This Aching Abyss
The silence is overwhelming...65 total reviews
Comment from His Grayness
I found this work to be amazingly creative in many dimensions, not only the highly abstract script, but the artwork and overall packaging used to deliver not only a rapid visual GRIP, but also the emotional consistency in the script, which left me with grueling contemplation. I'm always amazed at this talent of this fine author. HIS GRAYNESS
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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I found this work to be amazingly creative in many dimensions, not only the highly abstract script, but the artwork and overall packaging used to deliver not only a rapid visual GRIP, but also the emotional consistency in the script, which left me with grueling contemplation. I'm always amazed at this talent of this fine author. HIS GRAYNESS
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Thank you very much for reading, Vance.
I am truly glad you enjoyed reading this, and I appreciate your stellar assessment.
Take care. I'm very grateful for your review, as always.
~Dean
Comment from Neonewman
Damn! Well, I can certainly relate to this delicately deep poetic gesture. I have been single for so long now(and am comfortable in its misery)that I wouldn't even begin to know which way to turn if given the chance. Magnetic piece you have delivered.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Damn! Well, I can certainly relate to this delicately deep poetic gesture. I have been single for so long now(and am comfortable in its misery)that I wouldn't even begin to know which way to turn if given the chance. Magnetic piece you have delivered.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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That'[s exactly the sort of feelings I'm writing about here, Steve.
Thanks you for "getting it."
I'm very grateful for your time and your comments.
~Dean
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My pleasure as always my friend!
Comment from Margaret Ford
This is a sterling poem, Dean. You've written something very fine, here.
I'm not into special effects with poetry, but at least these effects seem to go along, and don't take anything away from your powerful words.
Congratulations on a job well done.
Margaret
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This is a sterling poem, Dean. You've written something very fine, here.
I'm not into special effects with poetry, but at least these effects seem to go along, and don't take anything away from your powerful words.
Congratulations on a job well done.
Margaret
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
Comment from Dawn Munro
Mmmmmmmmmmmmm...owwwwwww...ch. Dean, I know you too well, I think. I think this is somewhat biographical. It IS, however, incredibly beautiful. The music is wonderful too - while a bit melancholy, some of the squeals sound like sea creatures, which is always appealing to me (dolphins especially). OH!!! We've just reached the ending, and now I hear the underwater breathing - it IS sea creatures. THANK you for taking me diving! It's been FAR too long!!! I'm damn near crying... God , how I loved scuba...but back to your poem...
Death camps? Shudder...
(FABULOUS presentation again, too!)
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Mmmmmmmmmmmmm...owwwwwww...ch. Dean, I know you too well, I think. I think this is somewhat biographical. It IS, however, incredibly beautiful. The music is wonderful too - while a bit melancholy, some of the squeals sound like sea creatures, which is always appealing to me (dolphins especially). OH!!! We've just reached the ending, and now I hear the underwater breathing - it IS sea creatures. THANK you for taking me diving! It's been FAR too long!!! I'm damn near crying... God , how I loved scuba...but back to your poem...
Death camps? Shudder...
(FABULOUS presentation again, too!)
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
Comment from Janet Foor
I don't know as I've ever experienced this depth of pain but I have experienced fear and desperation and cried teardrops to fill an ocean as I cried out for help. So as I reread this piece, I felt a kindred spirit to the abyss and the fear to dare to dream.
A touching, heart wrenching piece to ponder.
As always, the vivid imagery comes through in your well chosen words.
Well done you.
Blessings
Janet
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I don't know as I've ever experienced this depth of pain but I have experienced fear and desperation and cried teardrops to fill an ocean as I cried out for help. So as I reread this piece, I felt a kindred spirit to the abyss and the fear to dare to dream.
A touching, heart wrenching piece to ponder.
As always, the vivid imagery comes through in your well chosen words.
Well done you.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
Comment from Oatmeal
Dean,
Well chosen words are excellent. The theme is strong and well chosen. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
Your feelings are very understandable and expressed through the poem.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Dean,
Well chosen words are excellent. The theme is strong and well chosen. Your feelings are expressed well. Your arrangement looks very nice. The flow is smooth.
There was no SPAG. No typos. No homophones. No problems at all.
Your feelings are very understandable and expressed through the poem.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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I'm glad you have taken the time to read my poetry again, Oatmeal.
It's appreciated.
Thank you.
~Dean
Comment from Lu Saluna
This is an outstanding piece of writing. A poor soul in so much pain feeling beyond numb. Slipping so far inside themselves where they can feel a little something.
The first three stanza speak of someone so far outside their body (disassociative state) they can't feel anything. The last stanza speaks of the individual's struggle/fight to come back to feel, to be a little bit human again.
Very well written, a horror to experience.
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This is an outstanding piece of writing. A poor soul in so much pain feeling beyond numb. Slipping so far inside themselves where they can feel a little something.
The first three stanza speak of someone so far outside their body (disassociative state) they can't feel anything. The last stanza speaks of the individual's struggle/fight to come back to feel, to be a little bit human again.
Very well written, a horror to experience.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
Comment from Just2Write
This poem is heart-wrenching, Dean. It touches deep into my soul - and I came across it when I could use some insight into pain and depression. I never thought this kind of mindset would be mine to bear - yet at the moment, it is.
Your skill as a writer is superb - and as always your talent comes shining through for you, perhaps even when the sun does not.
Rose
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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This poem is heart-wrenching, Dean. It touches deep into my soul - and I came across it when I could use some insight into pain and depression. I never thought this kind of mindset would be mine to bear - yet at the moment, it is.
Your skill as a writer is superb - and as always your talent comes shining through for you, perhaps even when the sun does not.
Rose
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Awww, Rose. I hope you're not feeling blue.
I've always considered you to be such a kind and caring soul. You deserve to be happy.
I really mean that.
We all have our ups and downs. After all, life is a lot like a rollercoaster in many regards.
At least it is for me.
But, like a rollercoaster, even though we might have been terrified while the ride was in full swing, blazing its path along the track at breakneck speeds, we always come out smiling, after all is said and done. Exhilarated, even.
So, thank you so much for taking the time to read AND understand this. Only someone who has been there, done that, and gone through it themselves would be able to.
Keep your chin up and know that you too are loved.
Warmest wishes, my dear friend, and thanks so much again for reading.
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Thanks for the uplifting note Dean. You've made my day a little brighter. Hugs to you my friend.
Comment from pharp
Dean,
This is one outstanding piece of poetry, placing your feelings out for all to see. What you have penned I see in my husband everyday, the emptiness, the pain, nightmare from the wars. I can truly understand how you feel and admire your ability and talent to write and I pray it brings you some comfort. My husband is so secluded, he only relates to me and my youngest son who also fought in the war. Please know my friend, I know the medicine does not always help but I pray you will get some relief and comfort soon. Always in my prayers...........Portia
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Dean,
This is one outstanding piece of poetry, placing your feelings out for all to see. What you have penned I see in my husband everyday, the emptiness, the pain, nightmare from the wars. I can truly understand how you feel and admire your ability and talent to write and I pray it brings you some comfort. My husband is so secluded, he only relates to me and my youngest son who also fought in the war. Please know my friend, I know the medicine does not always help but I pray you will get some relief and comfort soon. Always in my prayers...........Portia
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
Comment from sanejane
This is outstanding. A+++, give or take a +. Which brings me to a question. Can I use html in these messages? if I'd crossed out the words "or take" with htnl, would it have worked? Another question: could I have your permission to post this onto my WordPress blog, or is it private?
Your presentation is delicious; the smoke rising between the stanzas, the cupped hands...
The poem tells me - as if I didn't already know, from reading a previous post - that you have spent time in the abyss. It's a dark, empty place, with nothing but echoes for company; echoes which you try to dismiss, but once you enter the abyss, even those hollow sounds are easier to bear than the voices of your loved ones.
Please tell me that this remarkable poem describes no more than a memory.
Blessings,
Jane
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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This is outstanding. A+++, give or take a +. Which brings me to a question. Can I use html in these messages? if I'd crossed out the words "or take" with htnl, would it have worked? Another question: could I have your permission to post this onto my WordPress blog, or is it private?
Your presentation is delicious; the smoke rising between the stanzas, the cupped hands...
The poem tells me - as if I didn't already know, from reading a previous post - that you have spent time in the abyss. It's a dark, empty place, with nothing but echoes for company; echoes which you try to dismiss, but once you enter the abyss, even those hollow sounds are easier to bear than the voices of your loved ones.
Please tell me that this remarkable poem describes no more than a memory.
Blessings,
Jane
Comment Written 27-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2016
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Yes, HTML is the only codes that the FanStory website recognizes, Jane.
So yes, if you know HTML, it does work on this site.
Also, you certainly may have my permission to post this onto your WordPress blog, if you like. I would consider it an honor.
I am a diagnosed manic depressive and have been for the past twenty-five years. I have days when I experience euphoric, mountain top highs, and days when I'm literally walking through the valley of the shadow of death.
But, I fear no evil.
What I write at the time; that's what I'm feeling at that moment. When the feelings of loneliness and despair become too great, I write about them, just as I did here.
I feel it's essential that I do--a necessity.
Having said that, while some of this is based on memory, some of it is all too real as well.
As you know, writing is great therapy. In fact, it is some of the best therapy there is, I feel.
Thank you once again for taking the time to drop by and read what I've written. I appreciate your time and generous support.
I hope I've adequately answered all of your questions, Jane.
If I haven't, I'm pretty easy to find, heh-heh...
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I really appreciate your openness Dean, and I empathise. Manic depression is a destructive illness, although treatments have improved over the years. I'll look at your posts in a different light from now on. I had no idea of your struggles.
One of my daughters has been diagnosed manic depressive, although I think she has BPD. Unfortunately, she hasn't coped well with her condition.
Thank you, you've answered all of the questions I asked, and a couple I would have liked to ask.
Warmly,
Jane.
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It's not something I'm ashamed of, Jane.
It's just an obstacle I have to deal with and do battle with every day.
One of these days, I'll win.
Thanks again.
~Dean :)
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Did I make it sound as if I thought you were ashamed? If so, I apologise. I used similar words to the kind I receive from readers of my blog every time I post poems about my difficulties. They call me brave and open and honest. Maybe they see shame in my situation - it hadn't occurred to me.
Warm regards, Jane
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No, you didn't make me feel that way at all, Jane. I was simply speaking from a personal perspective. It had nothing to do with what you said, or how you said it.
Take care, my friend, and thanks again.
~Dean :}
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And you, Dean ~ be well.
Blessings,
Jane