I thought.
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Hi Brett, this is a wonderful set of lyrics that I really enjoyed reading, but they also read good as a poem, the rhythm allows for that, the rhyming - though you say in your notes not to bother looking for it - is excellent!
Good all round work I thought.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2015
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Comment from anabellapongasi
Nice song lyrics with a sad story of a heartbroken man drowning his sorrow by drinking. The repetition of the line "... if drinking will kill me I ain't got far to go"
expresses the hopelessness he feels.
Blessings,
Anabella
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Nice song lyrics with a sad story of a heartbroken man drowning his sorrow by drinking. The repetition of the line "... if drinking will kill me I ain't got far to go"
expresses the hopelessness he feels.
Blessings,
Anabella
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Comment from PoemsOfDD
Yes, if drinking won't kill you your broken heart will.
This is a very good 'free style' lyrics Brett MW. I could sense the jealousy as the jilted looked across the bar at his love lost and the desperation of drowning sorrows in a bottle. Good imagery and creatively written. Well done.
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Yes, if drinking won't kill you your broken heart will.
This is a very good 'free style' lyrics Brett MW. I could sense the jealousy as the jilted looked across the bar at his love lost and the desperation of drowning sorrows in a bottle. Good imagery and creatively written. Well done.
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Comment Written 09-Dec-2015
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A break up in a bar room between two people, and the third person is also present cannot lead to anything good. Stanza 4 line 2 reads man's who's shouldn't it be man's whose ? Or last man whose ? Last man who's ? NS if you drink to die it will actually take longer as when you stop drinking cold turkey without professional help you will die much quicker. (Just a thought)
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A break up in a bar room between two people, and the third person is also present cannot lead to anything good. Stanza 4 line 2 reads man's who's shouldn't it be man's whose ? Or last man whose ? Last man who's ? NS if you drink to die it will actually take longer as when you stop drinking cold turkey without professional help you will die much quicker. (Just a thought)
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Comment Written 09-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2015
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"who's" is the contraction of who is. "Whose" means it belongs to somebody. Glad you enjoyed these lyrics. Your comments and support appreciated.